Nadine

Colours

Wonderful story! Well written and well executed. A familiar trope with familiar people that left me feeling warm and happy inside.

My only critique is that the paragraphs can get a little long at times. There's a lot of information put together, and it would be nice to see it being broken up!

All in all, good job! I look forward to reading more of your work!

borahae <3

I have seven rich brothers?

Remember to take all feedback with a grain of salt! After all, we are all here to improve our writing.

1) I think the plot is fine. A bit stereotypical, but generally alright. It would be more interesting if you could add in more unique twists that would set you apart from similar stories like these.

2) Your characters don’t quite spark off the page. Characterization of each individual member of BTS is not clear, and they all seem to blend together.

3) The backstory could be handled with a litte more sensitivity. It is a difficult topic to manoeuvre, and right now it lacks a certain nuance to make it feel important to the general plot of the story.

4) Writing style is a bit hurried. Could pull in more emotions to make the reader feel more invested in story.

5) Good grammar and punctuation! Your work is generally very clear to read.

All in all, well done! Your story is compelling and fun to read. I hope this review was helpful, and I hope you continue writing this story!

Till Death Do Us Part

I think your story has plenty of potential, and I hope to see more updates in future! Your writing is clean and easy to read, and I am excited to see when Jimin appears in the story.

I do think, however, that your characterisation of your main character could be a little bit stronger to set her apart from the average female character. Apart from that, good job! Best of luck to you and your writing!

YES

Heart-wrenchingly beautiful and intricate. Very elegantly written!

I'm not quite familiar with the details about the war, but I feet like you captured the general atmosphere very well. War is always a tricky subject to write about, as it requires a certain kind of nuance to get your message across. In this case, I was tossed right into a sea of desperation, sorrow, and pain, watching the story unfold from a mixture of narration from your character's perspective, and a compilation of letters he had sent to his lover.

One thing I think could be improved is plot. As far as historical novels about war go, this one doesn't quite bring anything new to the table. There is plenty of room to explore the love and loss on a deeper level, if you are willing to give your characters the space to do so.

All in all, I think you did a fantastic job! I truly look forward to the next story that you write. You have great potential!

The Wrong Train

Good plotting, interesting storyline! I loved how you wove Sophia's thoughts in between lines of your story. It was entertaining to read, and has a lot of potential.

One thing you can work on is dialogue. Your character's conversations sound stilted at times, which can be tough to read. Having good dialogue will enhance the overall fluency of your story, and make it more sophisticated.

Finally, your writing style could also use some sharpening. In some parts of your story, your writing tends to feel a little unnatural. I think this is something that will definitely get better with time, but just pay attention to some awkwardly phrased sentences.

All in all, I enjoyed reading your story! I especially loved the kpop references.

Best of luck in your writing!

Destined to Meet

Hello! I hope you will take all my feedback with a grain of salt, and only make the changes that you feel comfortable making!

Firstly, the reason why I gave the plot 3 stars is because I think the plot of the story is not the most unique. This story feels a little cliched and stereotypical, which is in itself not too bad, but the execution of these familiar tropes lacks nuance and style. Bringing in some special twists and turns could make your story stand out, and make your plot a lot more interesting.

Secondly, I think your writing style is pretty solid. It's easy to read and understand, and provides details of your story with good clarity. One thing that you could stand to work on is dialogue, as your character's dialogues and interactions can feel quite stilted and awkward at times. Working on making them more natural could add more fluency to the general progression of your story.

Another thing to consider would be your paragraphs. While I do understand that you have paragraphs, it would be good to leave a line in between each paragraph to make your story simpler to read. There are a few spelling errors here and there, but those can be easily remedied.

I noticed that the main character's name has changed from Amaryllis Whiper to Amaryllis Shaw somewhere in the novel. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but I'm pointing it out in case it is a mistake!

All in all, your story has good potential! I hope you continue to work on it, and always try to improve your writing. Best of luck!

Ps, your book cover is super cute. Love!