I really liked the way your characters are people of colour. Unless I am not mistaken, they sound Indian and I despite not being an Indian myself, your story made me have an appreciation for Indian customs and lifestyles.
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However, I did find some major issues in terms of style and techniques. There were a lot of spelling, grammar and punctuation errors.
There were also aspects of the story that I didn't understand. Why did Priya's fiancé propose to her father (you have mentioned that he proposed for Priya's hand in marriage from her father) i was wondering if Priya really did have consent in this.
Also, if all the guy wanted to do was have sex with Priya, then why did he marry her? Surely if all he cared about was sex he could have just hooked up.
Overall, getting to know a different perspective to erotica was an interesting experience and it definitely had me hooked.