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Could be a very good children's story, but even then it lacks...

The story of Ralph the Jinn does have humor and charm. I personally found his antics to be a good hook to what could be a larger world or larger story. Regardless of length or breadth, however, Ralph the Jinn seems too much like an attempt to make a "humorous" story without much substance. The writing seems forcedly targeted towards a young audience, and it hinders what otherwise could be a very engrossing read.

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What is this?

This isn't even a story. The grammar is terrible, the organization is haphazard. I barely know what is going on, and there are way to many terms thrown out far too quickly, without proper background. A comic-book blurb has no place in a writing contest.

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A masterpiece in the making

I just want to say here that this is my first review, but I really wanted to review this story. I apologize if I don't write English to well, I am French.

Reading through the many science fiction stories posted here and other places in the world, I started to see a few linking themes: heavy-handed worlds, too many strange names, and cookie-cutter characters. I am happy to say, "Justice in Usono" has none of these. It shows the life of both a policeman (or detective) working for an capitalist dictator, and a badass (he is really badass!) loan shark who works for shady people. How can I describe them? They are strange. They are violent. They are angry, crazy, principled and sometimes almost evil. But they are of course, human. Through them, I enjoyed the dueling tales of two men in two different worlds, working for enigmatic goals. In my opinion, this story is a masterpiece in the making.

-Gunter Price

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