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Well put together, a little robotic.

The storyline is perfectly put together, and I enjoy the plot. Though the writing style, in the beginning, sounds a little robotic. Remember, you're free to use words like "I'm" and "you're" more often, and still make the book sound nice. Without this, the book has a more computerized feel to it. As for grammar, at the beginning of the book, it seems you've repeatedly forgotten words. I recommend going back and fixing this. Other then that, the book is enjoyable. I like the plot so far and would continue to read further chapters

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Wonderfully written

The story is very well written. I enjoy how the perspective changes each chapter, it allows the reader to get a better understanding of the thought, opinions, and personalities of both characters. Speaking about characters, I do enjoy Seth's relatable personality. He seems to be a friendly person and has good judgment, even though he acts impulsively at times he seems to do it with good intention, and always fixes it in the end. I enjoy Algea as well, she seems to be a caring person, and she's able to act strategically with only a little amount of time. The plot so far is easy to get caught up in. The way that you can always keep some sort of action going without any stale time going. It seems that no matter how much the reader may know, there's always more they can learn. The writing style seems flawless. You are well able to keep things vague, while at the same time the reader can still understand what's happening. Usually seeing this the reader gets caught up in the mysteries the author keeps hidden and they are unable to keep up. In contrast, you made it so that you can keep things simple, yet not everything is thrown out at once. Finally with grammar. Everything seems to be grammatically correct. No misplaced punctuation, or run-on sentences. I do enjoy your story and can't wait to see it blossom.

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Too many penises

The story is okay, you just use the word penis a lot, after a while, you start to get uncomfortable. Other then that the story is fine

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