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Thorns of Blood Red Roses

The title already sounds really interesting to me and I am looking forward to seeing how it plays into the story. Despite there only being two chapters, I feel like I already know your main character very well. You also hinted at her goals which is awesome because now I want to know how she's gonna achieve them. Amazing that you did flashback and foreshadowing in just two chapters!

However, I did want to point out that some paragraphs are a bit long. I know you had a lot of describing to do in the beginning but I hope you add more dialogue in future chapters to smoothen out the read. I love the details you wrote on Rem's past, but you might want to spread out the information so it's not too overwhelming. With that said (since you've already published those chapters), you can remind the readers of those details here and there in the future chapters!

I hope you keep updating :)

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The Gods Return

Very nice beginning. I love reading a fast-paced and suspense filled novel. You have a very unique wording style (like the order of your words and sentences) that is interesting to read, it's almost like you're telling the story out loud when I am reading the chapters. And I think with some editing, your grammar and flow will improve a ton!

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Interesting start

Intense start! Definitely will keep me reading to find out if she gets away or not, but I do think you should do some more editing. The grammar mistakes can pull readers from the plot quite easily, but after some proofreading, I am sure it'll be great! Excited for new chapters.

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Addicted

Interesting romance story. The first chapter caught my attention effectively. However, I think the author's word choice could be improved. For example, you wrote, "...unbuttons her bra." and I think unclasps would have been a better choice. Little things like this might take your readers out of the intimate experience, but it can be fixed easily with some editing!

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Erlebnisse

I love the title of this book already, it's so full of meaning as are the characters. I think the author put a lot of thought behind each character's backstories and their relations to each other, amazing job! Can't wait to see where the plot goes!!

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His Lengendary Wife

Interesting start of the story. It definitely takes off very fast-paced and has a few mysteries for the readers, edging them to keep reading to find out the characters' past. Although this is a great way to catch readers' attention, I feel you can give a little more information to avoid any confusion. Another thing is the grammar, but with some editing, you will be perfectly fine! Look forward to seeing how it turns out!

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Fun story

The blurb was quite interesting, you gave a well-rounded idea of what the book is about. However, once I started reading, it was a bit confusing since the characters were all introduced very quickly. You might want to consider taking a slower pace in bringing new characters so readers don't get overwhelmed by the information. Good work so far!

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Aetherium

Just from the title and cover, I could already tell it's a very magical book. And when I started reading, the magic seemed even more prominent. You did a great job describing the world your characters live in and how they interact. Love your story and style, keep updating!

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Springs Revelation

Totally need to read the first book before but from what I've read, you have a strong plot line going. The characters are well developed, and your descriptions and dialogue flow very smoothly into each other. Looking forward to reading more!

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The Power Of Knowledge

I really enjoyed your story so far even though there were only a few chapters. You did a wonderful job with the descriptions of the setting, the space, the characters, and what they are doing or feeling. The details definitely added to your storytelling, intriguing plot!

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Awesome

When I read the blurb I thought, oh it's another romance cliche novel, but once I started reading, it was nothing close to cliche! I love the format of the email convos at the beginning and how you intricately weave the characters' feelings and passions through their words and actions. There are a few run on sentences and minor grammar mistakes but once you edit, this book is going to be perfect. Amazing read so far and can't wait for more :)

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Damon's Soulmate

The story is definitely intriguing, but there are grammatical errors in every chapter that just pulls me out of the plot. Your dialogue could also be cut down a bit so it's not too sudden and choppy. I think with some editing, this book will reach its best potential!

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Mocta

I love your formatting in this story but some parts are a bit redundant like too much description. One thing you can try doing is to weave your characters' emotions through their actions rather than writing about those separately. Excited to keep reading though!!

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Need more updates!

Even though there are only two chapters, the stories are a bit predictable and not as intense as I had hoped. I think the author can add more intimate details to the sex scenes for a better reading experience!

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Awesome story

From the first paragraph, I was hooked. The gore and horror are so well written and every chapter there is suspense. One thing I wish the author would do is write longer chapters. It's such a fast read, I feel like there isn't enough. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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House of Fire

I love your descriptions and how you weave the character's feelings into their actions. Your writing style also makes it a smooth read. One thing is just there are a few missing quotations, punctuations, and small grammar mistakes. Love to see more!

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Beautiful Slowburn

The story starts off nice and slow with a buildup that rises at a good pace. The characters are very defined with unique personalities. One thing I would suggest is to break up the paragraphs and omit some dialogue and descriptions that are a bit redundant. It makes the chapter look bulky with huge paragraphs of words and reducing those would make it a much smoother read. I like how you have perspective changes in your story but maybe be a little more consistent rather than just oh this is gonna be Adrian's POV today. Overall I enjoyed reading it so far and hope you continue writing!!

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Ray of Sunshine

The plot definitely has potential but the pacing and character development could be worked on. The grammar and punctuation were a little shocking, but it's nothing some editing won't fix. I hope the author can go over the previous chapters and correct the technical writing :D

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