Zhensachiko

Hell for Leather

Beautiful story. The description makes the readers think they are right in the scene with Zeke and Alaine as they journeyed together to escape from the baddies.

I have zero complaints about the story. I'm hooked with it from the beginning to the end! Thank you for sharing such an amazing story with us!

Death Survivor

Death Survivor has a potential to be a great book with a great plotline.

The only downsides are the grammar and punctuation. I'm not an expert in this subject either but I do believe that you could do some basic grammar and punctuation such as the usage of period/full stop at the end of every sentence, the use of commas, speech marks for the dialogues. If you can implement these three in your book, then I'd believe that it would make your book looking better and understandable.

The excessive usage of Question mark and Capital Letters are very distracting. You wanted to make a dialogue which was spoken by one person but you ended each dialogue with multiples full stops and a question mark even though the sentence wasn't a question. Don't end it with multiple full stops and question mark unless the dialogue is a question itself. You used many Capital Letters in one sentence and it's not hard to figure it out that it's the first letter of the sentence is the only one needed to be capitalized.

Suggest: He said, "Maybe this is the one."

Wrong: He said Maybe This is The One........?

The whole book needs a polishing from the first sentence of the first chapter until the last sentence of the last chapter.

Off to a great journey with the characters!!

Hey there, I've seen that you managed to make it through the first chapter. I love seeing that you are making effort to keep going with the book and I hope to see more chapters coming soon. The plot is good and I love the character although several scenes were kind of rushed a bit but no worries, I understand each. Please don't give up on the book. The story is very good and don't leave me hanging 😆

Pssst, I look past your grammar and punctuation because I'm not an expert in it. For me, as long as I can understand the main course, the rest is just the side dishes. Keep going, fellow author! I'm looking forward to see more updates soon!

BTW I have the feeling I'm gonna hate Roman for what he did but it's too early to say about that. Can't wait to read more.

- zhensachiko

EIGHT

Who says an Android can't have feeling? Human is far heartless being than a robot.

Love the story as always! I'm moving on to your next story. Keep it up!! Expand the universe! ~♥~

Interesting story and worth the read.

This is a very interesting story about a group of people find some sort of treasure. It reminds me about Indiana Jones theme. The author makes a clear description of the setting and characters which enable me to visualize how the place or the people looked like. Though, I always ended up with weird ones because that's how my imagination works 😂

Love the names though! It's hard to pronounce sometimes but they are very unique bunch of names. Grammar and punctuation isn't my forte when written or reading book so I'm not going far for that. I'm struggling with the same thing too.

Anyway, this book is a jewel. Good work, author. I'm looking forward to read some more of your works.

Worth the read.

The description is beautiful and short but detailed. I could picture how each scene was happening. It's a little bit fast pace with no insight of the characters' lives especially the main ones. Maybe the author could spend a little bit of description for the characters like where is Annabelle's family resided, the family members, what were their names—something that could give a little insight of her life outside her job as a maid. Maybe the author would do that in the future updates since the book is still in progress.

I'm not really into this kind of book because it's not my cup of tea but something about it struck me. Maybe because the story sounded way too familiar to me. The story is kind of resembling/ inspired by Cinderella tales. Like she met the prince in a royal ball, a little of storms in their relationship which they overcome, and in the end, she fell in love with him and married him. But prove me wrong though!

Looking forward to read!

Worth the read

The plot is great and worth the read. My only concerns are;

1) the rapid changes in POVs without a clear indication which character owned the paragraph or sentence. Majority of the dialogues were told by one first speaker but was combined with the action of another speaker. Like when Rhys was speaking about something but his dialogue line wasn't clearly indicated as his and then, Danny's action was put in the same dialogue line. I had to re-read the sentence a few times to figure who was the speaker and who was doing the action.

Suggest: "........" Rhys said causing Danny to shrug but the lawyer went on, "......."

I know indicating a dialogue line and who speaks them could get really tedious but it could help the reader understands the story better.

2) Try to use Paragraph and makes new line for different speaker. I spotted many of the dialogues of several speakers were combined into one line or Paragraph which is really confusing and messy.

The story has potential. It just needs some editing to make it looks understandable and neat. And also, I'm disappointed that the ending just came abruptly. There was no telling what would happen next—whether Danny's family would fully accepted him for who he was, the relationship he had with Rhys and the topic they discussed in the final chapter. The story just died instantly at that. I hope the author could give a clearer ending or maybe you were planning for a second book where the current topic would be the main objective of the sequel. I don't know. It was disappointing to see the book ended abruptly.

Despite the ending and the format of the book, this story is worth the read for those who wanted a quick reading.

- zhensachiko