Needs Some Work
I know bad reviews aren’t always the thing authors want to see but I think it’s really important that we all know what people liked and didn’t like about our stories so we can learn from our past writing.
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Personally, I love werewolf books. The dominant alpha male finding his mate is always appealing which is why I was blown away by your decription and knew that I had to read this book.
Sadly, that feeling faded over time.
Obviously the main character does not know anything about werewolves and she is new to this whole thing but by leaving the main character so far in the dark you are also confusing the reader. I made it all the way to chapter thirty before I felt like I was forcing myself to finish something I wasn’t really a fan of.
Throughout the book there were quite a few typos and grammar mistakes that made me do a fouble take to try and understand what message the author was trying to convey to me.
Additionally, there is no show and all tell in this story. You use phrases like “I screamed”, or “I ran” as your entire narration for the story making it seem bland and half done. Don’t tell the reader the character ran. Show the reader what kind of emotion thr character feels to make her want to scream or run.
Frankly, this book has potential but it needs a bit of reworking before it really gets to the point where I would continue reading it. I’m sorry, but this book really isn’t my favorite. - M