Interesting premise.
A great premise, but too much needless exposition. The action got a tad repetitive,.... It could have been more effectively delivered - and a lot shorter. The change of POV didn't work. Her thoughts were at times interesting, and some lovely turns of phrase here and there. I loved that she was a free agent in this. I like how the end game left the protagonist heading for a steaming pile of chaos and recrimination!
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Chaos. No plot. English as a second language. Yet the occasional phrase or descriptive or vignette that is interesting because of the unusual word choice - the Heathrow-Vilnius chapter had a couple that stood out among the mish-mash of wrong words and non-sequencers. I'd love the chance to work on one of the chapters though - make it into something reminiscent of Craig Raine's "History: A Home Movie." Because that's kind of what it reminded me of. This could be the sort of thing that works on Galatea - because it was kind of a graphic novel without the graphics.
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