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The story stops at chapter eight so that's what this review is going to be based on.
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Before I get into my review, I'd like to make it known that I liked where the book was headed and the plot but these are some areas I think could be improved on to make the book even better! I also would like to add that my suggestions aren't to be mean, just constructive! I like the characters. Both Henry and Viola have interesting backgrounds and I like the use of their friends throughout the book.
The start of the book is intense and I could get into it right away. Viola had attempted to murder two people. One of those people are connected to Henry. I like the added mystery of not knowing why she did that. As I continue to read the story, a flashback begins and it seems to be that way all the way up to the newest update. The book continues and you learn more about the characters' backstories and the relationship between Henry and Violet progresses.
The reason I bring this up is because I would like to have seen more details in between the key interactions and time skips to help build up to important scenes (such as the romantic advances). To me, the pace of the book feels too fast. I felt like I didn't have enough time to get to know the characters and really connect because I saw them in minimal settings. I think if there were more interactions, not just between the main characters, that showed other sides of their personality would add more impact to those important moments.
I also feel like some details were left out throughout the story that would help with the flow and help readers get into the scenes such as describing the school for example. I think background information on what type of school it is (high school, community college, university, rich school, poor school, etc) would help. There are many places throughout the book where I think adding detail could apply, but here are a few examples:
My second example is when Viola is missing in chapter 5, she ends up going to her favorite place. Henry finds out and Alex appears to help him by telling Henry where she probably went. Alex didn't tell him where that was and Henry didn't know where that place was but he somehow ended up going to the location. I feel like little details added, like Alex telling Henry her favorite place, would help improve the flow of the story.
The final example is in chapter 1. When Viola is taken in for questioning, I think there would be more impact added if you described her interactions with her surroundings (such as her handcuffs rattling as she moved, her hands brushing the rusty/dirty table as she moved, her laugh echoing in the room, her clapping slowly to mock and taunt the detectives, etc) and deeper insight into what the character felt.
Lastly, I noticed a lot of error when it came to the use of past tense and present tense. That made it more challenging to follow along as the story continued. However, with some quick fixes, the errors would be taken care of!
Overall, I like this book. With a few tweaks, I think this book could really take off!