Lucky Break was an awesome story, and a very interesting read, I love the way you did the whole font change things it made it look really professional looking and I think that was great, I can totally see why you have people who recommend this story you are an awesome writerRead the story now
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Let me just say this chapter is epic the story so far is Marriage of great imagination and dedication. I'm no critique I just love to tell how I see stories and this one is my best guess is going to be better with every passing chapter, I can't wait to see how this whole thing goes. I got so many idea's reading this and that was just the first sentence, I love the whole Pageant thing you have going with Poplar leader and Claire, Ian seems like he has somewhat of a personality compared to his cheerleader girlfriend.
Now to get to one mistake I saw, I'm not a grammar whiz, but spelling I'm alright in, but I believe when you were going into detail about the cheerleader you misspelled blonde it's blond no E. I believe
I read your introduction on the intro thing on the site and I would like to be friends if that's cool with you, I mainly joined to get new friends and do what I love to do and that is write.
I was on the edge of my seat while reading the last part when Pan discovers Lynx is a witch, but a ten year going too a dangerous forest to help her mother is really adorable, The odds are totally against her not only her age but also her body health of getting sick easily. Forests tend to get cold the further you go in them, not to mention the dangerous animals she could run in on, but with this story being fantasy I think animals are probably the last thing she needs to worry about. I hope you will continue this story I can't wait to see if Pan can save her mother.Read the story now
This story was great, I was grabbing onto every word that was on the screen Shimmer was my favorite character, but the ending when she talks Vince into starting over and giving love a try I was flipping out I'm still smiling at how cute and how amazing that was, it's very rare that you find a story with Vincent being in that sort of persona, and I have to say I wish that more stories were like this one.Read the story now
This was an awesome read, it made me think of something Edgar Allan Poe would write well the ending did how kept climbing like he was in a trance or something only in the end it led to probably a missing persons case with no witness', but seriously this was amazing.Read the story now
At first Mina seemed like a happy girl before the accident, just walking in the rain I loved this story I love angel stories Ace from what short time in the story he had I thought it was cute when she left the Library and gets under a tree I mean she to me seemed to have the same attitude I would have if a random boy came with an umbrella I would think it would be weird because how many times does it happen? I would really like to see a second chapter or something following this I'm really curious to see if Mina's attitude changes after the act of kindness or if she goes back to being the way she was.Read the story now
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