Review of Chapter One
Overall, this is an okay start. Some of your descriptions are pretty original and nice to read. I also think you've done well in creating your own world.
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However, there are many grammatical errors so I would suggest going back and checking your punctuation, spelling and word arrangement. For example, you use the word 'fornicating' quite a lot and I'm wondering if that's the right word to use or if you're thinking of a different word.
Also, you reveal a bit too much background detail about the protagonist. I would suggest altering that so that you can reveal a little at a time and keep the reader interested.
Furthermore, there is quite a bit of telling and not showing, thus you should also try and correct this to keep the reader even more engaged.
With this, I hope that you'll soon have a stronger first chapter.