Read the first chapter =)
Let me just say this chapter is epic the story so far is Marriage of great imagination and dedication. I'm no critique I just love to tell how I see stories and this one is my best guess is going to be better with every passing chapter, I can't wait to see how this whole thing goes. I got so many idea's reading this and that was just the first sentence, I love the whole Pageant thing you have going with Poplar leader and Claire, Ian seems like he has somewhat of a personality compared to his cheerleader girlfriend.
Read the story now
Now to get to one mistake I saw, I'm not a grammar whiz, but spelling I'm alright in, but I believe when you were going into detail about the cheerleader you misspelled blonde it's blond no E. I believe
I read your introduction on the intro thing on the site and I would like to be friends if that's cool with you, I mainly joined to get new friends and do what I love to do and that is write.