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Life is a novel; some people get introduced, some leave and new chapters are added. But when the end comes near, memories come to you in flashbacks like the highlighted pages of your favourite book.πŸ“–

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Can't wait for more!

I must say, this story is different from all the cliches out there and I know I'm gonna follow this to the end. I really love the beginning, and everything after that. The protagonist is a strong, independent woman and has an impressive personality. I spotted some mixing up of past and present tense but another than that, this is a really promising story. Literally can't wait to read more! Good job, author! ❣

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Such a perfect tale of four lives entangled for getting better

I want to literally wail out loud rn demanding for more chaptersπŸ₯ΊπŸ₯Ί This is SUCH A WONDERFUL STORY! I love EVERYTHING in the story. The lovely banter between the two couples, the beautiful friendship between the girls, the sweet and mesmerising poems in between the chapters... EVERYTHING! But more than that, I LOVE CUDDLES and it's such a miracle since I'm a dog person and usually stay miles away from cats. You've got such a wonderful way with words that makes yye readers laugh out loud, cry in sorrow and do both of these at once. Another thing I absolutely loved is how you've managed to write about not two, but four different people in such an intricate manner. The humor was so good that had me gasping for air at times with those sarcastic comebacks and playful banter between any and every characters.

This has gotten quite long but... I LOVE YOUR STORY and that's all that matters. Now please be happy with my review and give an update soon. Cause I'm dying for more here!

Good job! Keep writing!πŸ‘πŸ‘β£β£

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A good read

Okay, so... I'm not really an LGBTQ reader but this one was really good! I live the plot, and the dark beginning of the story. The chapters here constantly put me on edge and I could literally feel my heart beating loud with every passing chapter. The writing style is impeccable. I spotted some grammar errors and typos in some of the chapters but we all have one or more of those so that not such a big deal. I would, however suggest you to maybe italicize the monologues and a little description of physical attributes would be more appreciated. But apart from these, I love your work! Good job!

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I want to read all the chapters now!

This is just the beginning but it's already SO GOOD! The first thing I love is the blurb. It's so intriguing that hooks the writer right in. Then the other chapters... they made me want to read more and more and more. I just felt that the chapters were a little short for my liking. And I'd really appreciate it if you included the English translation whenever other language is used. I spotted some typos in the first paragraph of chapter V. But these are just the minor things that can be overlooked easily. I know I can 'cause the storyline is just AMAZING! I love the characters, your writing style and everything! I'll be eagerly waiting for more chapters! Great job, author! πŸ₯°πŸ₯°

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Has potential

Well, it's only one chapter so I can't really say much about it. However, here are the things I loved. The first thing, I love the blurb, how you've talked about the efforts of a girl into fitting in despite her pressure and fallouts with her friends. I like your selection of characters but I somehow felt like many characters were introduced at once so I got kinda confused somewhere. Maybe it's because I'm not really used to these names as you've assigned the characters so I couldn't differentiate one character from the other but maybe you might want to introduce the characters slowly, only a few at a time so that the readers get used to the idea first. Well that's what I think. Other than the small grammar errors here and there, I feel that your storyline is strong and has a potential to do a lot better! Would be waiting for more chapters! Good job! ❣❣

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Definitely 5 stars!

I've read only half of the story so far. Not because I didn't like it (trust me, it's far from that) but because this is the third book and the few chapters I've read made me want to binge read the while series. Which I'm gonna do as soon as humanly possible. You have such an impeccable way of writing that got me fooled to your book even when I didn't really know what was going on for the first few chapters as I haven't read the other books. I found myself wanting to read more and more and more of your words! The characters and events all seemed SO REAL! This book's gonna be in my reading lost for a long, long time! I really love what I've read so far and I'm sure I'll love it even more once I've read the first two books! Great job!❣

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Loving this!

Wow!😍😍😍 I'm loving this A LOT! I absolutely love the characters here! Cora's badass attitude, quirky sense of humor and amazing personality has me swooning over her.πŸ˜… And there's Finn's intensity that I'm already a fan of! I love the plot, the storyline, the way of writing and everything! I can't wait for the next update! Good job, author! πŸ’•β£

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Sweet

Okay, I just finished this book and I must say, I'm in love with the characters here! You have given a really sweet description of the characters and the settings. However, I found a lot of grammar errors. Like I mentioned in the comment, you've put unnecessary inverted commas when the characters are not in conversations which made it quite confusing at times and I had to read the whole paragraph again for that to make sense. So maybe you want to remove those inverted commas and use it only while indicating dialogues. Then the next was with tense. I noticed that you mixed a lot of past and present verbs in the same paragraph. Also, there were quite a lot of spelling errors, for example, the bouquets, puncture and others. Lastly, I feel like it would have been better if you made a definite distinction while describing her dreams or nightmares, maybe italicize the paragraph? Other than these, I really loved the storyline and I feel that it could do much more with some editing and if you set the pace of the story. I can't get over Rihan's sweetness!😍 Keep writing, dear. I hope my review helps a little. Good luck!
P.S. I found it on wattpad too and couldn't stop myself from dropping comments!❣

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Interesting beginning

As I've stated in the comment, the first chapter, which is the only chapter published so far, is really interesting and intriguing. I think that a blurb or a short description of the story would help the readers to get a better idea of the plot, though. But anyhow, im enjoying this. Good job!

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Something new

So, I really love the short blurb of the story. It's quite intriguing and I found myself eagerly reading each chapter. You really have your way with words! You've described the settings so well that I felt like I've already gone to the place although I heard the name for the first time. So kudos for that! However, there are a few things I want to point out, which I felt like they could be improved. First thing is that, I see you've used italics font for both, the dialogues as well as the monologue of the characters. It was a little confusing and I had to carefully watch out for the beginning and end of inverted commas. I personally suggest you to denote the dialogues between the characters with inverted commas only rather than making them italics, which could be used for monologue. Also, I found some errors in the punctuation marks but not a big issue. Also, maybe you'd want to explain their dresses a bit more clearly so that the readers can actually picture the characters as most of the readers do not have any idea what kind of dress you're talking about as it's in other language. But apart from these, I absolutely loved your quirky monologues that had me laughing at unexpected times. Overall, I loved your story and hope that this review helps! Keep writing, you have a really great way with words!

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Intriguing

Wow! You've got a great concept here! I loved the thing about their headboards and their flying and stuff. Then the last symptom of the virus! My heart nearly jumped out at the mere imagination! You are such an amazing storyteller. Every setting is described so effortlessly and intricately. Just a thing I want to say: I feel like it would have been better to describe the characters along the flow instead of giving all the introductions at once. It somewhat creates a hassle going all the way up to visualize every new characters. But I see you've given some descriptions along the ride too, so that's okay. I see no any errors here and would really love to stick with this one till the end. Love your work!

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Lovely!

This story is going so good! I can't wait for the next chapter! I love the general idea of the story and all the characters. (Yeah, I'm beginning to love the dance partner, too, in a 'I want to punch him in th face for being so rude' kind of wayπŸ˜‚πŸ˜…) I found some grammar errors here and there but overall, I love your story! Good job author!

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Interesting

It's really interesting reading about Adam and Whit. I loved the way you put that little part of dialogue into the story description. It made me really curious to start your story. I feel like some sentences are a bit... like missing something in their structure and there were some grammar and punctuation errors I spotted. But those errors can be overlooked as the story has a good base. Overall, I loved it! Would be waiting for more chapters!

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A good read

The story description you've written is just... amazing. I really loved your description. It's so captivating and intriguing. And the prologue nearly took breath away. I felt like watching an extreme thriller movie in the first few chapters. I found some grammar errors, mostly regarding present and past tense but other than that, it's a good read! Keep it up!

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A truly remarkable work!

I feel like this story is the perfect example of what a fantasy should be like. The author has such an impressive way with words that I could literally imagine every single events as if i were watching a movie. The plot is great and had me hooked until the very last chapter. This is, without a doubt, very much worth reading.

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Impeccable writing

Well, the first thing I loved when I started your story was the beginning. I loved the way you started off your story and your way of writing is awesome! This has been a different but an equally thrilling experience reading your work. I felt like I was literally flowing with the characters here. To sum up, your work is amazing!

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Absolutely captivating

I'm so sorry it took me so long to write a review but I've been busy and hadn't found enough time to read your book. But now that I have, I seriously regret not reading it sooner. I'm still halfway through your book but couldn't help myself from telling you how much I'm loving it! The blurb alone is so intriguing with dream connections and all that made me so eager to read the first chapter and then the other. I'm absolutely hooked and I know I'm gonna binge read it to the end now that all the chapters are published. I didn't find any significant grammar errors and loved the character portray and EVERYTHING! Great job, author! Keep writing! ❣❣πŸ₯°

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Intriguing

I really love the story even though it's only two chapters so far. The beginning itself is so intriguing that leaves the readers wanting for more. I love your portray of characters, the setting and everything. From the way it's going, I think it's gonna be a really amazing story and I'll be eagerly waiting for more chapters! ❣❣πŸ₯°

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Bone chilling

There are only two chapters so far, so I can't really say much about it. But from these two chapters, I can say that the author is an amazing storyteller. Tje first chapter alone gave me chills and the second chapter got me creeps πŸ˜‚πŸ˜…. Anyways, I enjoyed the two chapters and would love to read more.πŸ’—β£

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Sweet

It was a really short story... but it's just SO SWEET! I love Jeh and his swoon worthy wordsπŸ₯°πŸ₯° I personally suggest you to maybe think about making a long story about Jeh and Tia, including their background, physical attributes, the environmental setting and everything. You can then include this work as an event in that story. It's because you have a good potential for something beyond these short stories with a single event. There are quite a lot of grammar errors. The first one o spotted was in the first chapter. You don't use past verb following 'didn't' like you've used in that sentence. You might want to use a present verb there. Others, there were some errors worth mixed past and present tense, sentence structuring and such.
All in all, I'd say you've done a good work and would love to see this turned into a long, beautiful story.
Best wishes! Keep writing! πŸ₯°β£β£

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A good read

Hey! I'm really sorry for the late review because I was crammed with things to do. But I've just read it the tha last chapter and I must say, it's a really good story. I love the personality of all the characters and the plot of the story. However, I spotted some grammar errors with sentence structuring and such. I suggest you to maybe break the paragraphs into a smaller ones so that it doesn't look really bulky. But all in all, I love your book. Good job!

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Mysteriously captivating

Well I'm halfway up this book so far. But I'll definitely be going back to it as soon as I write the review. Starting from the things I loved about your book, I loved the plot, which is the most important thing in any story. It's quite unique and you've added a touch of mystery and adventure here that captivated me right from the start.

The writing style is good but I feel that it could do much better with some editing. I felt like some phrases could be said better than what you've written. Like, for example, it would sound better if you used 'told', 'answered', 'announced', 'commented' and such similar verbs instead of the verb 'said to' as used in multiple places.
Story wise, like the other readers have commented, I, too felt like there were some 'blank spaces' in the first few chapters. However, things started making sense as I reached further. I found some grammar errors regarding tense and sentence structuring and a few typos.
Another thing I want to add (forgive me if I'm coming out as too harsh but I just want to give an honest review) is maybe you might want to shiw the characters' emotions more openly. Personally, infect like there were a lot of dialogues between the characters but quite a few sentences indicating their internal thoughts and feelings. Those internal emotions can help the readers truly feel the characters and what they're going through.

Anyhow, I know that this story has a great potential with it's unique and intriguing storyline and captivating plot. So it's definitely a five star for me. I'm going to restart my reading from here and binge read it till finish. I hope my review helps!

Overall, kudos to the author! Keep writing! Best wishes!❣❣

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Mysterious and alluring

This story nearly took my breath away! I LOVE your way of writing! It has this unique ability to capture the readers' attention and captivate them right to the end. I love the selection of characters and description of settings. The way you've introduced the new characters slowly and shown them connected to the others is absolutely incredible. Then there was the nightmare, the little things like growling, change in eye colors, unusual nightmares and others which are brought in so naturally! I found some grammar errors here and there, mostly typos and punctuation errors but other than that, I LOVE YOUR WORK! Would love to binge read this one! Good job, author! Keep writing! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ₯°πŸ₯°

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Definitely gonna see it's end!

There are only two chapters with a prologue so far but I'm like hooked!I absolutely loved the summary, the beginning, the storyline and everything else! Most importantly I love Faith who is so strong despised everything! I just can't wait to read more of it! Would be eagerly waiting for more chapters! You have SUCH a great way with words! Keep it up!πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ˜πŸ₯°

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Interesting beginning

I really love the beginning! It's so captivating and now I just want to read more and more of it! The blurb alone has the ability to pull the readers right into your story and the first chapter published so far is equally enthralling. I'll be waiting for the next update! Good job!πŸ‘β£

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Intensely swoonworthy

I've had a complete array of emotions while reading this. Every chapter was equally thrilling and left me wanting for more! I couldn't leave this until I reached the last chapter and still found myself disappointed in reaching the end! I can't wait to read more! LOVED this story!πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ‘πŸ‘

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IntenseπŸ˜πŸ˜…

Phew! That was intense. I really love the storyline here. It's a cliche bestfriend of ex kind but with a completely different twists and turns that has the readers intrigued. The selection of characters was very good and I really loved how Brandon is different from the stereotypical male protagonists. He's so sweet towards her that's it's SWOONWORTHY! I'm really loving your book. However, I spotted some grammar errors like in the form of mixed past and present tense in the same paragraph. I also suggest you to maybe italicize the letters when talking about the characters' internal thinking or monologues. That makes it more systematic, I think. And ther were a few missing punctuation marks such as commas, exclamation marks and such along with a few misspelled words. But that's understandable as you've mentioned English is not your first language. Anyways, I hope my review helps a little in that area. All in all, I LOVE YOUR WORK! Can't wait for more! Great job, author!πŸ˜πŸ‘

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SO SO GOOD!

I'm hooked. Literally. As in can't-stop-reading kind of hooked. I absolutely loved each characters, from feisty Alexa to the level headed Reagon and even their friends! The story is just so sweet that I know I'll be sticking with this one till the very end. I'm actually only halfway through but that's because i found you on wattpad so I'll just re read from there so that I can comment on my favorite paragraphs which, there are lots of! Great job! LOVED IT!πŸ₯°πŸ₯°πŸ˜

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Can't wait for moreee 😍😍

This is SOOOO SWEET! God! I'm in love with Sky and Chris and Olivia and EVERYONE! I stayed up the whole night reading this and now I'm left desperately waiting for the next update! I loved it soo much! There were only a few grammar errors but other than that, I LOVE THIS STORY! Can't wait for another update! Great job, author!

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I'm in love already!😍

Wow! I love this book, although you've only published two chapters so far! I love Spencer's witty, dry comebacks. I couldn't stop cracking up at her replies!🀣🀣 Your writing is just LOVELY! I found some errors, mostly regarding uppercase of first letters of the sentences. And some other errors regarding punctuation and stuffs. But those things apart, I LOVE YOUR STORY and can't wait for more! Good job!

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A good read

All in all, I quite liked the story. The journey from strangers to something more is really sweet. You've chosen your characters well and I loved the way you've described the events in series. I'm just halfway to it now but wanted to leave a review so that I could continue reading again. And I'm sure I'm gonna love the upcoming chapters as well! However I found some grammar errors around the story and some statements that could have been made better. For example,near the end of the first chapter, instead of the phrase 'carrying me in his hands' I think it would've sounded better if you said 'in his arms'. Stuffs like such. But overlooking these minor details, I think that you've done a wonderful job and will be stocking up with this story till the end! Great work!

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A truly, remarkable work

The past couple of hours I drowned in your world was just... I don't even know what to name it. It was an eye opener to so many things happening in this world. Through your words, I realized just how shallow we humans are most of the times. We're just so lost in our own definition of life, happiness and success that we don't even notice that the happiness we thought we had is nothing but a fragment of our self presumed concept. We live by, talk to people, not once seeing past their smiles or hearing the unsaid, 'between the lines' words. And now, reading at your story, I feel like the world could be so much happier if only we start to see those un-shown things and hear those unspoken words. Throughout this entire journey with your words, I've bledy heart out to the little girl ignored by the ones who were supposed to love and protect her the most, poured my anguish over the young woman who was the victim so many things one can only imagine about. And in the end, I cried, proud of the strong woman who survived everything and stood tall for the world to see, to show them that she is no longer a victim, but a survivor and to tell everyone that if she could do it, you can, too. I've got so many things to say but at the same time I can't find the words that could do justice for my thoughts. In the end, the only thing I truly want to say is, thank you. For sharing this piece of your life to the world. Your words can be the flicker of light for everyone living in a dark tunnel. You're such an amazing writer that I could literally feel your presence right in front of me the entire time. But more than that, you're an amazing human being. I'm so glad to have stumbled upon your post and I wish you all the very best in your upcoming days!
Okay, this got so long. I really got carried away.πŸ˜… Post-read intensity πŸ˜…

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Addicted to a point that I'm dying for more!

Wow! Wow! Just wow! This is SO SO GOOD! AND AMAZING! AND FUNNY! AND SWEET! I could use a bunch of other lovely adjectives to describe that I'm downright hooked with the story! I absolutely love the tension between Jenny and Blake! It's so intense! Then there's Dean whom I don't really want near her, as bad as it makes me sound. (I'm being quite possessive of JennyπŸ˜…) Anyways, there's nothing much to say. Everything is just lovely, from the plot to the characters then the drama, unexpected twists... I can't wait for the next update!
P.S. I loved the titles you've given to the chapters! They fit so well!
Excellent job! Keep it up!
*that rhymed btw*😁🀣🀣

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Hooked right up from the beginning!

Wow! Only one chapter and I can't wait for this story to finish so I can binge read it from start to finish. I'm literally hooked with this story and in awe of your way with words. I love the way you've portrayed the protagonist...G201 (It's so weird when I call that nameπŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚) Anyways, my point, I loved your story and CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE! GOOD JOB! Keep it up!

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Good one

Alright. I haven't really read all the chapters published yet but I'm sure I'll catch up on that later on. Anyways, I just wanted to say that I loved your story! The plot is really good and I admire choice of characters here. However I spotted quite a lot of grammar errors like the use of past and present tense in the same paragraph. Like, you've used 'is' and 'was' in the same paragraph, talking about the same event. Another thing was, the use of the plural verb like 'have' with singular noun (Mona/Henry). So... these are some of the things I wanted to point out. Hope it helps! Anyhow I love your story and will be returning to it soon! Good job!

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SweetπŸ₯°

There aren't much to read so far but I'M ALREADY IN LOVE WITH THIS! I loved the quirky witty comments thrown offhandedly and the funny monologues made me laugh out loud πŸ˜…πŸ˜… I couldn't really spot any grammar or technical errors so I love your work! Great job with this one! I'll be sticking with this till the very end!πŸ₯°πŸ₯°

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Things just got more interesting!

Okay, I just finished reading this on wattpad and I couldn't hold myself from commenting every now and then!πŸ˜… This is SO ADORABLE! Their childhood moments are incredibly sweet and as they've grown up, things have turned much much more intense! I kinda felt that the kids sounded too mature for 7 year olds so it was a little confusing at times. Personally speaking, I think you need to mostly show their activities instead of saying the things running in their heads as kids are usually impulsive rather than logical. Also I spotted a few grammar errors, tensewise but other than that, I love it! And now that they're older, I can't wait for more. I'll surely follow this story in wattpad!

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The title is really deceiving

God! Only two chapters and this makes me want to stay away from children for good. I can't believe you named it little angel!πŸ˜¬πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ Anyways, about this book. What a chill you gave me! Phew! I still got goosebumps and that bone chilling sensation. I'm torn between wanting to read more and staying away from this to save my sanity. Very well written. You've given attention to every detail and the description was very vivid. Love your work! Would love to read more (if I get over the mental image of the gaping hole in his cheekπŸ˜¬πŸ˜…)

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So far so good

Okay, I absolutely love the plot of the story. I love the characters and description of settings. In fact, I love almost everything of the story. My only suggestion would be that you might want to distinctly indicate when the characters are having a monologue. Like, maybe use italics font to indicate it. It can make the readers a bit clearer. Also, there were some mix up of present and past tense so you might want to stick to one. Another thing is, I think you need to add punctuation marks at various places like commas, exclamation marks and such to make the story more interesting and give a clearer picture of the characters' tone of dialogues. Well, I hope this helps. I really loved your story and would be waiting for more! Good job!

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Engaging read

Phew! I had so many distractions while reading this book and I've FINALLY come to the end of it. I really liked the way you've portrayed your characters. You've chosen their personalities quite well and it made the story really interesting. I couldn't sit still after I read the first few chapters and my hands were literally itching to read one more chapter. I also love the small bits of humor you've placed in the story which makes the readers more engaged. However, as you've mentioned English is not your first language, I could find quite a lot of grammar errors with this story. The major one being mixing up of tense. I noticed that there's mixture of past and present tense in the same paragraph which can be a little disturbing. Also, when you're inserting monologues, I saw that you inserted it in between her conversation with other characters, which was somewhat disturbed the flow. Maybe you can add the monologue after the dialogue. Or if you wish to add it in between, you might want to first differentiate it by inverted commas at the end of the conversation and add ot again when the conversation resumes. I spotted some other errors in spellings and such but nothing big enough. And considering English is not your first language, I must say, you've done a remarkable job. I like the plot of the story and the tension between Blaze and Phoebe is SO INTENSE! Overall, I love your work and will be looking forward for more updates! Good job!

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Sounds promising

Okay, there was only one chapter published so far so I can't really say much. But one thing I can say is, it seems quite promising with its unique selection of characters, that is, the female here is the dominant one for change. It's quite refreshing. However, I noticed quite a lot of grammar errors in your sentences so I wanted to point some of them out if that makes a difference. The first thing I noticed is that you've done random switching between past and present tense in same paragraph or sometimes in the same sentence. Then you've used plural verbs like 'have' with singular noun, that is Elliot, which sounds a little off when you're reading. Also, I found some spelling errors like 'aurora' when I think you meant 'Aura'. (Well I think you meant that by the story but I apologize if I'm wrong) Anyways, these were some shortcomings I found in your story, in sense of grammar, punctuation and stuffs like such. But plot wise, I loved it and am eagerly waiting for more. I truly think this story has a good potential with some editing. Good job!

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Unique

Okay, So I still have some chapters left to read but from what I've read so far, I quite like the story and where it's going. The female protagonist is a strong, independent woman and her personality is really impressive. I like the plot of the story which is different from anything I've read before. The only suggestion I give you is maybe mention the change of POV when you're doing so. For example, in some of the chapters that you showed conversation among her brothers and Evan and his siblings, the girl wasn't present there but the characters were mentioned as 'my brother' and the change of POV wasn't indicated either, which I found slightly confusing and had to read it again for it to make sense. Also, I saw some grammar errors like mixing up of past and present tense but otherwise, I love your story and will definitely be sticking to the end of this one. Good job you've done here! I hope my review helps!

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A lovely read

Wow! This story is so differ from anything I've read. I really loved the settings and the attention to detail you've done with this. The characters were described so well and by the end, I felt like I personally knew them somehow. Great work!

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I'm literally hooked!

I want an update fast! Scratch that, I think I need more than five updates rn! This is SO CAPTIVATING! I can't believe I've reached the end. Your work is just amazing! I could almost literally feel the electricity between Aro and Miriam. I'll waiting very impatiently for the next update and the next after that. Great work!

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A unique storyline

Yeah, I found the story quite interesting. It has a unique storyline, different from all the other cliches from what I've read so far. For English being your second language, I must say that you've done a really good job with this one! I only found some grammar errors here and there and none was big enough to deter the storyline. Reading your words, I don't see a reason why you would even have a need to mention that English is not your primary language. You're doing really good! Keep it up!

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Mesmerizing

OH MY GODDDDD! THIS STORY IS JUST SOOOOO GOOD! Phew! I still have some chapters left to read but I just can't help myself from posting a review first. I got goosebumps starting from the very beginning and I still have them. I just think it might do something to my heart with all the pounding it's been doing since the prologue. πŸ˜… Anyways, hats off, author! I could give you more than five stars if I could. And I'm not even kidding! Keep it up!

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SO SO GOOD!

AMAZING! You have such a wonderful way of writing that has me spellbound. I nearly cried my eyes out in the first couple of chapters. It was just so good! Absolutely, incredibly, wonderfully amazing story. I know I'm gonna stick with this one to the end. Great job author! Keep it up!

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A thrilling experience

So... I found out that it's a one-shots kind of thing. And this has to be the first one I've read here. But, I really enjoyed it. Each chapter has it's own uniqueness and your writing is so refined. Impeccable writing! The only thing I would have liked more is if the chapters were a bit longer as I found myself wanting to read more each story; the background, the aftermath and everything. But still, that might be what makes this book more interesting. Anyhow, I loved it!

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Mysterious beginning

Wow! I really loved the overall concept command plot of the story! More importantly, I loved the beginning. It was so well written! I could feel my heartbeat getting louder and goosebumps appearing as I read the chapters. It's only a few chapters published so far but I already hate Edith's parents more than I hate spiders (which I hate a lot). And I already admire Edith. My only suggestion would be to maybe break down your paragraphs as some of them were too long and looked quite bulky. Other than that, I absolutely love your story and can't wait to find out more about Edith's new journey from here!

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Going with the flow

Well. Yeah. I love the story. The summary had me hooked. It seemed like a breath of fresh air from all the cliches like the dominating husband turns soft after marriage. And the chapters didn't disappoint me at all! I loved the prologue and every other chapters that follow. And I think James is quite sweet in his own wayπŸ₯°πŸ˜… I spotted some minor errors, nothing big and would definitely love to read more!

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An amazing roller coaster ride!

Phew! Your work is AMAZING! It was such a wonderful experience reading your work, absorbing every sentence. I literally hit goosebumps reading about the staff and that book thingy.πŸ˜… Every sentence, every detail is so well written and so intriguing. I absolutely loved it and can't wait for more!

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Wow!

Just awesome! Your way with words, the plot of the story, description of characters and settings... well everything is perfect! This is gotta be the first LGBTQ story I read here but I must say, this is definitely the one I would've wanted to read for the first time! Each chapter had me on the edge and wanting for more! Absolutely amazing! Will be waiting for the next chapter and the next after that! Great job author!

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Absolutely loving it!

The first thing I loved about your story is the plot! The story description is so... captivating. And unique. And amazing! You've described every characters and settings so well and I'm just in love with this! Can't wait for more! πŸ’•

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Would love to binge read this one!

I loved the story description, the characters selection was quite different from the cliche powerful man and weak woman so it was a refreshing read. I really loved how the story is going and am torn between waiting for an update or binge reading it all at once. The only thing I'd like to suggest is that you might want to indicate whose POV you're writing on. As an ongoing story, it'll take a little time to figure out whose POV the readers are reading about when it's not specified. But other than that, I really, absolutely love your story already! Good job!

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HotπŸ”₯πŸ”₯πŸ˜…

This is a really good story. The story description is quite attractive and the story progression is intriguing as well. There are only 3 chapters published so far so I can't really say much about it. But from what I've read, this is going to be a really good story. Good job!

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Wow!

Well, there's nothing much to say except that I love the way you write! Everything is described so well and the story description is just so impressive. It pulled me right into your story. I love your work and will look forward to the next updates! Good job!

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Refreshing

Well, the plot is quite unique and so refreshing! And the way you write, I could literally imagine those flowers and birds like you described so well. (Although by me imagining those, I'm just talking about some giant animals dressed in flowery outfit if that makes sense... I mean that's where my imagination is limited toπŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜‚) Anyways, jokes apart, I really enjoyed your story, the two chapters published so far and would be waiting for more. However, just a little suggestion: I personally think that it would be even better if you break down the paragraphs so that it doesn't look too bulky. Somebody had suggested me about that and now I see that it does make a difference. I mean it's so easy to read when you're met with smaller paragraphs and adequate spacing instead of bulky walls of text. But of course, that doesn't really deter my fascination with your story. It's really amazing! Keep it up!

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Intriguing

It's only one chapter published so far but it already has me captivated! I loved the summary that alone draws the readers in. The way you've described the setting is really good and I absolutely loved the first chapter. I would love to read more of it! Good job!

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Good one!

So....starting from the beginning, the summary is good and interesting. The beginning of the story is also quite good and it is capable of holding the reader's attention. However, I must say that there were quite a number of grammar errors which were slightly disturbing. Other than that, I think it's a good story and has a good potential. Keep it up!

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Heart touching!!!

I'm not normally one into poetry and this is the first one I've read on inkitt but... wow! The words are so deep they went straight to my heart. I have no words to express my love for your words. This is really very good. Just a little suggestion: I personally think that your poems should be a little longer. You have that potential to increase the length without degrading the quality of your words. So I just think that it'll be more satisfying to read your poem if it's a little longer. But even then, I simply love your poems! Great job!!!

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So far, so good

Alright, I found the story quite sweet so far. It starts off pretty well and has a good description of characters. The summary is quite interesting as well. And there is adequate description of the environmental settings which I liked. However, there are some places that I think you might want to improve. Like, grammar and punctuation for instance. I saw that there were lowercase letters in the beginning of most of the sentences which I found a little disturbing as it was something I'm not used to. And I think the story needs a little work on present and past tense as they are mixed up at some places. But all in all, I'd say it's a really good story. I love the bits of humor in the story and think that it's going to be an interesting read once you overlook some of the errors. I hope this review helps a little! Keep up with your good work!

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Intensively sweet!

I LOVE this book! And I mean that in a 'I'm-yelling-out-loud-and-I-don't-care' kind of way!πŸ˜… I love it's title that itself is intriguing. Then I love the summary which is even more alluring. Then the inside of the story... just loved it! It's a huge FIVE STARS for me! Good job, author!

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Has potential with good editing

Well, the summary is intriguing. It makes the readers want to read more of the story. The plot is also quite good. But the problem comes with the really fast pace of the story. The story escalates very fast right after the beginning that made me quite confused. Also, there were lots of grammar errors that could be improved. And personally, I think a little more background description and description of the characters could do good with the story. I suggest setting the pace so that the story becomes more enjoyable instead of rushed like I felt while reading. But apart from these little errors, I'd say it does have a potential and could do really well with proper polishing.

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Interesting

Well, the summary is quite captivating and the plot is good. I was instantly drawn to your story with your summary. But there were quite a lot of grammar errors in terms of present and past tense, mostly. And there were some errors in spellings and such which can get in the way of smooth reading. So you might want to fix those. But other than that, I think it's a good read so far. The author's way of writing is commendable and with a few editing, I can say it's got a good potential.

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Lovely beginning

It has such a sweet beginning!😍😍 I loved every sentence of it! The story outline seems sweet and there weren't any grammar errors I could find. I'm quite disappointed that only one chapter is published so far. I'll be waiting for the next chapter with bated breath. Literally πŸ˜…πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ₯°

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Absolutely intriguing

I absolutely loved the story! It was like watching a thriller movie with perfect mixture of adventure, action, fantasy and many more that I can't even list out. The summary alone got me captivated and the rest of the story was equally intriguing. Honestly speaking, I somewhat felt like the story was a little too straightforward, like the characters moved a little too fast and I personally feel that a little more background and characters' description could make it even more interesting but that might be the intent of the author. Anyhow, I really enjoyed the book and couldn't find a reason why it deserves any less than five stars!
P.S. I really loved the mysterious ending as well! Good job!

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A good read

I love the beginning of the story, the way you've described every setting and events occurring in the story. The author has a unique way of writing that pulls the readers right in and leave them wanting to read more. I got a little confused as the story suddenly jumps forward from the prologue but I'm sure things will start making sense once the other chapters are published. However, I feel that a summary would be more helpful to get a general idea about where the story is going. That being said, I personally think that it's going to be a wonderful story once you get a hang of the storyline. All in all, I think it has a great potential and I can't wait for more chapters. The author has done a remarkable job with this!

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Go, Carson!πŸ˜…

Okay, I love the badass alpha Carson πŸ˜… She has a strong personality and from what I've read so far, the story is going on great. I found some grammar errors and I personally felt like the story progressed a little too fast for me to comprehend. It might just be me though. But I must say, the plot is amazing and truly intriguing. I like what you've written so far and will be looking forward to the next updates!

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A good one

The thing I loved the most about your book is your selection of characters. The female protagonist is not some powerless, soft spoken nobody like you find in most of the stories. She's equally as powerful and strong as her mate and that makes the story more intriguing. I love the plot and couldn't find any significant grammar errors. All in all, I loved it!

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Loved it!

Absolutely loved it. The beginning is the part that I loved the most. It pulls the readers right in. And the way the story unfolds has me falling even more in love with the story. I found some tiny bits of grammar errors but they're not that big to deter my love for the story though! I think it's really a good read.

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Dangerous to my heartπŸ˜…

Phew! πŸ˜… Only two chapters and my heart is beating like crazy. The starting is absolutely intriguing and every sentence has the potential to give a bone chilling effect to the readers. The story telling is incredible. The way you've described the setting and the motion of the characters has me spellbound. It's definitely one I wouldn't mind waiting for the next update. Good job!

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A good one!

The beginning of the story is great. It makes you want to read more of it and the chapters that follow don't disappoint the readers at all. In fact, they're even better. I felt like you might want to look onto your grammar and punctuation a little bit, as for example, I think it would sound better if you include commas and exclamation marks and others while stating a conversation. That way, the readers can actually imagine the tone that the characters are speaking with, whether it is an angry call or a playful one and so on. It's what I felt like anyway. But the plot of the story more than makes up for everything else. It has a good potential and I really enjoyed reading your story.

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Got me totally hooked

Okay, I actually wanted to start it off with a couple of chapters so that I have a general idea about the plot but even I could stop even after I reached halfway to it. Every chapter had me on the edge and I really enjoyed this thrilling journey. I found some tiny errors with grammar, like a little mixture of past and present tense that you might want to see to,but overall, I must say, it's definitely worth reading. I love it!

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A fantastic fantasy!

I know, only four chapters are published so far. Well, five, if you count the first one I assume it the prologue. But let me tell you, even these few chapters are so good that I suddenly want to read the next one as fast as I can and at the same time wait for the whole book to be completed so that I could binge read it without torturing myself with the wait for a new chapter every now and then. The story actually got me goosebumps as I read about the transformation of Wren. And everything is just so... fantastic! I just can't wait for another chapter.

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Captivating

Okay, I'm in love with the way you write. Every sentence I read made me feel like I was right there with the characters. The sentences were very well formed and the plot was great, too. I couldn't find a flaw in your writing. Great work of fiction!

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Bewitching😍

So, I love the beginning of the story. Even the synopsis and prologue had me captivated. The writing style is great from what I've read so far. I'm a bit disappointed that only three chapters are published so far. But yeah, it's definitely a five star for me and I know I'll be eagerly waiting for each update! Good job!

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A good one, really

Well, I found the story quite good so far. The arrogant and possessive Italian and feisty Filipino make quite a couple with their constant disagreements. However, I thought the first few chapter were a bit like going on circles. Like she keeps on running and he chases her everytime but as the story progresses on, I must say I found it kinda sweet the way Massimo softens for her. There are some grammar errors that I noticed like in terms of tense and spellings but other than that, I love your story! I'll definitely be sticking up to it until the end!😊

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Unique

So, even with few chapters, this book has me completely hooked. The story is not like any other I've read before and the author's way of writing was simple, yet captivating. Simply put, I love this book already and am desperately waiting for more chapters. It's definitely a five star for me. :)

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Sweet

Okay, so I found the story quite sweet. I instantly fell in love with the big bad but adorable pouty Alexios and lovely, smart Ysabel. There were some incidents and conversations which were incredibly funny as well and those just made my day. However, I was left somewhat disappointed with the random turn of events such as their marriage and how things progressed afterward. And the end, I felt was a little dissatisfying. Or is it the end or are their more chapters to follow? Forgive me if there are more chapters remaining but if there are more ti come, I can't wait to read them. I felt there were some little errors in grammar but other than that, it's a really good story that has the perfect mixture of sweetness, darkness, mystery, romance and everything you would want in a romance story. I really enjoyed reading it and will be waiting if there are, indeed, other chapters coming along!

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Intriguing

Simply intriguing. That's the only word I can think of. I read all chapters written so far in a single sitting and although I was a little confused for the first couple of chapters, I became more and more transfixed by the events as the story went in. It has a perfect mixture of adventure, uniqueness, mystery, thriller and I'm sure a sizzling romance is to come soon. Overall, it's been an interesting experience and I can't wait for the story to be completed!!! You've done a really good job, author!

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