5 stars. I know. At this point itâs just ridiculous.
OK Katy. So the POV changes. I think you use them well from a structural point of view. But what they contain is overkill. You have a lot of redundant info in these POV changes. I do want you to keep them. But you have got to trim the repeat information. When you have three different POVâs of the same conversation with the same text throughout most of them. It starts to look like filler to the reader. So keep the POVâs. They do a great job of filling in for an omniscient narrator. BUT trim out any of the redundant stuff and give us the things that were not present in the previous POVs. I liked what you did in one chapter of this book where you had two small POVâs in the same chapter. You can do more of that or make a really small chapter to break up the flow a bit.
With that said. I know youâve written many of these books and just to be sure you know which scene Iâm talking about, {avoiding spoilers}. In regards to the part where Peter and Rune are on bikes while Tara and Sam hide in a tree with Taraâs bike? I have a favor to ask you. Can you go to my profile and read my book âSolarian down?â Iâd like you to have a look at how I handle this. If you love it like or hate it. Let me know. This is an important part of the story so it is kind of important how much weight you should or shouldnât put on my opinion. Also I love your work and would like to know what you think of mine. So Iâm selfish here but with a purpose. ;)
In the meantime, I have to move on to Liberty. Because you said I should.
God speed, Spider Woman.
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