Insριɾɑτιᴏn Sϵϵκϵɾ

Wow

I didn't expect to love it as much but you honestly made me sympathize with each character so I couldn't help it. I'm so proud of you for creating such a thoroughly enjoyable story and putting so much work into it. Others might see this and enjoy the plot but I payed attention to the small details and how much thought was put into each action. You've obviously researched a lot for every minor descriptions and have created a ton of realistic subplots to accompany the relatable characters and their mature way of thinking.
I usually don't enjoy side characters as much but if I have to choose a favorite part of the story, I must say I'd pick the children because they were honestly too adorable and I love the way you portrayed their thoughts and desires.
Overall, aside from a few small changes I've already told you about, I must say you've created an amazing story with versatile characters, darker themes and the perfect amount of talent! 😉

Slumber

First, I want to point out that my review is solely based on the first three chapters of this story, which leaves a large room for improvement later on.
The plot has a unique touch to it, which isn't seen that often but I feel like everything is happening in a very fast pace with barely any explanations. This makes the storyline intriguing but it also confuses the reader, especially when it comes to the sudden change of POVs and the new appearance of characters.
A big issue for me was the constant switch of tenses and the lack of defined sentence structure. This is an issue which could be still fixed easily with a read-through or the help of an additional app (e.g Grammarly) but it is very bothersome because it interrupts the reading flow and therefore makes one frustrated with the otherwise interesting plot.
I left some pointers in the comment sections but I'll sum it up here as well. If you fixed the punctuation, the sentence structure (+the separation of paragraphs) and choose one tense you'd like to use for the whole story instead of jumping from one to the other, the story would have a lot of potential.
Also, one thing which makes reading quite unpleasant sometimes is when the length of the chapters differs and this is strongly the case here. The first chapter displays details and a bit of a background story and then the rest feels very rushed and spontaneously different. One thing that really helps understand what is happening is the blurb in the beginning, which is a basic summary of the whole three chapters and let's one know what the purpose of the actions is.
All in all, the story could be improved very quickly with a little proofreading and a bit more thoughtfulness towards the general flow of the plot.

Interesting and Unique Story

I apologize for the delay because it truly took a while to read this story. I'm still not completely finished but I felt the need to express my feelings as of now.
First of all, the general description of the story is very eye-catching and intriguing, so I was pretty hyped up when I started reading. The beginning seemed mysterious and I enjoyed the details on each scene but to be honest, since I'm not really into mangas and comics, at times I felt like this particular story wasn't aimed at readers like myself.
The love story was sweet and awoke my interest once again since I'm a sucker for romance, so you've got me on that but I must admit, some aspects were confusing and there were chapters which never seemed to end. I would suggest shortening them up to create more clarity.
All in all, you have a pretty unique plot (especially with the fairies) and I really liked your writing style up to the few critics I just mentioned. I have a few chapters left and will surely comment once I see how it ends.
Great idea, keep working on it! :)

Unique and intriguing

The story is very unique and it's obvious you obtain a lot of knowledge when it comes to classical writing. I love the unique vocabulary that is used and I honestly think the writing style is even more captivating that the plot in on itself. I
I also really like the detailed descriptions and the thoughtful names and speeches. It's clear to me that the story is not just a first draft but a well-proofread book. That also made the experience very enjoyable.
At first, I was a bit confused by the plot and what was really happening but after reading a few chapters everything became clear. And don't get me wrong, even the parts I didn't completely understand were very intriguing and kept me at reading so that's another positive aspect.
If I have to be completely honest, the only thing I would criticize would be the choice of cover. I know design is not everyone's strength but I personally wouldn't have even started reading this book if I'd just randomly stumbled upon it. I would recommend to work on that but otherwise, this is definitely a story worth checking out!

Love the idea, not the execution

The idea is great and I was really in love with the characters at first but then, the plot became very contradictory in my opinion. I don't mind the grammar mistakes but I'd suggest you either proofread the chapters before posting or use a program for that because it would make the reading flow a lot easier and more enjoyable. My main issue is with the storyline and its development:
*SPOILER*
Although I appreciate it being different from the usual romances and it gives it a realistic feel that they don't only focus on their relationship but have separate lives, it's a bit frustrating that the three don't spend more time together. They've been separated for years and now they rekindle and realize they are actually in love and instead of being in the honeymoon phase, they are constantly with friends and so on. I just don't get it, especially for this story since that makes it drag a bit instead of showing any progress in their relationship. At least that's how I see it and it also kind of annoys me how they act with Lu. She was introduced so suddenly and now she is like their bestie, hanging out at their place half naked and wanting to be close to all three of them. I don't get how she was so close to her bully (Bethany) and now she wants to be friends with Mari. I understand that the book isn't only focused on Mari but it strongly felt like it's about her building her self-esteem and her relationship with the boys but I don't think we've seen all that much of that. There was no progress to her confidence, she just got it out of nowhere.
It's also great that we get an insight on the guys' soft spots and all but I guess I am used to romances being more focused on the lead characters and this is a bit frustrating, especially with the constant change of POVs. You start in third point of view, then change it to their separate perspectives, then jump to third POV once again and then out of nowhere, we get the views of her brother, their father and so on, which seemingly has nothing to do with the main storyline.
There are also some contradictory ponts which take away from the value of the story. Like for example, we got the explanation that Isaac and Beth hated Mari because the boys only hung out with her but since they're back, they've spent most of their time either at school, practice or with friends so that doesn't really prove that. Of course, that's how real life works but I'd really like some development and seeing them actually spend time together and "be cute". I also truly hope they won't try and experiment with Lu in the future because that would defeat the whole point of their three-way relationship, in my opinion.
Also, something that bothers me is how every adult simply accepts the fact that the three of them are together without asking a single question. It just doesn't seem realistic in such a small town, as previously described.
I really like the plot and the characters but such stuff really bugs me so I wanted to share, please don't take it personal, it's just critique towards the story and the realism of it but I otherwise appreciate your craft and will keep reading your other stories!

Disclaimer: This review is solely based on the first 400 pages.

Amazing!

I seriously loved this! It was descriptive, well-written and although it was short, the characters have enough appeal to make you want to read further on. The plot is very creative and I applaud your originality as well as the way you make your story come to life with extreme detail but no extensive paragraphs with unneeded explanations.
All in all, a wonderful work so far! I'd actually love to see what happens next 🤩

Not as impressed as usually..

I love the series and I seriously like every single character for specific reasons but I must say, after reading Rage's story, this one was a bit underwhelming. It had the same structure but there was one big difference between this one and the first two, the characters didn't have that reason to belong together. I mean Rage and Iris for example saw each other and fell in love because they both fit together due to their similar demons. They needed each other so they grew closer to help one another. Vik was a known womanizer, who didn't have a single ounce of appreciation for women before Lys appeared. Although, I love their characters individually, Lys wasn't anything special until we learned about her backstory so in reality, there was absolutely no reason for her to be any different in Vik's eyes. One can argue it was simply love at first sight but for me personally, this wasn't achieved as convincingly, especially since all they had in common was the fighting and their persistent hormones.
I just think the story needed more of a slower build up and character development to make it more realistic. Otherwise, as always, I really enjoyed your work and applaud you for the detailed research and description. Perhaps I'd liked this one more if I hadn't been left with Rage and Iris' unbeatable intensity prior to it but one thing I'd really appreciate when you're editing is making sure the stories can be read as stand alone. I like all the Riders and am interested in their stories but I would have loved to have the ability to chose stories as I please instead of following a certain order.

Perfect!

I loved this even more than the first one! The rawness of the characters and the overall heartwrenching plot made me obsessed and I loved how you made two broken souls grow together in one. I felt like it all developed in a nice pace and their growth as individuals and as a couple were displayed perfectly to fit the progress.
Overall an amazing read that I wouldn't mind rereading in the future!

Surprisingly good

I love how you combined Norse mythology, Viking history, gangster lifestyle and the small bit for us, werewolf lovers to create a unique plot with strong main characters and delightful side additions.
I was mostly glad that despite the fictional aspects, there was a nice doze of realism. For example the members not instantly believing Ava instead of their leaders, the progress in their heavily damaged relationship and so on.
All in all, great job! If you fix the grammar and spelling when you're editing it will be perfect but for now.. I am heading towards the second story!

Not my cup of tea but still nice

Honestly, the plot of this story is a bit too complex for me. I read about 600 pages before giving up simply because instead of following the main storyline, it was focusing on 20 more which for me personally was very frustrating. Although I enjoyed seeing Rori's character grow and I admire the writer's writing style due to the obvious skill and research that goes behind it, I felt some parts were a bit unnecessary, at least for someone who usually reads romance novels with a more simplistic concept.
There were simply too many characters and too many sidestories while the main one dragged behind, which was made even more annoying by the long wait beforehand. I mean *SPOILER ALERT* we waited for them to meet for 300 pages only for their relationship to fall behind all of the other complications surrounding them. I would have liked all ot this if the focus had been on them but in my opinion, it was too much going back and forward on different people and their agendas while neglecting the main character and her development in her romantic relationship and as an adult transitioning into a wolf.

The only problem is...

I loved the characters, the descriptions, the emotions and the plot in general but I feel the whole story could be a bit longer. I would have really loved to see more of their time together and even some of the action in detail but otherwise it's a greatly written story with an original idea and a nice execution.

Rushed

Although the actual plot is interesting, it isn't very believable and the story rushes so fast that one can't really see any progress in the characters or their relationships. It might fit a short story more but even then, some parts are too unrealistic like him trying to be inconspicuous while using such an obvious name and being the most popular guy at the college although he is trying to stay under the radar. Him just falling in love with her out of the blue and her being both a shy girl and a badass and a victim and a crazy offender at the same time. It just didn't go together very well.
Once you edit some of these details and actually take your time to develop the plot slowly, I'm sure it's going to be a great story but until then it's just a quick read with some entertaining dialogues.

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Interesting plot. I needed a bit more details in the character development and the growth of their relationship. The grammar mistakes as well as the elliptic sentences were a bit distracting but otherwise I must say the plot was pretty attention grabbing (for the most part)

Unique, but..

I love the originality in the book. Many scenes surprised and intrigued me more than any other stories do and I must say, the plot is very creative.
My only issue is that the storyline seems to drag on for me. After they go to her pack, there are at least 20 more chapters and although I agree, their progress should be noted, for me personally it happens a bit slow. I know that makes it more realistic but in the end, I found it hard to find motivation to read on.
Still a great story with a unique concept, some parts just weren't for me. 🤷

Well written but...

I really like the idea and even the characters but personally, I think there were some large plot issues. For example, the fact that she was continuously and brutally tortured for a whole month without being undressed or dissolving her make up. They also couldn't smell her hormones out which even if impossible in your reality still feels lazy on their part. I mean they could have taken at least some measures in order to check her identity and it just seemed unbalanced because on one hand, they are those powerful businessmen with the best security company and on the other, a novice manages to hack them with a bit of sand and guessing.
As I said, the basic idea is there but this story needs some thorough editing for it to be convincing.

Definitely a favorite!

This story made me read the whole series. I love everything about it but most of all, I appreciate the author's creativity! Definitely something everyone should take a look at! ❤️❤️❤️

Interesting

I'm usually not the biggest fan of poetry so I am definitely not the best judge but I liked the rhythmic style you used. That made the writing flow easier to follow. Still, at times, it felt like you were using a certain word just because it rhymed and not really to fit it. That left me confused with the context so my suggestion would be to be a bit more descriptive when it comes to those things. Some poems were really too short to get the point of and I understand that long ones intimidate you but I really believe this would improve their quality. You should also definitely proofread some of them and check the spelling and grammar. Overall, it's obvious you put a lot of your heart into the writing, which makes your work very relatable but there is room for improvement.

Great story

The plot is very nice and the emotions are easy to relate to. There are a few grammar mistakes that could be fixed but otherwise it definitely is a great story worth checking out!