Okay I said I would right a review so here it is. I like the story but the struggle you are having is it should be in the third person not first. How many real books have you read that does the back and forth none I suspect. Having said that there was a trend a few years ago.
Read the story now
If it was in the third person we would get a better insight. We would get a better insight into how Asenna feels about everything let her tell the story through her observations along with his. It needs more show and less tell. You do that through dialogue.
Trust me it isn't hard. After all the books you like Game of thrones, harry potter, lord of the rings, all third person. The books not so keen on eg Twilight, fifty shades first person. So ask which have more substance.
Unless you are going to do one point of view all the way through which trust me is hard I did with Adam and there are rules which at the moment you are breaking and that is why you aren't happy.
The characters are believable and it is nice to have such a strong female lead without the usual simpering.
The story is good.
I hope this helps.