Alandra Whistle's lessons in magic parts 1 and 2
I would love it if you would show how she is the bottom of the class. A paragraph alone isn't enough to show this.
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If she was such a screw up, how did she pass and graduate from the class. Are her teachers this lax that they would allow a screw up to graduate?
I didn't understand the schooling system for the academy as well. So students graduate from the school but if they fail the apprenticeship level, they need to go back to repeat the year? Haven't they graduated by then? Its weird to me.
So when all of Alandra's friends failed the apprenticeship do they all have to re-class for the whole year? That's pretty brutal considering they all graduated.
The headmistress was too much of an ass (pardon the language). If she's that concerned with Alandra's well being, shouldn't she had helped her before? Maybe guide her after classes when she's lacking behind. To me she's just concerned with the quality of the school's reputation to churn out top scorers. Lecturing the main character harshly, purposely setting Alandra up to fail the apprenticeship, she is a horrible person. Maybe rewrite her parts because her personality is such a stick in the mud as compared to the other characters.
To say diploma was confusing to me as well. Because you wrote diploma I pictured her to be in her twenties and that was before I read summary to realize she was ten. Maybe a certificate would sound better.
There are a lot of terminologies here and maybe you could explain this more a few chapters back. This would also give you the chance to flesh out Alandra's character. Things like "the crystal spire", Mana or a "familiar" etc, these you can show instead of just telling us through exposition.
The second chapter was slower, I would like to call this a filler chapter. But it was nice for you to incorporate life lessons and this is what I think this story shines. It teaches really good morals like to believe in yourself and never be dishonest, I like those messages. You can inspire lots of kids with your story.