Andrew Lamb

No published stories yet

Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Brilliantly creepy but needs refining

Missed Call is an impressive short horror story. It drives forward at a good pace, building the tension as we move forward toward the shocking conclusion. The plot draws upon a classic "home alone, creepy call" setting but adds to that with an original story - fabulously twisted. The author has aimed to produce a well-rounded shocker in a short story and has delivered.

From a horror point of view, top marks.
Unfortunately, the story is let down on its technical prowess.

I suspect the story was published a tad early. There are numerous errors with the grammar, sentence structure and punctuation throughout which was difficult to ignore. I was also a little confused by the timing; quite a lot happens within 20 minutes, 9:20 seems to be especially busy.

It is so infuriating as this story has the potential to be a classic, drawing upon elementary shocker mechanisms and delivered in a crisp pace to capture and ensnare the reader only to be let down by grammatical errors. It really needs an additional proof read.

Saying that, from an indie author this really is a very good attempt. Just need to hone that writing skill.

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Twilight Zone Style Horror

Great tale.

Short and snappy with a fabulous twist. The author has produced an original and chilling tale which draws upon a modern addiction. Not knowing Todd's eventual fate makes the story even more harrowing, I can only imagine that he will eventually starve or worse spend years trapped in his own little prison.

Poor Todd, mind I can't help but grin.

Read the story now

No badges received yet

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.