Brittani Nicole Case

Awesome!!

This is an awesome story with awesome character development! There were some sentences that we choppy and could use a little work, but other than that it’s a great read! 100% recommend!!

Entrancing

There is so much mystery here. This is such a well-written story. I don't have any constructive criticism really to give! Keep up the good work!

EPIC!!!

I love how you start the story. The action and all draw a reader in. Toby has had some amazing character development. The aspect of the gods...totally would not have seen that coming. There are some small grammar errors here and there, but the story is gripping! Job very well done!! This story is unique and I can see it going to a lot of different places! Hats off to you, sir!

This could be a really good story!

I need more! I really, really need more! This is so very good! I wasn't even thinking of where this could go, and the twist, oh my goodness!! Really, really a job well done!

AWESOME STORY!

Your descriptions in the scenes are phenomenal! You describe what goes on so well, and it's effortless to read. I didn't come across many errors at all. Your story is intriguing and very attention grabbing from the first chapter. Very well done!

I love that she wanted to go travel, and working a job that seems like a dead end to achieve your dreams is relatable. The feelings she has for Nate are nice, and they shared a nice moment. They have a genuine friendship, and I love it! I love that she wanted to go travel and see the world instead of staying around to develop a relationship!

This story is well written and I would recommend it to anyone! Love it! Can't wait to read more!

Great Story!

This is a very good read! Lots of twists and turns are found in this story! It just needs a little fleshing out. There are some slight grammar errors, but that’s really all I can say.
Great story! Keep up the good work!!

Wow!!

I am impressed! I loved everything. Each character seemed relatable and seeing things from different points of view is amazing! I was hanging on every word! Very, very good story!
To be honest, you have some minor editing to do. Some of the wording seemed funny. Like I read it one way when it said something else. Just a few sentences need to be glossed over real good.
That’s really all the critique I have. Awesome story! Keep up the good work! I can’t wait to see more from you!

Very Good Read!

Once I started I really couldn’t stop! Just some small grammar or spelling errors. In the first chapter you mentioned Wherehouse and I wasn’t sure if you meant it to be that way, or spelled like Warehouse. Incorporating past and present tense is good too! This is a good read and I will definitely recommend!!

Interesting relationships!

I love the depiction of the relationships amongst the characters! I would love to know why the main character Evannah had to move into a new town! I wish Sierra would date. I can’t wait to see more from the mysterious Blaise. I feel like there is a lot that can be done about him.

I saw some grammar errors and some sentences that had some words missing. It didn’t make it hard for me to understand, but it may be more difficult for someone whose first language is not English. So I’d read through it again to make sure I took care of any gapping grammar mistakes. Speaking to myself to of course.

I like that you give some personal details about each of the characters. I love that Sierra is more observant than anyone else. I love how she notices things about her friend and brother. She seems like a big personality and you could honestly probably write a whole story just about her. I hate she got used to get close to Eva.

That makes her no dating thing understandable. Keep up the good work! I can’t wait to see how you develop the story even more!

Barfi

First off, wow! I liked where this was going. The imagery was so real, and symbolism is a big thing here too! I really felt for Lizeh. She embodied a couple of things here!

I’m not entirely familiar with traditions or some of the terms of endearment here. I’m also not entirely sure why she doesn’t like people. Or why she hates birthday parties for families. I get not liking to be around a lot of people, but to not like being around family is something I don’t understand. I love being around my immediate family.

How did her family die naturally? Did they have a disease? Were they murdered by someone who made it look like natural causes? What was their dynamic before their deaths? Is her condition passed down genetically?

I love that Daniyal loves and cares for her so much! He’s a doting husband. He worries about her, and he’s right to. She has a problem, and she doesn’t want to admit it. She doesn’t want anyone to know.

It seems like you are displaying depression and paranoid schizophrenia. I could definitely see the schizophrenia. I felt all of her problems. This story was definitely psychological. You did a good job describing it.

It needs to be fleshed out a little more, but all in all, great story! I can’t wait to see what all you do with it! Keep up the good work!

Wry Good!

Love this! There’s a little bit of grammar that could be tightened up. I hate that she had no name in the beginning. Like it’s her fault she got dropped off somewhere. But I totally get it.
I like how he didn’t reject his mate because she’s some lowly human or didn’t come from good breeding. That kind of gets old after a while. This is a story that’s well done. Could use a little more fleshing out. I would have liked to have seen more with her foster mother. Just so we could see the depths of the relationship.
Keep going I can’t wait for more!

Very Interesting

I like Sinnera's fiery personality. I like that she has a friend that she can count on to be by her side. I did also like the fact that you wrote the part where she is storming away from a dinner with her mother instead of giving a huge list of reasons they don't get along. The pink haired gentleman does seem mysterious.
I like that he isn't brooding, too many main male characters are the brooding sort. I like the banter back and forth. It is real personal. Hats off to you! I can't wait to see the rest of Sinnera's journey.
There are some grammar issues, but those can be fixed real easy. I say you are off to a fantastic start! Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!

Very Interesting

Your summary of the story is what got me to read it. You have a way with words and with humor. I didn't really see the strong-willed version of Cordelia. When I think of a strong-willed female character the very first one to pop in my head is Buffy Sommers (There is no stronger-willed female than Buffy). She was against tradition, and who can blame her for that? Sometimes tradition needs to be broken.

I didn't get bored reading this. It was a little predictable, but honestly, sometimes the best stories are a little predictable. Keep up the good work. I think this is a really good story...it just needs to be fleshed out a little more.

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This is really good

I feel so sorry for Clover...I really do. I couldn't imagine what it would be like to be sold to perverted pigs like these men. She was so lucky to escape. This is a great story and I encourage you to keep working on it. You'll have a best seller with this one day. Grammar such as verb tenses needs a little work and some words were swapped around. For example "I don't know why am I instead of why I am" other than that it's a great story!

AMAZING!

You hooked me quick, fast, and in a hurry. You are an amazing writer! Keep up the good work! I love it! Kirsten is a relatable character! Her internal struggle is relatable. All in all job well done!

It's a good start

Your story has great potential. The grammar needs a little work, and another good read through and you should be set. I am a little confused as to why she's alone. I think we need a little backstory for Ivy...and she has a great unique name. Your cover and plot are intriguing and I can't wait to see more come out of this story.
Why was Earl even at her house? What exactly is the nature of their relationship? How do they know each other?
Keep up the good work! The plot and your character development and descriptions are legitimately amazing!

INTERESTING

Great story! You are truly talented!
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I AM ENCHANTED!

First of all, I love stories that seem to take place in the medieval era. You have an amazing way of describing things and making it feel like I was right there in the middle of all the action. I love the relationships between the characters...it's very realistic. You have written this story very well, and I think I learned a thing or two from how you developed your story.
Please keep writing more stories like this. You know how some authors are just meant to write certain things? I think this is your forte and I am in love with it. I'd buy it if it were to get published.

SO APOCALYPTIC!!!

I love Alice's curiosity and her appreciation for great authors. ( i love Edgar Allen Poe) Grammar needs a little work, and that's me speaking for myself too, not just to you. Maybe you could give a little more details about the past. Like if they received any warnings or if they chose to ignore tee upcoming apocalypse. Maybe name a couple of countries that were totally wiped out by the impact of the asteroid. This will give the story a little more flavor and more realistic.
I also felt as if the story needed some holes filled in. Again, talking to myself as much as you, I know my story probably has a few holes in it. Where did her dad go to medical school? How was he able to go to a medical school when everything was supposedly wiped out? Where did her mom learn how to sew? How did she learn how to design clothes?
I like the talk of how things would have been had the asteroid not crashed into Earth. Birthday balls, gowns, fancy cars, castles, and marrying a prince one day. I wish you would have given more details about how things used to be. Like her grandpa telling her stories about how things were before the impact. Talk about the balls and what it took to be a good king. That it doesn't just mean you get to do what you want.
The relationship between Prince Jack and Alice feels rushed. They meet and then a couple of chapters later they are in love. I think the readers need to see more dialogue and body language between Jack and Alice. What makes them compatible? Show the blossoming of a relationship by showing us a little bit of the friendship first. I think they have a great thing going, just wish there was more detailing of it. More of a build up.
Dystopian societies are so hard to write about when you have things like The Hunger Games that are such a big hit. You capture the future dystopian world brilliantly. Very few people and all having to fight for survival. Mention more of the limited resources. Those kinds of things give juicy details to the story and make people understand the desperation of truly trying to survive. Why you have to move from place to place. Why you have to protect what small possessions you have left.
You have such a good story. The sinews and muscles are good, they just need to be fleshed out a little more and I think you will have a huge success on your hands. There was something I missed as I was reading more of your story. When she finds out that the government escaped to Apollo, where was her emotional reaction? Did she get angry? Did she scream and throw things? Did she curse them? I know she later says they deserve what they got, but that initial reaction is missing.
You are very talented and I couldn't wait to read more of your story. You took a good amount of time to think up your characters and how they act around each other. That actions and reactions are amazing. This wasn't a story you just threw together, I can tell there was a lot of work that went into it. This is almost a Darwinism thing too, only the strong will survive, but how can they do so without resources? I love that they are farmers, I'm from the South so farming is pretty dominant around here.
You keep up the good work on your story and if it were to ever get published I would buy it. Your imagination is so vast! I'm kind of jealous! :) Keep up the good work! Love the story!

OH MY GOODNESS!

It's so hard to find authors who write short stories anymore. You are such a descriptive writer and you give good details. Your characters are interesting and I love it! You are very creative. This story is different from anything I have ever read!
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CHICAGO DREAMS

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