I like the start of the story, setting up a story without being able to give the reader any background info is difficult. I felt the characters bitterness in the narrative.
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The young girl character did not seem consistent, though,. At first she seems to snarl at Jail Girl but then comes across as very innocent later. I liked the first person narrative but was kind of thrown off when the narrator "broke the fourth wall", speaking to me (the reader) as though I were a character in the story. Perhaps that will play out later in the story but for me it was distracting.
There were a couple of dropped words but since I'm not a technical guy I really can comment on punctuation, etc.
Overall, it's a really interesting start and premise.