I found this story by accident and thought I'd give it a read. It's the first thing I've opened and the last thing I've read for the last three or four days (I have to work some of that time too). I like the story. I like how it went. The plot is good and overall, yes I would give you four whole stars. You do have some problems with grammar and spelling which you might need to work on. Otherwise, this was fun. That cliff-hanger though...
Anyway, thanks for the story and happy writing! :)
PS: Added an extra star since you're so awesome ;)
This was... wow!
I wasn't expecting to learn something but I did. Because I often face this same problem myself, the story spoke to me personally. I was very happy to find such a story, short as it is. I really liked it and I hope to see more just like it. This is a very good bit of writing with a lesson I think everyone can understand. Thank you so much for writing. You have a new fan :)Read the story now
This is pretty awesome!
I first read this as one of those personalised stories, then I lost the link and forgot the name but I thought I should really find it again. I did and I love it! I'm only in Chapter 4 but I'm pretty blown away by it. I really can't wait to read the rest. Great job!Read the story now