I love the character development of the book!
Your writing is really nice. I love all the characters in the book and how you took time to make sure none was left behind.
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Vanessa, the protagonist was so relatable that I started believing she was a real human being. I love
her parts in the book. The other characters worked well and fir into the book so well.
However, I must confess that there were some grammatical and punctuation errors but don't get alarmed, it's totally normal. I mean, we're all humans and I guess you typed it with your phone so it's totally common to find them in your book. Always proofread every once-in-a-while because you'll see some errors you never actually thought were there. I too proofread and when I do, I find shocking errors and I'd be like "What the!"
So all in all, you have a great story plot. Never stop writing and stay safe! :) :) :)