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Hard to put down.

Let me start by saying that there are a ridiculous (lol) number of chapters which most will find daunting, UNTIL you take them a few at a time like a combined series of books. If you love Game of Thrones or the Lord of the Rings be prepared to get hooked in the variety & depth of characters & sub-plots.
You'll thoroughly enjoy this!

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Interesting read

It's refreshing to see a western novel and, with some minor tweaks in sentence structure, etc, this little ditty is sure to please.

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A story that lingers

Aside from the fact that this novel is written in such an engaging and realistic way, the main character, Cooper, is heart-wrenchingly sympathetic and endearing. You find yourself rooting for him with every page, as aside from a debilitating photographic memory and traumatizing event, he's the everyday man in a palpable way. Every character on every page is painted with emotionally vibrant and all too human brushstrokes.
The expected twist in the end is refreshingly unexpected as, again, Cooper faces the tragedy that has run parallel to to his life and haunted his every step, in a deeply emotional way.
Bravo.
By the way, you got ME to read a book that's deeply entrenched in baseball, so it must be well written.
Addendum: Upon reflection, enough cannot be said about Greg McLaughlin's descriptive characterization of Cooper's photographic memory affliction. Anyone who has suffered Post Traumatic Stress Disorder or elevated levels of anxiety can easily relate to his battle to maintain a level of normalcy in his life.
Yes, the novel lingers on the mind like fine wine on a discerning pallet.

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Parallel Universes

This book combines elements of many popular storylines and redesigns them into a mysterious journey through parallel universes. As the first book in the series, each chapter builds in momentum and character development luring the interested reader to want more. The book ends by introducing more wonderous elements that fans of science fiction and fantasy are sure to love.

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Thoroughly engrossing Fairy Tale

This is a little gem, reminiscent of H.C Andersen, with several familiar characters sure to please the heart of any children's story fan.
Some minor tweaks in grammar and spelling will help.

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Great start!

Since it's still in progress, I want to encourage this writer. The story is developing very nicely. There are a few rough spots in wording and places where less glibness in remarks may be better. But that might change as the story progresses.
I look forward to more chapters in the near future.

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Enticing

The first chapter of a work in progress shows promise as the main character is disenfranchised and vulnerable. The chapter ends with hints of otherworldly elements to come in future chapters.
The plot is, needless to say, not developed one chapter in.

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Thought provoking

True Color was my favorite, but read them all to find yours.
You will.
As a compilation, the first is heartwarming but does jot do enough to lure the reader as the remaining pieces are worthy of attention.

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A great start!

I wish to encourage this author to continue this endeavor as it shows potential, especially considering the fact that this is a first attempt at writing and a rough draft.

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Intriguing start

With only two completed chapters, this story shows promise of relating a troubled character trapped in an unusual otherworldly circumstance. The writing displays uniqueness of character and, at times, humor that needs to be developed to its fullest potential. It would be fascinating if the author took it to another level, that of relating it to an average person's feelings of displacement in this world! I.e. - One incorrect step leading to a wholly unfamiliar realm... See, I told you this story awakens the imagination.

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The promise of a Real Swashbuckler!

The plot seems to be a unique twist to a well known & enjoyed theme. With only two chapters completed the promise is there. The writing style is crisp and, at times, quite humorous which keeps the reader engaged. The first chapter, at this preemie stage, seemed a little disjointed, but was steadied with the second and I can imagine as the story continues stabilizes even further.
Great promise, especially after a little finessing, is shown for a real swashbuckling story in just these first two chapters!

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Intriguing

Three chapters in and I'm excited about this finely crafted start! The interactions between the siblings are fluid and natural; yet each has their distictive personalities evident in the text. The plot is intriguing and overall it smacks of a young Sherlock Holmes.

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A true 'Find'

Within the first 3 sections, CNDelo has introduced characters of surprising depth & complexity within, what appears to be, a multifaceted story of regret, recklessness & love within a functioning dystopia.
Well done.

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Suspenseful, binge-reading fun

Litherland takes his crime novel and meshes it with a ghost story to create a page turning, binge worthy novel that thrills audiences of both genres.

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Surprisingly good.

The descriptions & imagery is palpable and well done. Some slight editing is needed in spots. The flow of the story and character development is very good, as is the mixture of violence and mysticism. It will be very interesting to see where the story goes from Chapter 9.
Recommended.

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Unusual

The biggest problem I had was in language/interpretation, but the story is told in a creative, dare I say, florid way that I found very interesting. With some adjustments in grammar for an English audience it can easily find it's niche.

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A work in progress

The author's style is concise, meticulous yet 'full bodied' in that so much is conveyed in the story's abbreviated style. It successfully leaves the reader wanting more. I eagerly anticipate the remaining chapters.

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Waves Break on Unknown Shores

I am not a fan of this genre, not even a little bit. I read the entire book within a couple of days and enjoyed it. I would enjoy a prequel or side novel from Wayne's perspective, as his was the most complicated and rewarding character.

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Interesting Storyline

This is a quick read with a highly interesting storyline.

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Disappointing

An intense read and a thoroughly intriguing plot. But, in my opinion, there are too many inaccuracies that ultimately derail the story.

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