Star Wars: The Jedi Wars--Struggle of the Sith
**I REALLY like the idea of telling a Star Wars story from the vantage of a YOUNG Padawan Yoda! Very unique! Interesting to think that what we see as Yoda's most famous saying, "Do, or Do not...There is no Try,' would have come from HIS master!Read the story now
After the Borg
I really like the premise for After the Borg by bunnyears. Those of us who are Star Trek fans, most of us have seen those episode of the Next Generation of the ST series: ol' Captain Jean-Luc Picard, always of control of his emotions--almost to the degree of a Vulcan! But after being captured and assimilated by the Borg, that veneer had been tarnished...
This piece, what I personally call a prose, takes that angle! I would have liked to see a deeper dive into Picard's emotional-state--perhaps dealing with some unspoken fears, loves, and other psychological vulnerabilities being captured by the Borg must have done to Captain Picard. Perhaps author bunnyears might follow-up; maybe even a short story or novella?
"Winds of Aerathiea"
I've always loved Steampunk sub-genre, so "Winds of Aerathiea" was a treat to read about how a crew could actually use an airship in contemporary times! Which, by the way, was a challenge of any plot that takes place in contemporary times--and author T.E. Adams came up with a good, & logical premise for such "Skycruisers."
On Inkitt ebook reviews, I make sure NOT to spoil, so let's just say that Adams application of a popular sub-genre like Post-Apocalypse America had a refreshing twist & was key to the logic of having that Steampunk airship in the story.
Adams' treatment of the characters was very humane. I do remember from Composition classes that quotation marks at the end of sentences should be: Oh, So-and-So said, I like your money "problems." as an example. Good job!
This was an excellent read! It was like watching a modern, low-key Horror movie, but in words! The banter between Asher & Bastian is realistic, & the situational-plot just as real. The progressive treatment of the relationship between the protagonists is a PLUS!
My only suggestion is to write from only one Point of View--either First Person or Third, in "Welcome Home"'s case... Honestly, one of the best pieces I've read on Inkitt!
I don't know the age of the author, Michael Cassata, but I'm guessing he's young; maybe around 18 to 20 years old? But the "mechanics" of his grammar are excellent!
Being a published SciFi author myself, I'm biased for ANYTHING SciFi to Paranormal-related. I really like the fact that Tracer is taking on a very mature & global issue of Privacy in modern times; & how Cassata used the protagonist to deal with it, especially from a Millennial's point of view!
Only thing I would suggest is perhaps a little more narrative for the setting of the story & a little bit on the major characters (eg, "government guy"...what agency is "he" from?). Otherwise, good job!
ABSOLUTELY gripping tale, from the vantage point of FN-2187 (Finn)! Without spoiling, it's a very good story that helps Star Wars fans "fill in the blanks" about FN-2187's obvious incongruent life as a Stormtrooper in the Galactic First Order...good job!Read the story now
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