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Jayne d'Arcy

I am horrified by Miss Ginch, and terrified for the children. It is immensely sad that the only way to happiness for them was death. It is my sincere hope that Miss Ginch is soundly held accountable for those children, but most especially for Joseph. I'm rather afraid she's done this before.

You did a wonderful job. Thank you.

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A Great Premise

You do need a beta since there are a few errors here and there but the story is engaging. I am looking forward to reading more.

I find it interesting that Snape broke up the Marauders and because he did they are all doing better than what they had done in their first life. I cannot say I have ever seen this done so you are doing something unique.

Your writing is very good and you deserve to give it to a good beta who will pick up on those small annoyances.

Keep writing!

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I am... breathless

There is such a strange and wonderful beauty to this. How lovely that Snape is able to find a bit of escape from the world that he knows within the Polyjuiced arms of Crow.

I would never have thought to use Polyjuice in this manner but I suppose it could. Perhaps only a Master of Potions could brew the potion correctly?

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Scary!

There were a few grammatical and punctuation errors but for the most part I loved this story. It felt sad but in a smooth was such as "this is the way it is" but the last line where SHE is revealed just hit me like a bolt of lightning. SHE is dead, and the Potions Master is bringing her back to life.

Terrifying!

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