Great intros to different Myths and Legends
Overall: First, I want to start off by praising this authors flow/structure of story telling. It was gripping, engaging, and very organic. Second, the author understands the rules of crafting a story and it prominently shows here with the amount of thought given into her plot.
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Grammar: While most of the story was consistent, minor mistakes were found. Its understandable considering when you write and edit your book countless times, you manage to overlook simple mistakes.
Example: Chapter two, when your character was talking to Appa, there was two pieces of dialogue that had commas, indicating an accompanying sentence, but nothing was there. So those should be periods. Stuff like that I found. Incredibly small and easy to overlook, but it did not disrupt the story one bit.
Inspiration: This book, to me, is a mash of Spiderwick Chronicles and the TV show, "Grimm" with sprinkles of myths and legends. I do not know if you have watched these, but if not, I HIGHLY suggest you do. Sometimes, our best inspirations can come from things similar to our liking. Who knows, seeing these two things can help get more ideas flowing, help writers block if it ever happens etc.
I personally will keep a close eye for your next chapter! Keep on writing!