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Unforgettable Love

I am a sucker for a good mafia story, and an epic mix up story, and this one's right up that alleyway. It's a good story, and a good premise, and I think it has promise. It’s got that organic friendship that is to die for, and is so relatable, and I really enjoyed the dynamic between Ximena and Lucia.

What I did find strange was that Ximena didn't put up a fight when Grace and Thalia were leading her off to only God knows where. Who blindly goes along like that, after being mistaken for a whore? I think that was out of character for Mercado, especially with how tough she is portrayed.

Another thing I would suggest is making it clear who is speaking and keeping the laughs unwritten. A simple, ‘she laughed’ instead of 'haha' would work.

I suggest splitting chapters 5 and 6. It jumbles everything up with Capo’s POV in chapter 5. Also, the scenes that repeat in POV switches, only share what we didn't learn from the previous POV, so it doesn’t become repetitive. I don't want to come off too nitpicky, so that's all I'll say in terms of mechanics.

In regard to the story and the plot, I enjoyed it. I liked that we were able to see things from their different POVs.

Interesting Story

I love the pun in the title; restoring the art restorer. It gives the story the perfect connection to Lauren that runs skin deep. And reading further, it's even more interesting to find out that Jay suggested this to Lauren as a way of covering up her scars. That moment tied the entire story premise together, and I loved every minute of it.

It's one of those stories that starts off slow and then picks up and reels you in right in the middle; when Jay come into the picture. From the moment they met, I was eager to know what would come of it. I love their slow budding romance, and the tension packed build up, it kept me curious to find out more. Their progression from the first kiss was explosive, and I like that the story still focused on Lauren’s project in Australia while all the ‘drama’ with Jay happened.

My main critic would be that the author could rework the opening chapters, so they're clearer and hook better. Look into establishing a stronger setting that fosters a sense of place for the story. The opening chapter is currently a bit rough to follow, but right after Lauren meets up with Kim it clears up.

Overall, it is an interesting love story with great promise.

A Great Love Story

This reminds me of the novel Message from Nam, of love and war. It's a story of how war ruins everything. The anguish and depression, and this is one of the few times I've read a character who understands that going to war to fight and die does not prove you're strong, or that you are a man. It's a very grounded perspective and I loved every minute of it. My favourite part were the letters, that started off good, then just went downhill. It really depicted how the war affected Milos mentally. I enjoyed how I learnt about Bohdan's really serene personality through Milos' introspection, and how Milos was willing to go to war in his stead, so he would not be tainted, or possibly killed. It's an evergreen story, with an unexpected ending.

A Great Read

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I loved the characters and the character development, I loved how organic Leighton's and Joshua's relationship formed, and how the two came to be. I loved how the author made me feel such hate for Dakota, and sympathize with Jeighton (did I get the ship name right?).

I enjoyed how charming and goofy David and Lincoln were, and how easily they accepted Leighton into the fold. It's a story that truly fosters friendship, forgiveness and growth, and I look forward to what the author has in store for book 2.

If you want drama, twists and romance, give Jaded Heart a read.

THE EYE OF YOL

The Eye of Yol is an effigy of a voyage to new horizons. The imagery, the descriptions, the words, so beautiful it flows like a waterfall that just keeps falling.

The premise of this story's unique and it reminds me of this thing I do where I address letters to a stranger, in a journal form recounting my ordeals and whatnot. The story follows a mother's journaling of her voyage on the Eye of Yol to her child, and it is truly exceptional. The world building, as excepted was very well done.

It does carry on as though the readers know exactly what Xantha speaks of when she rambles about her transoceanic journey, using words and naming places and phenomena we know nothing of. Of course that comes from the particular style of writing, but it gets a bit confusing to keep up with all the information. I mean she's writing to a 12 years old Shae, is she able to understand all of this?

Still I loved her voice, her narration, especially of the encounter with the octopod creature and her dream about Shae. It was kind of symbolic of how she felt, being away from Shae for so long, pursuing her own interest instead of putting Shae's first. That's what I got from that scene.

Good Story

It is a budding dramatic plot, of course that's usually the case with teen fiction. I've always wondered about fast forming friendships like Y/N and Jimin's and if they really exist, what I loved more was how they bumped into each other and how their paths intertwine from there. Y/N's a strong, confident MC and I'm a sucker for those, I love MCs who stand up for themselves and others, and I also like the premise of Jimin not encouraging or defending Seolhyun's bullying.

I think it's too busy with the capitalization, italics and short sentences here and there. I don't think there's need to italicize a POV character's thoughts as the chapter already follows their account of things.

In terms of mechanics, it does need a good round of edit. The dialogue isn't properly spaced between characters which makes it hard to follow along. There's also not enough description of setting to establish a sense of place or in depth characterization to connect with the characters. I also think the grammar could be reworked so the story's far more enjoyable.

But overall, good story with potential.

Amazing Story!

Luminous is storytelling as its best. The writer's use of exposition and dialogue to push the story was exceptional.

Meya is a beautifully written character, so well written I felt the hurt she felt, especially with being the black sheep and all. The tale's got a bitter-sweet feeling, 5 chapters in and I'm wiping my eyes, especially that scene with her father. The hurt she felt when he said those things, I felt it and that is an amazing skill.

There's a curiosity to know why Meya is green-eyed and what the future holds for her, and what her new life at the Hadden castle will amount to. As upset as I got with Mirram Hild, I loved his POV, it was sarcastic and very enjoyable to read. There's a lot I want to say, but I'd rather go to the comment sections in the story to dish 🥰

There's a symbolism I really liked and that's the categories with Marin topping it and Meya at the very bottom, and how te Hilds' names start with an 'M'.

The setting and premise are so well done, down to the vivid relationship Meya had with all her siblings and her parents. A masterpiece, this one.

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Why Haven't You Read This Yet?

I love this tale Karin, you did an amazing job weaving all these different characters into a world outside their own worlds. The friendship, comradery, battle and the love, oh 'twas incredible to read.

It's my second time reading this all over. It's got action, romance, and fantastic dialogue and world building. Amazing writing Karin. I don't mean to be biased but Sapphire and Death's love story is my favourite! So beautiful.

Interesting Story

The story's got an interesting premise. Intrigue, suspense and wonder. It's a promising read and quite difficult to predict where exactly the plot's headed. The blurb's got me sold on what the secret to heaven is, who wouldn't want to know that? 😄

A Must Read!

I can’t wait to re-read this here! I love it, my favourite part is how they met❤️❤️❤️, such beautiful writing Karin.

His Kitten

Interesting story premise. I enjoyed how Vincent just pops into the story unexpectedly (while I was expecting Daniel to be her knight in shining armour), and has me guessing and wondering if he's a good guy or not. The progression is great, the conflicts are resolved gradually as the story continued; my questions are answered, and I get comfortable with Vincent being with Rosie. I do however still find the age difference unsettling, especially with both Daniel and Vincent, but that’s the premise of it, so I’ll move on from that. There’s also Vincent’s history with her mother, and the loose premise of Stockholm syndrome.

Overall, it was an interesting read with good twists. It would be even more interesting if the author were to establish the setting more concretely with a bit more world building, so we get an actual sense of place, and we’re able to picture their surroundings more clearly.

Lightning Seeker

I enjoyed reading this, and I loved Sky. This is a Scifi adventure that is very unexpected with Vale sneaking onto a ship to become a lightning seeker. She's a very determined and strong main character, putting the welfare of others before hers, and she reminds me a lot of Alita.

Lightning Seeker is a fast-paced adventure that will leave you guessing. Right from reading the summary, I was curious to find out where Vale's adventure would lead, and with Vale and Sky going from one ship to the other, and fighting droids twice their sizes, you have no idea what the outcome will be, and it leaves a tingling curiosity that pushes you to read on.

The story paces well and the action is phenomena, also the author focused on the main story and didn't get carried away with the romance, which made me crave more of it. I loved Sky, I loved how it was easy to feel what he felt and relate to him even without words.

I definitely recommend that you check this book out, I guarantee you will enjoy it

The Willow Rise Six

Oh! The unique characterization of each of the six and how there's this feeling of sinners and saints, yet the supposed saint has his own skeletons that are eating him whole—just brilliant! I enjoyed the masterful storytelling, it created an insatiable need to learn about each character and see how the entire team functions on this quest.

I love Bill's character, so poised, stoic and calculating, it was so thrilling to watch this play out like a movie. Such an unusual lot, and learning about their past and how in a way they're indebted to Bill, and seeing them from another character's POV was so genius. It created this flow and pace in the storytelling that reminded me a lot of the Magnificent Seven film.

The most rousing moment for me still is the scene with Mr Banks, I did not see that twist with Mr. King coming, how I fell in love with the scums and sinners of Willow Rise there.

This is a suspenseful and beautifully written story, makes me want to be a part of this team. Each has a story, a past they're seeking to atone for, and it's just so relatable in an indescribable way. Alan's a maestro storyteller.

The Unnamed

This was so goooood. It kept me glued till the end, horrified too and more than ever terrified of camping. Such a gripping tale that leaves you guessing and agitated and the suspense—phenomenal!

The dialogue and the entire reality show concept shows how much detail and work the author put into this, and so did the pacing and the addictive storyline.

Kerri is such a fantastic character, loved her right from the onset, especially with her reservations about Darren being a 'freelance survivalist' from the beginning, almost as if she sensed things would take this turn on some level.

This story should, if it isn't already, be in your reading list. It's a fantastic story that's well written and just pumps you up! If there were more stars, I'd add them.

Great Story

I love the pacing of the story, it flows so well and compels you to keep flipping until you lose yourself in the story. The writing style's clean, minimalist and very easy to follow, I mean the writer does a great job of getting the tale across without jargon, and it's bodes well for everyone!

I love the characters. I love how from patching her up, Dillon is pulled into her chaotic life and the slow budding romance that sets in. As I said before, everything flows smoothly; the setting, their backstories and the dialogue. The portrayal of how they are from two different worlds but not so far apart literally is an interesting premise.

Just like Dillon, I am curious about El, how did things get to that point for her? What does she really want? It's fantastic how the MC is someone we're able to relate to right off the bat, and is literally the girl next door. Then there are the shadow men who compound my questions, I'm yet to finish the story, so I look forward to learning all about that. In a way I am glad she's not going through it alone anymore, even though it means Dillon sharing in the torture.

Great Story

I love the mysterious aura of the story, and at this point I don't know what to expect. It's a new premise that leaves me with a lot of questions. Horror? Mystery/Thriller? Fantasy? And what's going on with Grayson and Eleanor? I am so eager to find that out, and the author has done a fine job of hooking the reader with the need to learn what happens.

The opening with Grayson's dream was vivid and well done; I felt the air shift with him. I felt sorry for Eleanor, having to clean up after Grayson every darn time must be exhausting, especially with her health.

Eilif is an interesting character, I'm curious about his intentions and interest in Eleanor. And if what Avice said about Eilif's aura is true, then damn! What does he want with Eleanor, and how does Grayson's dreams tie into all of this? You're unable to guess the outcome of the story and that's a fascinating nip.

There's a lot of questions that push you to continue reading. A great story with a compelling premise, and I believe once the author takes the time to clean up the mechanics of the story, it'll be even more fantastic.

Masterful Storytelling

Alright here's the deal, this is one of those stories you read and keep on reading, and have no words to leave in a review, because all I want to do right now is reminisce the story with someone who already read it. And that's how spoilers happen.

The opening with Grey's predicament was gripping as was the very vivid depiction of his ordeal and response to the gnome's actions and vices. The pacing was smooth, walking us through the story carefully, slowly and weaving in history, backstories, setting and world building in a way that leaves you elated... and did I mention the subtle humour? I never would have guessed that Reggie was a roaster, or that Alieda in a fit would enter him into the competition.

I like the author's take on a woman as a blacksmith and defying society's image of the female paragon. I mean as much as I adore the portrayal of Alieda, I was left curious about Sera, I surely would kill for a POV from hers or Grey's., and Thomas too. They were all great characters. I love Thomas's audacity to say things others wouldn't necessarily say, it was so fun to read.

Overall, the author put a lot of work into this, and it shows in the delivery. The politics of the town, Alieda's background and her relationship with her father's and her friends. It all comes together to create a picturesque town I wanted to be a part of.

A Wicked Heritage

I am a fan of Mayaserana from reading The Untold Forest, and honestly, I didn’t think I’d love another book as much as I love the Untold Forest, or another character as much as Maeve.

I was wrong. This blew me away! Beautiful writing, setting and worldbuilding and the characters! She has a flair for characterization.

I love the characters, love the dialogue and I enjoy the subtle humour that doesn’t distract from the story; it fuels it. We’re able to experience two characters and their struggles with difficult parents, and I believe that commonality they have is highlighted beautifully.

This will keep you glued until the end, so yes, I strongly recommend this; this is one book you HAVE TO read.

Good story

It’s a promising tale. I believe it’s the first draft so I look forward to seeing how it turns out after the writer polishes it up and fixes the mechanics.

Story wise, it is quite interesting especially with the entire intergalactic battles and quest for answers, which I believe is also a quest to discover and find oneself. I would have loved more vivid world building, there isn’t a sense of time in regards to how long their intergalactic travels take or getting from one point to the other. It appears the major chuck of world-building went into the prologue and then everything else doesn’t follow.

Character wise, I liked Selene’s determination and audaciousness, especially with Lotus. But then it quickly became irksome because she thought she could say whatever she wanted to whoever cos she is Selene, a Tenno of the first team and a badass.

One drawback for me was a chunk of the dialogue. They need to be restructured and reword to be more propelling.

My personal opinion is this: given how the team is propped up as the first team and all; losing one of their best fighters like that didn’t add up. I still can’t digest the entire death scene. Another troubling issue is that as the first team, such a case shouldn’t be so hard to crack. They kept dwelling on a no brainer even though they knew it was a no brainer. It just seemed to drag on with the team idling around for nothing.

Selene’s character and sense of entitlement made this hard to read. I still don’t understand her conviction in stating her team failed her, that’s not the case, not from what I read.

If they had expressly told her to stop digging or something along those lines I’d be more inclined to believe that they had in fact failed her. She fails to be logical in seeing things from their perspective, perhaps that’s where her character arc occurs further down the road.

Still I have to commend the writer for creating a character that I feel very strongly about. It’s very good characterization.

THE ARTIFACT

I loved this story. I enjoyed how it started off first in both Wahya and Morgan's original worlds and time and then from running for his life he crash lands on Morgan, in the future. Her response to him was enjoyable to read, as was his reaction to the time jump and his 'artifact'.

I would say it was quite endearing how they're able to trust each other without understanding what the other was saying. I have to say I thoroughly enjoyed Wahya's POV. The author does a great job of building the characters and their interests through switching between their POV.

I'm curious about how they'll make things work, and why Wahya jumped to 2023. We understand how both parties came to be in possession of the gorget, but why Wahya? Why jump then? What are the stakes? I'm eager to learn those as their slow budding romance forms.

I HEAR YOU

The story's plot is new and unique. I was thrown with the prologue [by the way, the name David Keen completely reminded me of Tom and Elizabeth Keen from the Blacklist, but I digress], wondering how he'd hear the music if he went through with the surgery and the relationship between David, Ryker and Porter.

I love how the chapters are rotated between Ryker and Porter. Porter's silent entry into Ryker's life and Ryker's reaction to his genuine interest in both him and his music was so sweet to read. The author did a great job portraying Ryker's dilemma with being different and the consequences of such in school. Not to mention his acceptance of his place in the social hierarchy and how he tries to push Porter away to spare him.

In terms of mechanics, this needs a good round of editing. There's a tense issue with switching between past and present as well as hard to follow dialogue, with almost no exposition in certain chapters. However, the plot's solid and this is set to be a fantastic read once it's polished and properly edited.

THE POWER OF KNOWLEDGE:

The Power Of Knowledge is a very well written fantasy tale that takes you on a journey with a group of 'charmed' who are seemingly given a choice, but not quite.

I quite enjoyed the writer's ability to give each character a distinctive background, experience and motivation. Such that we're able to see how Allegra perceived Sophie with her 'princess' remark and how Harlan although born into affluence isn't as irksome as the kind usually is. Those little contrasts in personality; Harlan's outspokenness and carefreeness as well as Sophie's prim and proper decorum did a lot to establish their character.

I enjoyed the premise as well, and how Sophie's charm links back to the title of the book, it's one of those connections that instantly pulls me in. Another fantastic thing about this story is the author's grammar, it is impeccable. The choice of words and structure is so remarkable. It ties in well with the setting and the time period of the story.

The descriptions and dialogue, and might I add how the backstories and history of how the charmed came to be impacted the way they are, were seamlessly entrenched into the actual storytelling without coming off as 'telling'.

Good Story

Mcota is a good story, quite expected and not at all unusual compared with other fantasy stories. It’s got the usual ‘new school’ ‘new life’ ‘hot guy’ plot which is a bit overdone, but it’s a good story, and I look forward to seeing the author's twist on this.

What I love most about this tale is Khaliah. I love her characterization and how relatable she is as a person I would actually want to meet. She's portrayed as strong and quite philosophical, and not in the usual 'bratty' way. I love that she's confident and sure of herself. I believe more heroines need to be written like this.

Ethan fits well into his 'Mr mysterious' role, which keeps the suspense and edge to the story, and his POV is where the eerie goodness is. The exposition sometimes strayed into some sort of ideological broodings and I loved it.

In terms of mechanics, there was more telling as opposed to showing, and I would have preferred far more superior grammar to really paint a more vivid picture.

Overall, it's a very promising tale.

Fantastic Story!

Spolier alert; you will end up binging this goodness at a go. It's a very fascinating tale that has a native 'tales by moonlight' feeling to it. I loved the narration and how unique each character’s voice was.

It gave me chills, at first it started off mellow, like perfect family and all, then Finn happens and everything else booms, along with the forest. And just when you think you’ve seen it all, Finn shows up again with the most amazing personality, and oh the slow budding romance between Maeve and Hakken, or is it the friendship with Regn? Or the appearance of the ancients? I can’t really bask in how much I thoroughly enjoyed this without spoilers so I’ll put a pin in it.

This was a beautiful story, it engaged all of my emotions and I couldn’t put it down until I finished. Well done!

In terms of mechanics, there were a few errors, they did not distract from the story, of course. Nothing a round of editing wouldn’t fix. I did notice that you tend to write it like this ‘how I would’ instead of ‘how would I’ it happened a handful of times.

Good Story

The premise of the story is quite nice and the plot's intriguing. The one draw back is the mechanics, it's nothing a good editing round wouldn't fix. While this might dissuade some readers, I'd urge them to give the story a chance, overtime you get past the mechanics and really get into the plot and story structure and how the tension rises with the Lycans and Amora and the Anomalies.

What I'm looking forward to at this point is character development for both Amora and Xavier. I want to see how their feelings for each other, as well as their involvement in this war against the Anomalies really shapes who they become.

Binged In One Sitting

I thoroughly enjoyed how you took us into his journey of friendship and brothers in arm. So well done and unexpected. I really want to see what becomes of the duo and Berenike as well.