My take on The Haunted Town
The plot was original. It was really good that it kept me guessing on who's actually who, and it did keep me on my toes most of the time, especially near the end. In my opinion, the story could be better. I feel like if you could work on the descriptions and the emotions of the characters, plus the grammar and the technical side of writing, specifically, the spacings in each line/paragraph, this could actually be more intense and horrific.
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To be honest, I felt like the plot lacked more gruesome details. I don't know about you, but I'd like a horror story with more on the scary side--the kind that could give me nightmares. But that's just me. This is still a good start for a first novel, so kudos to you for being able to finish it! :D Thank you for sharing!
Keep writing and getting better! You have a bright future ahead of you. :D