The Suicide Club
This is the kind of stories I like. One's with dark plots and the idea makes you look at the world differently when you're finished reading it. I really want to know what happens to the characters. The only thing I say to do is fix the couple grammar mistakes here and there (but that's okay, it's ongoing so those things can be fixed easily), and add more emphasis to the characters. The only character that you really know how they are is Cameron, and Victor you also know how he is, but at the same time you don't really know why. A suggestion I can offer is to go into the character's backstories, and tell why the way they are. Give the characters a little personality. Other than that, I really love this story and can't wait to find out more. Plot is amazing! Keep up the good work and I'll definitely keep an eye out for new chapters that come out.
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Note: The suggestions I gave are just suggestions. If you don't want to heed them, it's okay! I'll still read the story anyway because it's good! :)
Hope you have a grand day! -A.A