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Interesting!

The story is very interesting so far. The first chapter completely sucked me into The Tribute's world, and I was enamored with the descriptions, especially of the Gray Lands. I also enjoyed the master/servant/friends relationship of Voran and Lazlo, as well as Salgani's personality. The author must be careful to remember adding quotation marks in dialogues and to proofread everything at least once, as I've seen some typographical errors. Though they did not disrupt the flow of the story, reducing them would improve the already good quality of the story. I cannot wait to read the rest. Very well done!

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A creme brulee

"Erase Me" was like a creme brulee in that LoweFantasy was able to write a light, sweet, and easy-to-read story despite having such heavy themes and situations. Thus, adults and younger people alike would be able to enjoy the story. The characters were fun to follow and easy to like or dislike, though I had the slight impression that Mr. Kent's character was stereotypical and flat compared to all the other, well-thought out ones. Some issues of the protagonist Jasmine weren't resolved, such as her feelings towards her mother. There were also various slips in grammar here and there; another round of proofreading would really help. But all in all, "Erase Me" was a very enjoyable read (especially the romance and friendship parts), and I'm glad to have come across it!

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Incredible read!

I loved this story so much! Laura had good writing style, vivid descriptions, and novel world-building (or in this case, universe-building). But what got me completely engrossed and emotionally invested in the story were the characters and their dialogues. I loved Cassie and Finn's bond and dynamic. I enjoyed Cassie's dialogues with Finn, The Wanderer, and others who gave her guidance. I also appreciated the well-placed comedic scenes because they eased the growing tension within the story and prevented the ominous vibe from becoming overwhelming. Mystery and foreboding pervaded the story: each answered question posed a greater mystery, each choice brought the protagonists closer to the fulfillment of the prophecies, and I could barely stop reading. Until the end, despite everything that had been revealed, there remained many mysteries to be unraveled and prophecies to be deciphered. I look forward to reading the next installment, whether online or in print!

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So cute!

The Aureate Spectacles easily won me over with its witty, humorous similes and descriptions -- the writing style was lovely. What I loved the most about this piece is that the romance didn't meddle with or distort any of the plot's elements and especially Michaela's growth as a person and leader, so unlike others I've read. And the forced subtlety of romantic scenes (due to Michaela's and Conrad's circumstances) increased their effect on me. A more thorough round of proofreading would make the story more perfect, as there were many run-on sentences and words replaced by their homophones (like "heal" instead of heel"). Do know that these can be overlooked (as I had) because the story truly is engrossing, but the quality of the work will improve and reading will have a more natural flow should these be rechecked. Anyway, thank you very much for this wonderful piece and for all the new words added to my vocabulary. It was one storm of a ride! Kudos!

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Absolutely beautiful

Snow White has always been my least favorite princess. But the depth this story put to her fairy tale drastically changed that. The author misspelled words (such as 'shown' instead of 'shone') and had some minor grammatical errors, but the writing style was breathtaking, and I was drawn in right from the start. "Shattered" was absolutely beautiful and, as far as retold fairy tales go, the fairest of them all. Thank you so much for sharing such sweet, legendary, heartbreaking but hopeful once upon a time and happy ever after.

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Adorable

Depicting seven princesses in one story is no easy feat, but Elysian was able to clearly differentiate all of them on the very first chapter. Their descriptions were spot on and their quirks memorable, and I'm satisfied to see all of them equally contribute to the story, no princess left behind. I love the depth of the main characters and the way in which the supporting ones, like Weston, Valeria, and Ty, were shown when they weren't serving the royal family. I simply love the story! However, another round or two of proofreading is needed. Halfway through, the princesses' bedchamber babysitter, who was first named Justine, had her name switched to Judith and then back to Justine for the rest of the story. While it stopped bothering me once I got used to it, the first instance of the change in name slightly confused me. There was also a lapse in grammar in the last few chapters, so rereading would really help. Other than those two small issues, I'd say the story was absolutely adorable!

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Thrilling story!

I couldn't stop reading this story once I started. It was thrilling to journey with Ryden and Melca from Cadmir, the place of their happiness and innocence, to Sharbury and Jalapa, and finally to Rektor, where they are finally given the opportunity to exact revenge on those who destroyed hometown and as a result their lives as they knew it. I loved the contrasting, complementary personalities of quiet but optimistic Ryden and naggy but realistic Melca, because while they keep each other in check with their different perspectives, they always keep each other's best interests at heart and push each other onward. After finishing the story I saw with pride how much the two friends have grown from a novice smith and a young baker to two men who can fight to save themselves and what they believe in and even stop the war that can completely destroy their country. I'm excited to read its sequel!

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Engaging

The story was gripping. The story flowed from one sentence to another that I did not even realize how much and how long I had been reading. There were run-on sentences in which the author used commas instead of semi-colons, but the meaning of the sentence was not lost. All in all, I enjoyed this story. It's a shame that it only had 13 chapters. If "The Prince" ever gets a continuation and gets published, I would definitely buy a copy. Kudos!

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