DeanaFaye

Mystic Falls (or Forks)

AKA delenatwihard is an avid reader and loves to write amazing romance/erotic stories with a twist of the paranormal! My stories are my first draft!

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My Unpopular Opinion

I haven’t read any werewolf/Lucan stories in a long time well, quite honestly, I’ve read quite the same thing. However, the cover of this story caught my attention and I was like “let’s give it a shot!”

I sense the sense of originality with referring the the Goddess as the Selene. Also, the writing style is good. After reading the authors disclaimer of this book being her first time writing, I know with much practise it will get better. (I have high hopes!)

Although, the descriptive nature is more telling than showing with kinda made me lose interest of some parts of the chapters (but I powered through) and certain paragraphs are a little info dumpy with can distract from the narrative. (Outercourse: through the descriptions, the reader will get a sense of what the characters are doing, it doesn’t need to be told). Also, I hope during revisions, the author will add more description with the settings as I can’t really picture the world I’m reading.

There’s a few purple prose and redundancies (e.g ‘petite little thing’ - petite means little in French) which can easily be fixed with a bit more editing.

Also, the plot seems kinda rushed (I’ll have another read through) and the inciting incident is a little too late into the story. I wonder why she hasn’t been in front of the pack which was interesting and hope the author plays around with it. However, I haven’t read anything too interesting for me to continue much further.

All in all, I see some potential in this author. If you’re interested In werewolf stories, gIve It a shot. I hope she takes this criticism into consideration as it’s not an insult in any way. Hence, why I titled this ‘My Unpopular Opinion’ 😭

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Intriguing

So far, I’m loving this book and will continue reading!

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