Refreshing
I think the premise of the story is great. I love that she didn't jump his bones immediately, it's refreshing. Honestly, i'm tired of the "love at first sight" plot. Sex and sexual attraction does not equal love.
I am all about gender quality and stuff, but I feel like you are laying it on a little thick. I feel like this is turning into a political story... Female power is great, my own story is about a strong female, but don't make it so obious. Maybe instead of her blatantly saying her mission is to help empower the women, have that message be shown through her actions. for example, instead of her saying if she is going to do it on her own to show the women how that she can do it say: she is doing it because she wants to learn to be strong on her own. And by doing that she will earn the respect of the pack. Then have a teenage girl say she was inspired by she going out on her own (hope that makes sense!)
Also, the dialogue is a little to long. I would go back and try to find ways to be more direct in what your saying. Your using to many words, or repeating ideas.
I think you have a promising story. Keep it up!
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