I'm only a few chapters in, but I did want to go ahead and write my review while some things that stood out to me were still fresh on my mind. Most of my observations pertain to the first chapter, especially. I noticed that the imagery was a bit short and choppy in the first chapter. It didn't flow that well which is surprising because, in the subsequent chapters, the imagery was beautiful. I also noticed that it was very difficult to follow who was speaking because there were so many conversations going on at once, so I wasn't sure whether she was talking to the person on the phone or the people in the room with her. There also seemed to be some missing transitions. For example, in one sentence Gabrielle is at home with her dad and in the next, she is suddenly at the place Ava is decorating. There are a lot of issues in the dialogue punctuation wise. Mostly in the sense of there being a period where there should be a comma so that the dialogue flows instead of coming to an abrupt halt. Speaking of the dialogue, some of it doesn't really flow naturally as a conversation should. Sometimes, it feels as if it is just there to move the story along but has no true relevance. There are also a few grammatical errors that do hinder readability in a few spots.
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Now, on to the good stuff. Your characters are really well developed. Ava's character in particular really leaps off the page. I truly enjoy the friendship between Gabrielle and Ava as they seem to be the perfect example of opposites attracting. Your imagery is absolutely lovely and I would love to see a bit more of it. The action scenes are extremely well written and the way that you build suspense is very impressive. You really have something great here and with a little polishing, this story will only get better. If I may suggest, try running a few of your chapters through Grammarly for clean-up purposes. For the most part, it's free and will teach you alot about common grammar mistakes. It has been a complete life saver for me. all in all thus far this is a very enjoyable read.