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Review for Chapter I of "Stranger's Memory"

As I had previously been ponderously scouring as I do on short occasion throughout Inkitt, I happened to come across this story on a rather curious matter of coincidence within my notifications (made such a interesting event simply by the fact that I tend not to journey to Inkitt much as to not obstruct from my own writings); and as such because I instantly recognized the author from two of their previous stories (both of which I joyfully discovered to be rather marvelous, to which I both certainly recommend), AXIS and Awakening: The ALPHA Generation, I dove headfirst into the first chapter of this story and relatively-speaking, frantically tore through it (much to the point that I had to relook over the text multiple times as to completely comprehend it to the best of my ability). Upon concluding my reading of this 'demo' chapter, I can safely say that it is just as intriguing (and perhaps even more so than the previously mentioned works to an equivalent standard); as it includes the base-plate for seemingly deep and interesting characters within a fascinating plot that may perhaps expand into a wonderful puzzle of events (to which I undoubtfully hope) while retaining a sturdy and professionally concise frame/style of writing which is delightfully simplistic and gracious to the reader whilst providing enough extra layers (or entire dimensions) of unfolding story yet to be beheld; and the writer indefinitely demonstrates a talent for in-depth physiological analysis of their characters which (for the time being) presents the opportunity for an intricate series of mental conflicts within the main-characters head, which for the same matter provides even more intrigue to the tone of the novel and leaves a profoundly strong sense of mystery and curiosity lingering within the mind of the reader. The main characters ability to recollect and even experience 'flashbacks' and images of happenings to which might not even be in his own memory in surmountable detail are incredibly supernatural and provide a unique abundance of opportunities and spine-tingling suspense to experience as we (as the readers) receive glimpses of an utterly horrible event and senses the profound disturbances of unease that they carry are led almost into a new dimension of horrors and fantastical mysteries, and for that alone; Stanger's Memory is already quite the exciting (and recommendable) read, to which I certainly hope will eventually receive the attention it deserves, and to which I will as well undoubtedly look forward to continuing.

*(Please excuse how unnecessarily tedious and unfinished this early review is, I was simply trying to regurgitate as much of my thoughts as possible and it turned out to be (at least in my opinion), quite overwhelming, but besides that remark; fantabulous job so far, and I will of course be prepared to continue whenever you happen to publish a new chapter. Otherwise than that, good day and happy holidays!)*

To describe it bluntly: a true experience.

After reading through however much of the Awakening that has been so far published, I must say that you did quite the fanciful job with your writing and world-building techniques. The dialogue is delightfully smooth, being concise while perfectly descriptive, allowing the reader to easily gain hold of this dystopia you've created and fully flesh it out to whatever extent they choose. The characters are relatively straightforward, but all have their own unique drives and work quite well in the grand scheme of things, the pacing of the story as well feels as if it were made to a professional standard. There are plenty of abundant and rich details, just the perfect balance as to keep the plot focused and moving freely forward without a conjunction or any unnecessary drag to slow it down, and the narrative-switching adds a level of persistent creativity to the overarching narrative, especially in the case of ALPHA, who seems to have quite the intriguing 'evolution' throughout the novel. His seemingly mingled connection of interaction between the physical and mental realms provide an interesting element which builds over the typical artificial intelligence, his presence has a very study affect over the story, one which is indefinitely felt throughout every single word. In conclusion, this is a rather consistently strong publification, one which I could see lined up along all the other enveloping science-fiction works of the past decade. I certainly look forward to continuing onward along this journey, as well as witnessing how you develop these characters and interactions into the near future; best wishes and good day.

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AXIS is an indefinitely intriguing and fascinating read, one which leads an abundance of thoughts and ideas to be pondered about these interpretations of a world and it's mechanisms/history. It is as well certainly unique as most short stories of this type go, and with dialogue inhabiting the entirety of the text, the rest of the story is really left up to the reader to create and explore. This creates this story into an experience to a greater extent, something both memorable and entertaining. I will without a doubt look into your other novel very soon, good day.

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All of the poems in this collection are perfectly sound and contain just the seemingly right amount of depth to them while still seeming very light and quite the bit enjoyable in turn. Besides a small grouping of minor grammatical errors I noticed (which didn't do too much to hinder your writing), this is a strong start to which I hope you can eventually extend upon. All the poems (at least to me) seem rather connected and provide a fluent storyline (though perhaps that would be the exact point).; poetry is truly something special and it seems that you write it quite well. Good day.

My personal opinion:

This is certainly a tad bit of a unique and intricate experience, something that can be lightly represented as rather simple but as well something that carries a side-dimension of perspective depth and a follow-through of good set-up mystery, which I believe is personally a great contribution to any short story of this sort. Sure, it has a few minor errors and could be just a little more efficient in its dialogue and build-up of suspense (though it is quite fine based upon its intentional length), but that is nothing to carry much fault or criticism. So, all in all, you do quite a fine job representing what this was supposed to be and having quite the effective ending, with nothing more to be said.