It takes some big cajones to write a story like this. An anti-hero with the animal magnetism of a black hole that teaches astrophysics to wayward teens in his spare time meets his biggest adoring fan, Wonder Woman in heat. The story needs work but has potential. The author's sheer audacity carries it like a barber with a chainsaw. A very good barber. And I'll bet this perfect specimen of a man never said a word about fight club.
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A clever little piece of work. It reminded me of J R R Tolkien's earlier stuff, pre-Lord of the Rings. It's nice to escape to a world where problems are solved so easily. Have you read Tree and Leaf? It's an essay by Tolkien on fairy stories. It would be interesting to see your story expanded into something larger. Tell us more about this kingdom. Make it exist.Read the story now
Pretty Darn Good
I am impressed. Only read the first chapter. Though I had trouble figuring how to pronounce some of the names, the story is very well written. The way everything is set up in the beginning is quite disturbing, an effect I'm sure you intended. However, please allow me to cut to the chase, I'm seeking affiliation with your namesake. Trying to be as discrete as possible. I'm a struggling writer who was once involved in Hubbard's cult, back in the *80s and 90s. If you're just using that name, and not really part of it, sorry. The story is still very good. I'm just interested in making change. Otherwise, perhaps we could correspond. Keep writing, whoever you are, you're not bad at it.Read the story now
Regal stuff, this
I only read the first chapter, glanced at it because you're creeping up on me out of nowhere. Excellent piece of work, added to my list. Flows beautifully, vivid and colorful. I could actually see and hear it as though I were there. Cinematic word pictures, and not just the physical descriptions, but the emotions felt by the characters. I'm green with envy. You are very good, my lady.
You must be English, (British); you have to be. It could also be that you are a reincarnated soul from that era, which gives you an uncanny ability to tell the story so well. I find your writing hard to pull away from, even when I'm tired. I've never been, but my brother recently visited London. (Although I once won a Monty Python impersonation contest. Did the part about the coconuts.) All joking aside, it is a delightful read. There's also a thick tension in your writing, very fitting of its Royal class of characters. I already have a crush on Maggie.
Clever Little Space Tale
I felt it was a bit too short, like something was missing. But over all, I liked it. Being a reformed drunk myself, I can surely appreciate the value of positive fate. I also liked the reference to Dan Simmons's treeship the Yggsdrasil. The way things turned out for our sauced hero was the clever part; "Why don't people eat the insides and live in them, then?" At first I thought he was gonna get strung-up for some form of heresy. But no; he ends up running the place. Pretty cool! In my younger years, I'm sure I would have tried this Space Lightening. Wonder where I would have landed?.Read the story now
A powerful and simply told tale. A little work is needed to bring out the story's true depth. But the very idea of a man reading scripture while participating in Pickett's Charge, is thought provoking to say the least..A man who does not want to die, yet bravely wades toward his death, is something we the living can't fully understand. You have captured that moment quite admirably.
If you have the time, please look at Pleasant Hill, an excerpt from my novel set in Civil War-era Louisiana. The story has some Christian mystical aspects. Thank you.
Where Chaos Reigns
Only read the first chapter, but this is an excellent study of how Allied troops were ripped to pieces by the Germans early in the war. I could feel the blood, sweat and fatigue, and smell the stench of death, the true uglyness of war. Actually had physical reactions while reading this, that sense of impending doom. Very real, almost like a primary resource, a memoir of someone who was there. Makes one wonder who they were and what they were like. I'll definitely read more.Read the story now
The Battle for Hart's Pass
Rich with prose, and quite unique in its narrative and dialog . An untold land full of hard, stoic men, all with honor and not an once of duplicity. No true villains make an appearance here, just sheer cunning, feudalistic conflict with no fancy head dressings for their gods. Even the doomed insist on honor. Classic lines like, "Hope is no method," sing out as this tale of warrior factions unfolds in a simple yet subtly complex dichotomy. Ironically,through his and ability to communicate, the main character goes against his honor, outwitting is enemy by showing that he actually owns them. This is a land that should be revisited, and often.Read the story now
The Cave -Chapter 1
Read the first chapter. Very well told. You have set the story up nicely. Transported me to this place in Colorado. This Knight is a serious man who knows exactly what he's getting himself into, thriving off the treachery he'll soon confront. I'll read the next chapter tomorrow. Look forward to it. I think he's gonna kill someone.Read the story now
Red Cloak of Brutality
I quick, haunting read. Little Red Ridding Hood with a dagger. Almost reminded me of a Western. I suspect Clint Eastwood is under that red cloak. I like how the wolf was lured to the spot of its demise. Wasn't expecting that. Very Clever. Your prose is excellent. Vivid word pictures. I felt the grandmother's fear.Read the story now
"Caged beneath the Heavens," very powerful. All life sentences are, and you have captured that in words. The need for pain as apposed to feeling nothing at all, especially in a universal emptiness of untold myth. Reminded me of someone I haven't thought of in decades. Thank you, DrisRead the story now