Afshara P.

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Leo♌ Muslim🕋 28th July🎂🍻

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Everything We Know

Honestly speaking, I didn't find the title suitable for the story; moreover, there is a bit information that makes you question yourself whether what you read before was correct or not. For example, the statement that Den and Angel grew up together. Then the information that Den doesn't grow old or reborn. If Den does not die or become old then how Angel and Den are together since childhood? Ash was entered in the story for a reason I guess, but is that just to have a baby with Angel? Did Angel decide to stay alive by leaving Ash or be with Den in real? Rather than that, I loved the story.

I feel pity for Ash; he left his home, his immortal life and everything for Angel and she couldn't handle the information that she dies if she gives birth to the baby. There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not so visible so it is ok, I guess.

7.5/10

I hope you work on your weak points and give us a new story with improvement. All the best!!! Looking forward to seeing your new production! Are you going to make a sequence of it?

- Afshara Chowdhury

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Corporate Bride

It seems like a roll-coaster ride; full of emotions. I found the concept a bit different as in most stories; the main characters fell in love during their contractual marriage. This one thing is found a bit different and exciting. I loved how the entire story turns out. Anderson confession was the best part of all. However, I found it weird that Anderson knew that his brother is adopted not him, but Mary loved his brother more than him. Should he have thought about this? Why his so-called mother loves Hansen and always ill-treated him. I found Mr Niles the dumbest person. Anderson and Hansen grew up in front of him, then he must have seen Mary's behaviour towards Anderson. Why he never feel suspicious about Mary's behaviour. A mother can love and care for another child but never more than her own child?! On top of that, Mary even treated badly with Anderson. If I put a logic is it, I find this confession lame. Mr Niles and Anderson literally never looked in this matter. How unpleasant?!

Except it, I found the story great! All the best! Waiting for your next sequence" Corporate Groom"!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Sexual Attraction to Mr.Mafia

Well, since childhood I am into Gangster and Mafia kind of stories; but there ate only a few books that are good.

Your work is one of them, I really like it a lot. The family drama with Ana was the best!

I loved your work. Looking forward to your production and update soon. Waiting for it!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Blackstone Inc.

Well, I guess I have only one word to say about this story, "Storm". If I start from the first, I would say Gen's friend, Rachel seems to have a perfect personality understand; that's why she has her a choker with "SLUT" written on it. A virgin turned into sex addicted. Gen was sexually attracted to Dominic, but it doesn't mean that she must submit to every Blackstone. I have heard that brothers like to share girls sometimes but sister as well, not that I heard of. With a slight dominant voice, Gen wets his panties. I understand that seeing an attractive man around you makes you arousal but all time to be needy is something. Now, about Dominic, he seems to act like a new or in-between dominant. There are some rules before you are in the 'sub-dom relationship'. An agreement that stated the rules and regulation, but this seems like more of a 'slave-master relationship'.

A few scenes make me tear my hairs from the head; especially like that time when Gen asked Dominic to act his age and to fuck her and he punished her OR when Preston surprised visited and Gen asked him to fuck him like a slut. No self-control, too weak. Weak to just a word - Daddy. She doesn't think before acting out but expected everyone to not judge her. Sometimes it makes me makes wonder whether she happens to have a split personality disorder. Jasmine might be sleeping on her way up but Genevieve is also doing the same but for a different reason. When Preston whipped her, Genevieve didn't set a safe word so how did she stop him.

This book is honestly amazing. It wasn't one hundred per cent original, but the way it is written and the way surprising things crop up is pretty damn innovative. I didn't find myself thinking that I had read something just like it recently (which I love). All that said, I did spot some pretty out there grammar mistakes, not that I'm a grammar pro or anything, but they were a little noticeable. Usually, when I read stories like this I don't comment on the grammatical errors, but I feel like this book has a lot of potentials,

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Vacay

The plot was so original and unique. It was really good that it kept me guessing on what more there can be; it did keep me on my toes most of the time, especially near the end. In my opinion, the story could not be any better. Vacation romance is quite a dead-end route but this one was like me giving options to back off, but the love won. This one thing is found a bit different and exciting. I loved how the entire story turns out.

It was one of those stories that if we read even one thousand times, we will still willing to reread it. There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not so visible, so it is ok, I guess.

It seems like I can't have enough of your writings. Your books are like oxygen to my heart and mind. Looking forward to your works! Update it sooner, please! Waiting for it! All the best for your future production!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Unforgettable

Honestly speaking, I personally don't think that the title of the story goes with the story. Moreover, it seems like all the P.O.V's are mixed. There is a continuous question in the mind that who is speaking? I just want to say, your writings are a bit complex, which makes it confusing. I liked the plot of the story but I couldn't stay attached to it. I hope you can revise it so that it becomes easier to read. I hope you will work in your mistakes and provide it with a good and clear story.

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Married To The Devil's Son

Honestly speaking, I didn't find the title suitable for the story; moreover, there are a few things that I know a bit off and unique, for example, the fact he was kind and caring, he is a demon but still, Lucian has no sign of it, except that he can't control his demon during intimated times, so he flies away; on the other hand, Hazel started liking him but can't express. I mean that the hell is going to? Another thing, Hazel is a princess but a dumb princess. How can someone walk away while a war is going to happen just to calm yourself? I believe it is important to Hazel but without a weapon? Moreover if Hazel is from a conservative kingdom, then how she is not taught to protect herself and her husband in times of need. She was not allowed to walk in her kingdom doesn't fall in the category of conservative families. Rather than, I sometimes fall disappointed by your sudden twist, it was good.

There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not some visible so it is ok, I guess.

7/10

I hope you work on your weak points and give us a new story with improvement. All the best!!! Looking forward to seeing your new production!

- Afshara Chowdhury

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300 Days To Fall In Love

I am speechless, yet I have so many words in my mind to praise your work. It was like a continuous craving in my mind to know what is going to happen next. I am typing and re-typing now, not knowing how my words would justify your work. Maybe this one would do... I love your work, with pure emotion and honesty. You know what there are some scenes which are so emotional that I wept. If I were in her place, I would have to take a bit more time and confront Leo until he decides to open up. Love's love is Leo's weakness but his anger destroys everything. Honestly speaking, I found Love quite seductive when she was drunk and opened up in front of Leo.

It was one of those stories that if we read even one thousand times, we will still willing to reread it. There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not so visible, so it is ok, I guess.

FUN FACT - I slept at 5 o'clock in the morning as I have completed three books of yours last night.

It seems like I can't have enough of your writings. Your books are like oxygen to my heart and mind. Looking forward to your works! Update it sooner, please! Waiting for it! All the best for your future production!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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The Wing Woman

I liked the concept; it was quite different. Boss and Assistant's story are quite common nowadays but I loved the relationship they have. Nala is the coolest characters I have ever read. She is sassy as well as beautiful. She is the perfect combination of beauty with brains. It was one of those stories that if we read even one thousand times, we will still willing to reread it. There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not so visible, so it is ok, I guess. FUN FACT - I slept at 5 o'clock in the morning as I have completed three books last night.

Looking forward to your works! Update it sooner, please! Waiting for it! All the best for your future production!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Safety Of His Arms

Honestly speaking, I don't think the title goes with the story; the title could be more catchy. this storyline is not bad but in some of the places, you couldn't explain the scenes properly. Especially the driving scene after the shootings. Moreover, it seems like you were jumping from one scene to another without any statement. You should have mention the leap between the changing as well as the P.O.V. s. I was thinking it is under Missy's but end up into Brandson's P.O.V. I liked how confident and strong willed Brandson was to fight for Missy in the beginning of the story. But it was quite weird that Missy was a virgin when she was with Jack , but when she came with Brandson; she almost seemed like jumping to top of Brandson while she was jealous and upset with Jack and Stacy. Unbelieveable!

I hope you work on your weak points and give us a new story with improvement. All the best!!! Looking forward to see your new production! Waiting for your next sequence" Safety Of His Arms(Connor)"!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Sold To Billionaire

I am speechless, yet I have so many words in my mind to praise your work. It was like a continuous craving in my mind to know what is going to happen next. I am typing and re-typing now, not knowing how my words would justify your work. Maybe this one would do... I love your work, with pure emotion and honesty. You know what there are some scenes which are so emotional that I wept. If I were in her place, I would have called the police; the first time those fucking hands were raised. I never like this thinking about women that they are useless, good-for-nothing. I despise whenever I meet this kind of men. It was terrific, and it was one of those stories that if we read even one thousand times, we will still willing to reread it. There were some grammatical and spelling mistakes but those are not so visible, so it is ok, I guess.

Looking forward to your works! Update it sooner, please! Waiting for it! All the best for your future production!

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The Loan Shark's Prisoner

OMG! I just fall in love with Hayden character! Everything was just perfect, moreover; you brought out the feeling about Hayden. A shy girl! Hayden Had a choice but she still chooses to save her brother. If I had such a brother, I don't know what would I have done. At least he broke up with Hayden, why? I mean is it not his fault that she is there? On top of that, Hayden said I love you to him. LIKE SERIOUSLY???
I liked Grayson before, but I never thought that he will behave like that. I thought maybe he will fly away with Hayden but he chooses to hurt her.

Anyways, I loved your story. I wish there is a sequence of it. Looking forward to your next production!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Obsession

"Obsession" is not bad, but this story had the same typical storyline in most Indian movies. You could attract the readers well, as the plot of the story is not bad. Your writings were good as well but to be honest I lost interest especially in the fight scene. A typical dramatic fighting scene! The fighting scene was soo predictable, Especially are those who have watch Hindi Movies before. Jessica's death was a bit new and shocking as well. I am a happy endings fan as well but there are some stories that deserve a separation-ending; this story does not deserve a sad ending.

My advice would be you better write something that is not soo predictable. I enjoyed it! But I believe you can do better! All the best! Looking forwards to your next work!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Billionaires Madness

OMG! I just loved it. You know what there are some scenes which are so emotional that I wept. The madness that Hunter feels for Luna makes me feel like someday Luna is going to grab a gun and shot Hunter when she will be not able to control herself. Moreover, Dylan seems to feel guilty for his behaviour now, but when he will come to knew about Luna's new haunted drive; he is going to be on fire. I am so impatient even the thinking of the face-off between Dylan and Hunter. I am waiting! Please update it soon.

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The Monster We Hide

The book was kind of a roller coaster. A mix of curiosity and excitement was there always. When they got married I thought the story is finished; the other chapters were like a cherry on top of the cake. I knew that they would win the battle but the death of her was too painful. It was completely unpredictable. I loved the plot of the story. It was amazing. it was one of those stories that if we read even one thousand times, we will still willing to reread it.

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Not A Dream

I like it; especially the "little rose" part, it was the best! I enjoy reading it a lot and I was totally hooked up with the story! Since the chapters are quite short, I guess it is better if you update it soon. It took me around 45 mins to complete all 13 chapters. I am looking forward to your work; especially this one. I guess I am a quick- reader that's why it took me less time. Anyway, what I mean to say is that if you can update the new chapters a bit soon then it is better. Cuz' this delay might hamper your reader's interest in this book "Not A Dream".

Looking forward to your works! Update it sooner, please! Waiting for it! All the best for your future production!

You are going to continue it, right? I mean there are a lot of writers who basically starts a book writing but does not finish it. I hope you will finish, you won't leave us in mid-road.

-Afshara Chowdhury

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THE BILLONAIRE BOSS

I really like the book and I was kinda hooked-up with the story. I like it and will to wait for your update.
Btw, you seem to copy-paste the first chapter twice.

Your writing skills are not bad but it is just that it is kind of paragraph writing novel; it would be better if you separate the dialogue of the main characters from the description of the place and situation. Rather than that others are alright.

Looking forward to your production!All the best! Update it soon! You are going to finish your book, right? I mean there are a few writers who seem to forget about completing the book and leave us in mid-way. You won't leave us, huh?

-Afshara Chowdhury

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That Billionaire

I like the plot of the story, but I can't tell you about the whole story since there is only one chapter.
It seems like you almost forgot about this work. I was quite interested in reading this but I guess I have to forget about it.

Update it soon. I am waiting for it for a quite long time.

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Trapped with the CEO

I really like the concept of this story, I was totally hook-up with the story. But I would like to say that you better check your writing before submitting as there are some spelling mistakes in your work. Except that everything else is up to the mark.

Looking forward to the next chapters of "Trapped with the CEO". All the best!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Greed

I kinda like the story as well as the plot. I was kinda hook-up with the story. By the way, I looked for it in Wattpad, but could not found the whole story. Which is a bit sad, to be honest. Your writing skill is quite good, I totally loved the plot. I was kinda hoping that you will post it in Inkitt as well; as in many countries; Amazon is still not available.

Looking forward to your works. Wish you all the best!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Adore

I surely love the plot though it was one of the common plots, the story is a bit boring... or should I say it is quite slow. I tried to keep reading as there are only four chapters so far, but I could not.

Well, your writing skill is not bad, but the problem is that you can't keep the readers being interested in the story.

I don't think I will recommend it to anyone if I could not able to tolerate it, how can someone else.

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Billionaire Maid

Well, I tried to hook myself with the story but I could just stand it for three chapters not more than that. I think that plot could have been more interesting if the main lead character; Dorles could play hard to get; this might have made the story a bit more interesting.

Well, your writing skills are not that bad but I guess you can do write it in English the whole story or what eng sub in parentheses where you write in another language so that people can understand it properly.

Hope you will look after the mistakes and try to solve it and present it in a better way! All the Best!

-Afshara Chowdhury

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Trial Dating

Well, I like the plot of the story. I am a bookworm person as well as a picky; satisfying me is either quite easy or too difficult. I could relate this main character with me honestly speaking. It seems like I got to learn a lot of things from it; one thing for sure that is having confidence in yourself.

I must say that you have a quite good understanding of writing style. Looking forward to your production! All the best!

- Afshara Chowdhury

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