Brittani Nicole Case

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I am a Mississippi girl who aspires to become a writer and help change the lives people that need some encouragement!

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Interesting relationships!

I love the depiction of the relationships amongst the characters! I would love to know why the main character Evannah had to move into a new town! I wish Sierra would date. I can’t wait to see more from the mysterious Blaise. I feel like there is a lot that can be done about him.

I saw some grammar errors and some sentences that had some words missing. It didn’t make it hard for me to understand, but it may be more difficult for someone whose first language is not English. So I’d read through it again to make sure I took care of any gapping grammar mistakes. Speaking to myself to of course.

I like that you give some personal details about each of the characters. I love that Sierra is more observant than anyone else. I love how she notices things about her friend and brother. She seems like a big personality and you could honestly probably write a whole story just about her. I hate she got used to get close to Eva.

That makes her no dating thing understandable. Keep up the good work! I can’t wait to see how you develop the story even more!

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Barfi

First off, wow! I liked where this was going. The imagery was so real, and symbolism is a big thing here too! I really felt for Lizeh. She embodied a couple of things here!

I’m not entirely familiar with traditions or some of the terms of endearment here. I’m also not entirely sure why she doesn’t like people. Or why she hates birthday parties for families. I get not liking to be around a lot of people, but to not like being around family is something I don’t understand. I love being around my immediate family.

How did her family die naturally? Did they have a disease? Were they murdered by someone who made it look like natural causes? What was their dynamic before their deaths? Is her condition passed down genetically?

I love that Daniyal loves and cares for her so much! He’s a doting husband. He worries about her, and he’s right to. She has a problem, and she doesn’t want to admit it. She doesn’t want anyone to know.

It seems like you are displaying depression and paranoid schizophrenia. I could definitely see the schizophrenia. I felt all of her problems. This story was definitely psychological. You did a good job describing it.

It needs to be fleshed out a little more, but all in all, great story! I can’t wait to see what all you do with it! Keep up the good work!

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Summer Redemption

First off, I love fantasy stories like this! Elves are such incredible creatures! I loved it! Like you said there was some grammar issues, but other than that it kept me on my toes! Great, great story! I can’t wait to see more!!

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Pretty good start!

I think Kiara has real potential to become a very likable character. I wish I knew more of her background. Some of the chapters felt a little rushed. I do hate that her mother has cancer. I am glad Kiara’s mother has someone like Michael to look after her while Kiara was at work.

I’m glad Sophia is helping Kiara. Sometimes it’s good to have a nice friend. That’s really an understated thing these days. These days people aren’t interested in being good friends or helping each other.

I would have liked to see more of her relationship with Vanessa. Also, I would have liked to see Kiara helping more patients. To know what their problems are and how that makes Kiara feel. I know how she is feeling about her mother having cancer, I would love to see her compassion for her patients.

Her boss…I don’t like him and I know that’s the point. Has she been in trouble with him before? I think a flashback could have been put in there about something horrible he’s said to Kiara or Vanessa. A lot of times bosses are not the most pleasant people. Which brings me to my next question.

Is Sophia’s brother rude or does he have just high expectations? Sophia hasn’t said a lot about him. I loved the amusement park scene. I loved that she was trying to make Kiara feel better. I hate Kiara didn’t have a lot of people helping her while she was growing up.

Which I think would have been a nice place for a flashback as well. Of when she was bullied or someone didn’t help her when they could. Just to flesh it out and help us understand why she reacts to people helping her.

This is a fantastic start. It needs a little fleshing out and some pacing (mine does too I know). I can’t wait to see what happens next! There’s a certain level of suspense to this story too! Keep up the good work!!

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Wry Good!

Love this! There’s a little bit of grammar that could be tightened up. I hate that she had no name in the beginning. Like it’s her fault she got dropped off somewhere. But I totally get it.
I like how he didn’t reject his mate because she’s some lowly human or didn’t come from good breeding. That kind of gets old after a while. This is a story that’s well done. Could use a little more fleshing out. I would have liked to have seen more with her foster mother. Just so we could see the depths of the relationship.
Keep going I can’t wait for more!

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Very Good Read!

First off, I have read many books where characters are reincarnated. It’s so frustrating because they all go through the story and part of the drama is them recovering their memories. This story is not like that. At all. I love that she remembers her past lives.
The characters relationships with each other are great. You can tell they all have a bond. Eliana and Anastasia are great friends. Eliana seems a little bit excitable. They’re all different in their own way.
There’s a little bit of grammar that needs to be tightened up, but it’s very, very little. This could be a movie one day! I hope there’s more to come! I love the story and love how memorable and relatable the characters are! You’ve done a wonderful job!!

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Very interesting

I loved Anastasia’s character! She has some flaws but she is tough in her own way! She loves Ethan even though she didn’t know what to do with him at first! Colton is an interesting character too! I think there’s a lot more to come!
What happened to the woman at the beginning that gave Anastasia the baby? I’m hooked and can not wait for more! It is well written and very descriptive! The characters are relatable and very real! Wow! Keep going!

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Jaded Hearts

Wow! This is a really well written story! I hate Leighton gets used as a servant by her grandfather. He’s such a jerk. I love how you showed how he treated her with someone else around.
A lot of people would have kept that kind of outburst until later. I enjoy David and Joshua’s friendship. I feel bad for Joshua for having lost his mother. That’s a very traumatic experience for a child to have.
There are minimal grammar errors that need to be worked on. But this is a job well done!!

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Very Interesting

I like Sinnera's fiery personality. I like that she has a friend that she can count on to be by her side. I did also like the fact that you wrote the part where she is storming away from a dinner with her mother instead of giving a huge list of reasons they don't get along. The pink haired gentleman does seem mysterious.
I like that he isn't brooding, too many main male characters are the brooding sort. I like the banter back and forth. It is real personal. Hats off to you! I can't wait to see the rest of Sinnera's journey.
There are some grammar issues, but those can be fixed real easy. I say you are off to a fantastic start! Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!

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Very Interesting

Your summary of the story is what got me to read it. You have a way with words and with humor. I didn't really see the strong-willed version of Cordelia. When I think of a strong-willed female character the very first one to pop in my head is Buffy Sommers (There is no stronger-willed female than Buffy). She was against tradition, and who can blame her for that? Sometimes tradition needs to be broken.

I didn't get bored reading this. It was a little predictable, but honestly, sometimes the best stories are a little predictable. Keep up the good work. I think this is a really good story...it just needs to be fleshed out a little more.

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This is really good

I feel so sorry for Clover...I really do. I couldn't imagine what it would be like to be sold to perverted pigs like these men. She was so lucky to escape. This is a great story and I encourage you to keep working on it. You'll have a best seller with this one day. Grammar such as verb tenses needs a little work and some words were swapped around. For example "I don't know why am I instead of why I am" other than that it's a great story!

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AMAZING!

You hooked me quick, fast, and in a hurry. You are an amazing writer! Keep up the good work! I love it! Kirsten is a relatable character! Her internal struggle is relatable. All in all job well done!

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It's a good start

Your story has great potential. The grammar needs a little work, and another good read through and you should be set. I am a little confused as to why she's alone. I think we need a little backstory for Ivy...and she has a great unique name. Your cover and plot are intriguing and I can't wait to see more come out of this story.
Why was Earl even at her house? What exactly is the nature of their relationship? How do they know each other?
Keep up the good work! The plot and your character development and descriptions are legitimately amazing!

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INTERESTING

Great story! You are truly talented!
Would you be interested in reading my story Selena's Darkness?
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I AM ENCHANTED!

First of all, I love stories that seem to take place in the medieval era. You have an amazing way of describing things and making it feel like I was right there in the middle of all the action. I love the relationships between the characters...it's very realistic. You have written this story very well, and I think I learned a thing or two from how you developed your story.
Please keep writing more stories like this. You know how some authors are just meant to write certain things? I think this is your forte and I am in love with it. I'd buy it if it were to get published.

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SO APOCALYPTIC!!!

I love Alice's curiosity and her appreciation for great authors. ( i love Edgar Allen Poe) Grammar needs a little work, and that's me speaking for myself too, not just to you. Maybe you could give a little more details about the past. Like if they received any warnings or if they chose to ignore tee upcoming apocalypse. Maybe name a couple of countries that were totally wiped out by the impact of the asteroid. This will give the story a little more flavor and more realistic.
I also felt as if the story needed some holes filled in. Again, talking to myself as much as you, I know my story probably has a few holes in it. Where did her dad go to medical school? How was he able to go to a medical school when everything was supposedly wiped out? Where did her mom learn how to sew? How did she learn how to design clothes?
I like the talk of how things would have been had the asteroid not crashed into Earth. Birthday balls, gowns, fancy cars, castles, and marrying a prince one day. I wish you would have given more details about how things used to be. Like her grandpa telling her stories about how things were before the impact. Talk about the balls and what it took to be a good king. That it doesn't just mean you get to do what you want.
The relationship between Prince Jack and Alice feels rushed. They meet and then a couple of chapters later they are in love. I think the readers need to see more dialogue and body language between Jack and Alice. What makes them compatible? Show the blossoming of a relationship by showing us a little bit of the friendship first. I think they have a great thing going, just wish there was more detailing of it. More of a build up.
Dystopian societies are so hard to write about when you have things like The Hunger Games that are such a big hit. You capture the future dystopian world brilliantly. Very few people and all having to fight for survival. Mention more of the limited resources. Those kinds of things give juicy details to the story and make people understand the desperation of truly trying to survive. Why you have to move from place to place. Why you have to protect what small possessions you have left.
You have such a good story. The sinews and muscles are good, they just need to be fleshed out a little more and I think you will have a huge success on your hands. There was something I missed as I was reading more of your story. When she finds out that the government escaped to Apollo, where was her emotional reaction? Did she get angry? Did she scream and throw things? Did she curse them? I know she later says they deserve what they got, but that initial reaction is missing.
You are very talented and I couldn't wait to read more of your story. You took a good amount of time to think up your characters and how they act around each other. That actions and reactions are amazing. This wasn't a story you just threw together, I can tell there was a lot of work that went into it. This is almost a Darwinism thing too, only the strong will survive, but how can they do so without resources? I love that they are farmers, I'm from the South so farming is pretty dominant around here.
You keep up the good work on your story and if it were to ever get published I would buy it. Your imagination is so vast! I'm kind of jealous! :) Keep up the good work! Love the story!

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OH MY GOODNESS!

It's so hard to find authors who write short stories anymore. You are such a descriptive writer and you give good details. Your characters are interesting and I love it! You are very creative. This story is different from anything I have ever read!
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CHICAGO DREAMS

Your writing style is so good it left me begging for more. Please read and review my story Tales of Adventure! https://www.inkitt.com/brittaninicolecase

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