C.E. Pulse

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I liked your story my only suggestions would be start a new paragraph when someone new is talking it makes it easier to read (I used to have all my dialogue in one big paragraph that's how I know) and second does Lily have any other motives aside from wanting to get out of her boring life? If not trying making her more complex. Hope this helps and keep writing :) C.E. Pulse

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