dinaemu

heartwarming story

I didn't think that I would like the story; I am more of a fantasy, mystery fan but that simple yet emotionally rewarding story got to me.
My favourite part was when he had to pay for the drinks, I see that situation all the time with the older generation. My mother had the same reaction when she was charged £18 for three coffees; six months after that, she was still moaning about it.
The book also highlights the harsh reality of old age. The elderly are often very lonely, all their friends have passed. Not to mention that any break up in the family and they run the risk of being cut completely from whatever little family they may have left.
Walter loneliness really broke my heart and even though he did reconnect with them, we can't ignore the fact that it would have never happen if he had not been turned into a young man.
That book is great but it could do with the help of an editor to bring it to the next level and yet I really enjoyed ready the book.
Well done Brandon J Miller, I started this book being down but by the time I got to the end, it had lifted my spirit.

You need an editor

Hi,
I liked your style but I think you need a developmental editor and a line editor to help you the flow of the story. Do not worry about punctuation or grammar, for now, concentrate on the story and where you wish to take it.
Despite the need for an editor, I am anxious to read the rest so keep adding more chapters, you already have a fan.