Hot Hotel Night(s)
Amazing story Lyla!
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Your intro/prep chapters are the perfect length to get the reader invested in the story, right before you slap them in the face with your superbly detailed (and raunchy) sex scenes. Very well done! I especially love how you give the men their own personalities/tastes, not to mention different names (not just stranger A & B like some eroticas).
Moreover, your gradual escalation towards more and more lewd scenes/situations in the story is great for keeping the reader wanting more, definitely a winning strategy for growing a fanbase. Also, the secret (which I won't mention here) is very well done. I honestly didn't see it coming!
As for where improvements could be made, I think a nice touch to your writing style would be to separate out the chunks of text some more. When you have dialogue between characters, it's much easier on the eyes/mind if you put them as separate lines. That way the reader's eyes naturally flow downwards through the conversation, as if they're sitting there right next to the characters. Moreover, I highly recommend making the thought text (like when the main character thinks) italicized. Again, this isn't really NEEDED, but it's a good quality of life improvement for the reader. It just makes it easier to separate the thought and the speech.
To end, fantastic story! It's sad that the story has ended, but I definitely see potential in your writing for more stories in the future, maybe even some continuation of this story (like a spin off of her story back home, with her new boy toys always around to satisfy her).
Good luck and keep writing! I can't wait to see your future writing!