Loved it so far!
I’m sorry but I didn’t have a lot of time, so I read only the first two chapters of this story. But I felt like I needed to leave a review on this novel. I love the tone and the direction of the story and your writing is spot on. I’d say you're a fairly decent writer, and you definitely have a lot more stories in you just waiting to come out.
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One thing I did notice, however, is the kind of tense you use in your sentences. As in, the past, present, and future tense. There were many sentences where you started off with the present and then switched to the past tense. You need to be careful of errors like this, because it dissuades an avid reader from continuing to read the book.
Besides this issue, I didn't really notice anything else amiss in the first two chapters. Of course, you can improve your writing skills and make the story stand out even more, but great job anyway!