Tea Noire

San Diego, CA

I specialize in writing cozy mysteries with a twist. Expect magic, a tad more spice, and definitely MAYHEM!!!

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Confusing Story

The story was confusing and I couldn't follow what exactly was going on. From the first three chapters I read, I know that there's the presence of some Greek gods and a boy who ate a table? From then on I was totally lost. There were too many chapters and the plot felt too disconnected to make a cohesive story. The other thing was that none of the chapters really grabbed me. I get that there was some interaction going on since there were lots of dialogue, but for some reason I understood none of it. It might be because this isn't the genre I usually read in.

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Spotty on Some Parts But Overall A Good Start

I thought the author makes good use of an unconventional premise. Here, the protagonist, Marcus, has to sign a contract to become the 'hero' of an alternate world. Through his eyes, we meet his assassin friend and many others in this fantasy world. I give props to the author for creating a believable world. The thing I wanted to address is that the language of the story can feel a bit wordy at times. I think it'll take the reader out of the story to look up some of the words that were used in the book. At the same time, I think the author could use simpler language to tell his story. In addition, at times, I felt that the dialogue came across a little choppy and unnatural. Having an editor could help smooth things over in that department. All in all, not too bad. With some work, this story has the potential to shine.

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A Compelling Story

Right away the author draws us into this mafia story. In the very first chapter we meet mafia boss Karthika Cadman and he is torturing a man named Daniel for information. The first chapter is very immediate and action-packed but toward the second chapter where we have Alexander's perspective, it slows down and we get a flashback about Alex's memories of his mother. I think the author also does a good job with pacing so far, knowing when to slow down and give exposition and when to punctuation the passages with dialogue and action. I think this is a really good start. From the two chapters I read, it was obvious the book had tons of potential.

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