TS Rose

London

Two writers, one published, one with an English degree, one a psychologist, bringing both experience and youth to our writing.

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It's just about us.

A lovely young romance, which brings together the thoughts of 4 main characters as they struggle into adulthood.

The build up is slow, but the tension racks up as one of them gets pregnant.

It needs a bit of work on punctuation and paragraphs, but otherwise an extremely enjoyable read. It's not finished yet, so we can't fully see where the plot is going, but it coming along nicely. The characters are fresh and very natural, and also likeable which is rare.

Dialogue is exceptionally good.

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And then she went missing

The writer builds up tension through shifting between past and present tense and using various people's points of view, as they examine the loss of Remmy. This is very similar to the way in which a mystery film is crafted, and is very well done indeed. The end has a great twist. We enjoyed the story very much. The plot could have included just a few more red herrings.

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A cool little hell

This writer combines a good detective tale with a horror story, quite successfully. The writing style is fast paced and matches the intensity of the action, but just occasionally the story dragged a little. Many of the very short chapters could be combined, as there is no logical reason to split them, but there are some very good hooks at the end of some chapters, impelling the reader to carry on reading, On the whole the story is well written, with a choppy writing style, short sentences, and speedy dialogue that match this type of tale very well. What description there was, was very well written, and not overdone. We were disappointed with the ending, feeling that much more could have been made of it. This is clearly the first in a sequel, because the villain disappears at the end. We enjoyed the dialogue, which was well written and very clear, and on the whole the quality of writing was definitely better than average.

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Him

Brilliantly written, with the tension racking up all the way through. Like all great short stories, this tale has a double twist at the end.

We can only recommend this to everyone.

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Fight for life

This writer is clearly a master at the horrific, and brings with a a terrified group of characters that carry you along for the ride. Terrifying, full of gore, and full of action from the very first moment, which make for excellent first chapters. Plenty of time later to get to know the characters, and already with the running over of the victim, we see some steel in the heroine's character. We can't really rate the plot, there isn't enough of the story written as yet to do so. Well written, and a must for lovers of pure horror.

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Caturday - the day of the cat.

A brilliant expose of life as an intelligent cat.

There are similarities with the film 'The incredible journey' but what makes the difference here is that these cats actually have evolved to develop their knowledge of human language so that they both understand and speak in the English tongue, complete with local dialect. The story is an incredibly funny love story, and an adventure-filled tale of cats.

We ended up laughing so much we were crying.

Please read this book - it will make you feel good for the rest of the day.

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Help me believe

A lovely, heart-warming story, with faith at its heart. We particularly like that the tale started out with Daisy being the one who needed saving, but then learned that Clyde needed help too. There are some grammatical errors, but the one that really should be addressed is that many of the sentences go on too long, and more full stops are required. Otherwise a great read.

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Deception by Proxy!

A thoroughly enjoyable story, set during the Georgian era in England. The major is a delightful character with a dry sense of humour. The antics the family get up to in order to entrap him are wonderful, and create some remarkable twists in the tale.

At its heart a love story, but so much more.

Very reminiscent of Georgette Heyer's novels.

We loved it.

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Learning to swim

A very unusual premise for a love story, that gives the book significant depth. As Jamie learns to swim he overcomes the trauma of his past. Very well written, even down to correct use of punctuation, which so few writers manage, and a story that is heart-warming. We could have done with another twist in the tale, but perhaps that's just us. This story is really solid, and we can recommend it which is not something we do often.

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Love, Mushroom soup and Murder

Well, who couldn't love a book with that title. It's a great read, full of twists and turns, and characters that are a little unusual with quirks that are interesting. The only reason we didn't give the plot 5 stars is because the story isn't finished, so we can't quite grasp all the details yet. However, this is a tale we can strongly recommend, and we don't say that about many books.

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Astarte, the Adventure

Well now, if you're looking for something different, a new take on literature, ideas that have never been explored before, and a radically unique style of writing, you won't find anything better than this.

Dip your toe in, you won't quite believe what you're reading - it's that good.

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Ten random and very short stories

This is a writer filled with 100 great ideas, and 10 fantastic stories. The quality of the writing is excellent, the tales are intriguing, often with great twists at the end. Just what a good short story should be. This is a book to take with you everywhere, so that you can fill those spare seconds of waiting time with pure joy.

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Patient Blue

We loved this story, from its slightly wacky plot in a post apocalyptic world, to its focus on multiple characters, who blend together seamlessly to build the tale. It reminded us of a cross between the Hitchhikers' Guide to the Galaxy and Stephen King's best known work, The Stand. The author is extremely talented, both as a writer and in his character development, and we can only add to other readers - go on, enjoy the journey.

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Float

Hi, a really great concept for this story. We thoroughly enjoyed the idea of the incident which was so frightening, but your heroine survived it and almost seemed to thrive on it. This chapter is really good, apart from a few grammatical errors. But we can't see much plot because obviously you're only on the first chapter. We'd like to know something about where this story is going next. A last sentence at the end of the paragraph, giving us a clue to this, would be very helpful

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Witches

A good writer, with some considerable talent at blending first rate dialogue with action. It all serves to keep the reader intrigued.

The story has a lot of convenience in its plotline, and things do seem to happen a bit too easily, without some thought as to how the heroine and her victim arrived in Rome, why he would ever accept a challenge from her, then come without backup. Some more depth to the way in which the plot develops wouldn't go amiss But all in all, the writer clearly knows her target audience, and writes very well for it.

Very admirable to have such a high level of talent when so young.

We are very impressed.

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Days of oblivion

A unique book, that carries the reader through the dreadful period of the collapse of the world and all we know of it. Very well written with a great sense of atmosphere and fascinating characters. A little confusion around the timeline in reading the story, but all in all, we thoroughly enjoyed it.

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Bad Boy's Girl

A great little teen romance, with the technique of seeing things from the male perspective, as well as the female one.

It could do with a twist or two in the plotline, but is well told, with an ending that leaves the reader comforted that good things can happen.

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The Flip-Phone Murders

Great humour as the main character's thoughts are exposed to the reader. Lots to keep us interested. It's hard to know where the plot line is going this early on in the story, but the work on it so far looks sound. It's so refreshing to read something that isn't porn in disguise or a teenage wolf story dressed up as a romance. There's been some good quality research here, or the writer knows this world very well.

A few sentences could do with being split into two, but overall the writing is of excellent quality..

Looking forward to reading more.

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Influenced

A great story, which we thoroughly enjoyed. Stayed up late reading it, so it must have been good. The characters are very well defined, right from the first chapter, the author has a good grasp of writing and punctuation and grammar are excellent - a far cry from many stories on here. Well worth reading.

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The River and the Roses

A remarkably well-written story, with a fascinating main character. A solid ending, and a beginning that captured the imagination right from the start and held it.

The plot held together well, with all the details revealed very carefully, and not too soon. We loved it.

By far the best novel we have read on Inkitt.

T & S Rose.

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B.R.A.I.N

Hi,

We enjoyed your story, which had a very good plot, and some interesting characters. Nice to read something that isn't a basic romance for a change. The philosophy was engaging, and challenging too.

The novel is generally very well written, and we can only make a few minor comments about things to improve it.

In your first chapters particularly, you have a tendency to 'tell' rather than 'show.' Don't tell us what has happened up to now, make us experience it as your character moves through the scenery. For example, let her look at a graph, exclaiming at the sudden raise in temperate to an even more dangerous level, or let her interact directly with a robot who is doing something important, so that we can experience what this future world is like, rather than just reading about what has already happened. As the story progresses you have more show and less tell which is great This is often a problem at the start of a book when writers feel like they have to share everything all at once. The idea is to slowly let the reader learn more and more of the problems and background as you move through the chapters, by experiencing them.

Don't give them everything at once.

A second issue is the number of times you use a verb to explain that someone is speaking. Thankfully most of these were 'said' but even that can become very repetitive. It is not always necessary to indicate that someone is speaking with the 'said or alternative' verb. If there are only two people, it is obvious that each one is likely to speak in turn so just leave it out.

Alternatively, where there are more than two people, you could use an alternative approach instead of a speaking verb.

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'May I bring you a drink of some kind?,.' The waiter, who had glided silently up behind us, now stood slightly bowed, ready to receive our order.

I could have screamed at this interruption. It was hard enough trying to find the right words for what I meant. 'No, not now.'

He nodded and moved away clearly sensing the atmosphere between us.

We hope these are helpful comments, and wish you all the best for your future writing career.

T & S Rose.

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Severed bond

We loved the secret of this story, and the author's natural way of writing dialogue. It's a really good read, and we can recommend it to anyone. A few grammatical and punctuation issues, but generally very well written with a freshness to the main character and excellent internal dialogue.

A surprising ending that will leave you inspired.

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Tuviel and Sebastian

This author is an accomplished writer, offer the reader a romance that you can sink your teeth into. Every moment, every breath, is that opportunity to rekindle the passion of first love.

The author's writing style is easy, with moments flowing deeply into each other. Our one criticism is that the plot seems to rest a great deal on the insecurities brought about by a previous love affair that ended tragically, but at times one simply wants to scream, 'enough already, get over yourself woman'. It would, we feel, have been helpful to have brought into the plot something much more troubling to their relationship in current time, that has the capacity to tear them apart.

But perhaps that is yet to come...

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|Magnetic Love

This book is for those who love vampiric romance. It is very well written, with a good balance of dialogue, internal thoughts and activities. Our one criticism is that is drags along quite a lot, before getting to the real problem around chapter 53, already 100,000 words in.

We think this could be edited to lose around half of this to make for a better, tighter tale, with a more defined plot line.

We suspect the writer has not planned out all chapters in advance, and is simply enjoying the process of writing itself. This may be what is slowing the plot down.

It is unusual, in that unlike many vampire tales it is not an action based story, but rather is based on characters, and character growth and development. The characters are well crafted, and entertaining. Dialogue is sound, and full of humour.

A good read.

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The beginning.

We're loving this story with its mute hero, and his mate getting up to everything it is possible. for two lads to do.

And some impossible things too. It is written with some clever touches of humour which relieve the relentless, forward moving action of the tale. It's certainly not boring, keeping you in action mode all the way through. Yet there are periods of introspection too, that add to our appreciation of the characters. Well worth the read. If we have any tiny criticism, it's that the plot tend to be confusing from time to time, and we found ourselves having to reread sections to work out what was going on. But otherwise brilliantly written.

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forgotten what could have been

This writer takes the trial and tribulation that befall a graduate as they seek to find their place the world to another level. More than a love story, this book unfolds into a great mystery of existence. It's beautifully written, and for those old enough to remember them will transport us back to our school and uni days, and for those of us young enough to look forward to them will give us fair warning that all is not as it seems.

We loved it.

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Lightning seeker

If you think about science fiction as endlessly fighting robots, lost of high tech, and no human interaction then this story is not for you. It shows the people begin the future, the fact that change isn't always for the better as people lose their jobs, and their self respect with it.

A great tale, with a heroine who isn't afraid, and even when she is, she gets the job done. We're enjoying it enormously.

The only reason we haven't rated the plot as a 5 is because the novel is not finished yet, so we can't quite see the shape of it all. But it's a great read, for everyone, even if you think you don't like Science Fiction.

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The actual beginning

As love stories go, this one is charming, bring with it the complexities of a relationship between two people of different nations and different backgrounds. We loved the introduction of the Cuban Spanish into the tale, but we can't rate the plot highly because it isn't finished yet, and we can't see ahead to the twists and turns that we are sure are yet to come. There are some minor punctuation and grammatical errors, but nothing to get in the way of the story. A great beginning, and we look forward to seeing an equally great ending.

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Chasing butterflies

This author writes about love in a way that makes your heart sing, and bleed.

Though very short, this story has everything anyone interested in romance could ever want. The writer is a real wordsmith too, using simple and effective sentence structure to reel us in to the world of the lovers. A lesson to all those writers who think an impressive string of adjectives and adverbs are what make for good writing. The simplicity here cuts to the bone, carving out an emotional reaction from the reader.

We loved it.

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Alpha's boy

It's difficult to review this story at this point, because we can't tell the shape of the whole plot, with the story unfinished. So unfortunately we can't yet rate the plot highly. We think it has promise though. The main character is delightful, strong in the face of adversity, yet caring about her little step sister. The brutal punishment her father and step mother put her through is horrific, and detailed in such a way as to make the reader feel every hit and thrust.

Very well written. There is some magic in this story, mainly in the way the character's internal dialogue shines through. A great tale.

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Grounded in gratitude and stability through your root chakra

The writer has balanced, in one perfect chapter, the tale of her difficulties in leaving her home country and fitting into a new culture, with the knowledge of the root chakra and her insight into how to balance it to bring harmony. This could easily be made into a longer self help book.

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Walls around us.

We really envy this writers ability to write poetry. For us, an 80,000 word novel is nothing, but a poem that says it all in just a few short lines is so far beyond our abilities we might as well be reaching for the sky.

These poems are beautiful. Our favourite is remember. We don't know why we liked it so much, just that it moved us a great deal. For an uplifting read, please read these. They will improve your mood no end.

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The flower on the riverbank.

This book transported us to a foreign world. Its characters, whilst strange to western civilisation, are written most tenderly, and bring complex motivations to what is essentially a love story with a difference. We adored the writer's descriptions of this strange world, and loved the plot that kept pulling the childhood friends apart then bringing them back together again. A story to be treasured as much for the quality of its writing as for the love story itself. It would make a beautiful, artistic movie that could easily become a cult film.

The only thing we found wrong with it was the writer's constant changes between past and present tense verbs throughout the story. We heartily recommend it to anyone who is bored with your average teen romance, and wants something more meaty to get their teeth into.

It reminds us very much of the works by Guy Gavriella Kay, a fantasy writer of bygone years. who also wrote heart-breakingly beautiful love stories.

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River cries

A powerful tale of one's past catching up with the present. We enjoyed the way in which the father's slightly manipulative behaviour helped to shape the main character's views of what a partner should be. Altogether an interesting read, although we can't fully tell as yet where the plot is going. The quality of the writing is generally excellent, although there are a few unfortunate times when the present tense creeps into the past tense. However, it is a really good read especially for those looking for something more than the usual light hearted romance. This story has depth.

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St Trinian's School - Girls vs Boys

This writer has truly captured the rebellious spirit of the St Trinian's girls, but has added even more nuances to the brand by creating a wonderful Romeo/Juliet scenario.

The way the boys at the boys school mirror the images and attitudes of the girls but in a slightly more masculine way is very well written, The plot is sound, although we would like a little more clarity on why the headmaster of the boy's school has such a strong desire for revenge. Perhaps this will become clear in later chapters. There are a few minor punctuation errors, but these can be ignored because the rest of the writing is very good and of high quality. Altogether this is a writer with a huge talent for developing characters.

We would love to see more works from her that deviate from fan fiction and are original stories.

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Nothing last forever

The pathos in this tale is all in the dreadful way the heroine is treated by her mother. This relationship is written in a way that is very moving and we genuinely feel for the main character. The writer seems to be bringing some strong personal experience into her writing here as it felt very real. We enjoyed the introduction of the island dialect, which helped the characters stand out from others. The plot seems very simplistic, although, because it is not yet finished, we don't know what twists in the tale may yet be coming. Some clear grammatical and punctuation issues, but the strong emotion in the story helps the reader to ignore these.

Interesting.

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The boy with the black hoodie.

It's really much to early to leave a review for this tale, as there is only one chapter. However, we very much like the plotline, as it leaves room for all sorts of interesting things to happen. We also enjoyed the way the main character was written.

We'd like to encourage this writer to continue, as they have talent, which is evident in the internal thoughts of the character that are full of confidence, and very amusing. Some punctuation and grammatical errors which could be easily fixed with a package like Grammarly.

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Malefic

We can't really rate the plot, because the story isn't finished, but it is certainly shaping up to be a fascinating story. A most interesting read.

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The Branding

The plotline is interesting, but it's far too early to judge the plot as a whole. Good quality writing skills that keep you engaged, with a small tendency to overwrite, that sometimes stops the reading from immersing themselves wholly in the tale. Altogether one to watch.

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Pale Hunt

For a vampire tale, this story has a lot more going for it than most. The interplay between the intrepid heroine, Blair, and her friend Rena is fascinating, with Rena seeming to develop her own bravery from being associated with Blair. There is a most surprising turn of events near the end, leaving the reader wondering what on earth was happening, but in the final chapter we learn that all it not as it seems. We would like a little more clarity on the time period the story is set in. At times it seems almost Victorian. Well written, with excellent grammar and spelling - always a bugbear for us when these are of poor quality. We thoroughly enjoyed this story and could recommend it to all lovers of vampire tales and others willing to try one.

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Without you.

A powerful tale, well written, with characters that are interesting and intense. It has a most dramatic twist, which is just what all short stories should have. For those who love a romantic tale, this one is well worth reading.

We've pointed out a couple of grammatical and punctuation issues to the writer, but on the whole those can be forgiven, because the word choice is beautiful, and the story is very moving.

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The Hand of God

We don't normally leave a review until a tale is finished, because it's not really fair to comment on plot until one gets to the end of it. However, this story intrigued us. There is mystery, suspense, and most interestingly, the effect on the community when two priests are at odds with each other.

Huge potential here for one of those drama filled films, with no one really knowing what happened until the end of the film. The characters are impactful, without being overly dramatic, each settled into a self=security of fully knowing who and what they are, warts and all.. We thoroughly enjoyed it, and look forward to seeing it completed. No teenage angst here, this is a story for grown ups, with real characters and frightening motivations.

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Jeen's thoughts

It is important to note that this is not a fictional story. Rather it is a self help book for teenagers and others struggling to make themselves relevant and heard. It's generally well written, with very few grammatical or punctuation errors, and will resonate well with those feeling as though they are lost in society. There is no plot, which is why we have rated the plot poorly, and there does not seem to be much structure to the various concepts that are being portrayed. With a bit of work it could become a useful self help book.

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The chosen one

We thoroughly enjoyed this story. It is unusual to see so much of the scene set in one confined place, particularly so early on in a story, but it works very well in this tale, and helps to mould that character's strong spirit. The ending felt a little contrived, although we do understand the desire for retribution given what the main character suffered.

Lots of well portrayed emotion, tempered with the unrelenting force of character and her occasional humour. Written exceptionally well, with excellent grammar and punctuation, which is always important to us. We can recommend this story, which is not something we usually do.

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Going home

We love this story, and the only reason we haven't given the plot 5 stars is because we can't yet see how it finishes.

The characters are immaculately crafted, each bearing the trauma of their past like a cross. The way they come together is fascinating. The writing skills are excellent, with the writer producing the whole story in the present tense, giving a sense of immediacy to the tale. It's not easy to write successfully in the present tense, so very well done.

We look forward to reading the rest.

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Deviant tendencies

Well written, with characters that are complex . While it is easy to understand the deviant behaviour based on the dreadful background of the main character, it would be nice from time to time to feel a little more kindness so we could develop a bit more sympathy for him.

The plot is fascinating, and we look forward very much to reading more. A highly enjoyable story.

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Crazy Rich Kids

We must admit the title didn't tempt us, and we thought, 'Oh no! Not another snowflake story with characters bursting with a sense of entitlement. But as soon as we got into the story we realised it wasn't that sort of tale at all. We loved it - and wish it was finished.

The premise is excellent, and unexpected, the writing is very sound, and the characters sing - not literally, but certainly figuratively.

Great book - we would recommend it to anyone.

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Blue tomatoes

Just the sort of story we enjoy reading - police based, twists aplenty, and a deep knowledge of the culinary industry and the supermarket stock market. It's well worth the read if you also enjoy mysteries, dramas and police tales.

And unlike so much that we read, it's well written, reflecting London at both its best and its worst.

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Protected at all costs

Hi, you have truly mastered the concept of the twist in this very short story. We would recommend it to everyone. A minor error, early on. As her girlfriend speaks you need to start a new paragraph, but overall very well written, and the plot was great.

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C.O.R.A.

A truly brilliant twist to the second chapter.

We really enjoyed this story which gave new meaning to the concept of AI.

The possibilities from here on in are endless, and we were sorry the story ended here. It could have gone on and on. Very well done.

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Mike and Boo and Sulley

Hi a lovely tale, that speaks of lost time, and lost opportunities. We realise this was the message you were aiming for, but a little more explanation for those of us who didn't follow Monsters Inc. would have been useful. We feel also a slightly stronger end could have been plotted, by perhaps giving them all one more memory to share of the day. Someone to defeat, a mystery to solve - something like that. But all in all excellent writing skills, filled with humour - we love the door that had been added.

Keep writing, and if you could find you way to reviewing a chapter or two of our work Psychic we'd be grateful. We can, at the very least, promise short chapters.

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Innerworld: A Grand Lights story

This story made us laugh all the way through, with its delightful hero and intricate characterisations.

Rather like the genius Stephen King, the world's best horror writer, this writer can remember his youth and can write about it in a way that genuinely makes his characters believable.

Good quality grammar, excellent writing style, and a plot that doesn't disappoint. The only negative thing we can find to say about it is that we think the title could be improved.

It's a bit cumbersome and not quite catchy enough.

We can recommend this for anyone who doesn't limit their reading to purely erotic romance and sex.

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His pomegranate queen

A great title for a great book. The synopses, beginning and following early chapters left us a little confused, but the story itself is very well crafted, and its plotline, based on the Gods, is very sound. We enjoyed learning about the Gods' perspectives and found that the more we got into the story the better it became.

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Blood moon rising.

We thoroughly enjoyed this story, and can recommend it to anyone wanting a slightly unusual read. None of your average girl falls for bad guy romance - no, this one has teeth. The twist at the end is great, the writing is generally very good, with just the occasional grammatical error. So come on everyone, let's cut loose from the norm, and read something that is a bit of a challenge for the brain - like this story.

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Guarded

The writer has an excellent grasp of internal dialogue to demonstrate what her characters are thinking. The dialogue between characters is great too. The book is short on descriptive sequences, but this seems to fit with the natural style of the book. The plot however is undeveloped with few twists and a focus on hard sex as opposed to seduction over time. There are occasional grammatical errors, but on the whole this is a very good story.

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Nighmares of someone else's choosing

The author has a unique style, blending the background seamlessly with the present, and by chapter three the tension has truly racked up as we see physical injuries plague the heroine just as much as her nightmares.

It's shaping up to be an excellent horror tale.

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The neglection

A really sweet little story, that tugs at your heartstrings.

The writer could make a bit more of the plot in showing the struggle of Max's time on the street, but all in all, a good tale, with a little twist in the middle.

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The court of love.

This brief tale pulls at the heartstrings in discussing the types of love, and the impact when love goes wrong.

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What happened to Erin

This writer is exceptionally gifted. She holds the reader's attention as questions about what happened to Eric pile up relentlessly. The horror that is reintroduced as a second girl disappears reminds us of Stephen King's greatest novel It. We loved this tale, and look forward to reading much more as it develops.

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Stripped roses

A great tale showing a relationship at two opposite ends of the spectrum. We particularly liked the reference to the sensitivity of smell during the pregnancy.

Very well told. The only thing we wondered about was how well this couple would cope with the sleepless nights to come.

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Hellfire

An epic tale, which we are thoroughly enjoying. The plot, characters, and dialogue intertwine in a way that carry the reader further and further into this supernatural world, believing every moment of it.

We have one tiny comment on the frequent use of verbs such as said, explored, explained, commented, etc.

About half of these can be left out, particularly if there are only two people talking. And even when three or more are talking, a gesture or action is often better than an adverb and verb to describe which character is speaking. But all in all, a beautifully written tale, and we look forward to what is coming next. Everyone should read these stories.

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The Venus Flytrap affair

An enjoyable read.

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Bad boy goes to another world

Hi, we loved how much thought you had put into the differences between your characters, and how much of this showed in the first chapter. The plot is interesting, and we look forward to seeing it develop.

You do need to change your punctuation quite radically, as it is littered with commas that should be full stops. Every time you use a new capital letter, there should be a full stop before it, not a comma.

We wonder if this story wouldn't work better as an anime (picture) story, which could help to demonstrate some of the characteristics and actions scenes through pictures. But anyway, well done on getting this far with your writing, and keep it up, you've got some writing talent.

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Awakening

A very well written science fiction story, with exceptional characters and a fascinating premise. We enjoyed this story very much, and look forward to seeing much more from this author.

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The Bad Girls Hypothesis

Good quality writing, with the character's personalities clearly thought through.

The plot line seems to be executed well although we will need to read further chapters to see if this plays out with any twists or turns. We're enjoying the story.

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Truth of the Beginning of Times

Hi. We really liked your idea of a time-travelling genius. He's a little too perfect though. It's best to make your characters have some flaws as it means you can identify more with them. We also loved the constant DING of the gaming device/computer he took with him. Just the right thing to bring you back to Earth.

You are obviously not writing in your home language, so well done for doing this. The thought of writing in French, German or Zulu terrifies us, although we have a smattering of all of these languages. So you are very brave to be attempting this. Your grammar will have to improve a bit if you want a lot of people to read your stories, but you are doing the right thing in writing because that will improve the grammar enormously. Best wishes for your future writing.

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There's a place for us

We enjoyed this story, and found your opening chapter to be a thought-provoking commentary of what it's like to be a homeless person.

A really nice novel, with the homosexual romance making it different from most other tough-boy-finds-love-with-shy-girl novels. It has a sensitivity to it. There are a few places where it would be better to end a sentence, or at least separate the clauses with a semi-colon, where they are jammed together for no obviously good reason, but aside from this, very well written.

T&S Rose.

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Fighting for control

A nice story, with an interesting concept at its heart.

The plot is a little obvious, but the characterisation is excellent, and we really enjoyed the dialogue which was very good. The first chapter is a tiny bit stilted with too much tell, and not enough show, but this gets much better by the second chapter. An enjoyable read for those who love a good romance set in an unusual community.

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Texting him

A really great read, with the added benefit of a wonderful sense of humour that makes you laugh throughout the story. We would have like a few more twists and turns in the plot, and there are a few minor grammatical errors as the story moves into narrative rather than dialogue mode, but these were easily forgivable. Totally enjoyable,, and fully recommended. T & S Rose

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Wish upon a demon

Hi,

Please ignore our previous review, which was based on the fact that the Inkitt website froze when we were reading it, so all we could see was the summary, and none of the rest of the story.

We've now read a little more since the website opened again, and find the story engaging.

There are a couple of places where the punctuation could be helped along, but this doesn't compromise the story. Well done.

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T & S Rose.

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Her Possessive Blackguard

Hi, Just finished your story. It's a good teenage read, full of love, lust and sex, written in a sensitive way with good quality dialogue, and action. Personally, we'd like a bit more plot, but maybe that's just us, because our story, Psychic, is heavily plot driven.

We enjoyed this though, as it offers a light read and the characters are engaging if a little typical.

The writing style is cleverly done and the story doesn't drag anywhere. Altogether, a story we could recommend.

T & S Rose.

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She Belongs to the Billionaire

A nice light story, with some controversial elements. Some people will be judgemental, but I just enjoyed it, and in places laughed out loud. The dialogue is well written, and sounds authentic.

T & S Rose

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The Fox and the Wolf

Hi. Interesting concept, which made this story somewhat out of the ordinary. There was a bit of confusion at first, as the writer jumped around from present to past tense, then back again. But this was resolved after a chapters. The dialogue is well written, and natural. There is a need to insure that the possessive apostrophes are included. e.g. mum's choice not mums choice.

Sorry to be pedantic, one of us has a English Master's Degree. All in all, well done, and enjoyable.

T & S Rose, writers of Psychic.

p.s. It's T . Rose who is the literary boffin not me - S. Rose. I just liked the characters.

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Psychics

Thanks to all those readers who have left reviews. You've been very generous and we've loved your views and your tips. T & S Rose

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