Die for love opens with immediate action, which is good. But where is the why? The main character is supposed to be frightened out of her wits, but I did not get that from the opening chapter. The dialogue presented itself as a tad bit stiff that stumbled at times, then picks itself up. I found myself wanting to know more of the surroundings, to hear the fear in her voice, the hear the menace in his. it is written as a life or death situation, but I did not get the full feel of that. This story has promise and I am intrigued in seeing how the characters develope. I believe the author's writing style can also develop with attention to detail, surroundings and delivery of the scene between characters. Be a little more clearer with your intent and dialogue. As always, grammar is the bane of every aspiring writer that can easily be fixed. Overall, good job!
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