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Beautifully written

The story does take a little time to get going, but it is written so beautifully that you honestly don't mind a little extra background or scene setting. You have an amazing talenf tor imagery. I have found very few authors that can illustrate a scene quite so vividly. The plot of this story is sound and intriguing especially with the way that Harry is written. There are a few grammatical errors that can kind of make the story hard to read or briefly pull you out of the world that you've created but they are very simple mistakes. Such as misspelled words, sentence fragments and missing or improperly used plurals. However, none of these things take away from the fact that the author is exceptionally talented and this story is fantastic.

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Lovely!

Ok, so I will preface this by saying that this typically isn't my genre, but nevertheless, I still found this story quite thrilling. There were likely a few grammatical errors but none so severe that they impacted my ability to enjoy the story. I really have to take my hat off to you and your use of imagery. It's just the right amount. I see alot of authors here that tend to shy away from it or are quite simplistic and vague with it. Yours is as close to perfect as I've seen thus far. The only minor critique I have is the length of your chapters. Other than that, great job!

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Excellent plot!

I'm only a few chapters in, but I did want to go ahead and write my review while some things that stood out to me were still fresh on my mind. Most of my observations pertain to the first chapter, especially. I noticed that the imagery was a bit short and choppy in the first chapter. It didn't flow that well which is surprising because, in the subsequent chapters, the imagery was beautiful. I also noticed that it was very difficult to follow who was speaking because there were so many conversations going on at once, so I wasn't sure whether she was talking to the person on the phone or the people in the room with her. There also seemed to be some missing transitions. For example, in one sentence Gabrielle is at home with her dad and in the next, she is suddenly at the place Ava is decorating. There are a lot of issues in the dialogue punctuation wise. Mostly in the sense of there being a period where there should be a comma so that the dialogue flows instead of coming to an abrupt halt. Speaking of the dialogue, some of it doesn't really flow naturally as a conversation should. Sometimes, it feels as if it is just there to move the story along but has no true relevance. There are also a few grammatical errors that do hinder readability in a few spots.

Now, on to the good stuff. Your characters are really well developed. Ava's character in particular really leaps off the page. I truly enjoy the friendship between Gabrielle and Ava as they seem to be the perfect example of opposites attracting. Your imagery is absolutely lovely and I would love to see a bit more of it. The action scenes are extremely well written and the way that you build suspense is very impressive. You really have something great here and with a little polishing, this story will only get better. If I may suggest, try running a few of your chapters through Grammarly for clean-up purposes. For the most part, it's free and will teach you alot about common grammar mistakes. It has been a complete life saver for me. all in all thus far this is a very enjoyable read.

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Nicely done!

The plot is a very simple one that is really relatable. I love the relationship between P&J. It is the very epitome of a healthy relationship and totally couple goals. The only critique that I would offer aside from a few minor grammatical errors is more personal choice than anything. The imagery is fairly vague and subtle which works for keeping the flow of the story going, but can be a bit of a hindrance in allowing a reader to become fully immersed in the story. For example, saying that all the houses were identical is great but doesn't really paint a picture for me. I like to see things in my mind and I wasn't able to do that as much with this story as I liked. Other than that, this is a great read and I'm loving it thus far.

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A real page turner!

First, I must commend the author on a well crafted and well thought out plot. Werewolf stories are a very popular genre on Inkitt and it soon gets to a point where it feels like if you've read one then you've read them all. Thank you for breaking the mold in that regard and stepping out with something a little different. I understand that this is unedited so I won't say much about the grammar issues. Instead, I will focus on the brilliance of Phoenix still smelling human even though she is a werewolf and the masterful way she used that to her advantage. I am nearly at the end of the book but wanted to pause for a minute to tell you how amazing I think this story is. Great job!

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Incredible!

This is an amazingly well thought out plot. It's very unique to anything that I have ever read before. The abuse scenes are quite chilling which is a compliment to the author's gift with imagery. It makes it quite easy to sympathize with the protagonist and wish good things for her by the conclusion of the story. Great job!

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Great plot!

I love the plot of this story is so sweet and adorable. I look forward to watching how things progress with Nick and Alivia. The story is however a bit difficult to read because of numerous grammatical and punctuation errors. Such as overuse of commas in the dialogue and dialogue bunched up with imagery which can make it hard to follow what is happening and who is speaking. Over than that, great job!

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Suspenseful

I am a big fan of the Sci Fi/Fantasy genre and this story certainly didn't disappoint. This story is wonderfully written. Blinding Light is a masters class in imagery and tension building. I was drawn in immediately after reading the prologue and first two chapters. At the time of writing this review, I am still reading this story but so far I am totally hooked. If there is any critique that I can make it would be that I didn't much care for the 12 year time jump. I would like to know more about what transpired in that long stretch of time, but perhaps more will be revealed as the story goes on. I am also looking forward to learning more about how she came to be adopted by her royal family. Suffice to say, I am addicted and can't wait to see how the story unfolds.

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Exceptional Writing

The dialogue for this story is extremely engaging which is impressive as many authors tend to struggle with dialogue almost as much as they do with imagery. I love the concept of this story it is so unique and stands out from the run of the mill werewolf story. I particularly appreciate the fact that the wolves have their own name to help better establish the separate identity. It drives me batty when a story says "my wolf" five thousand times. I am mostly intrigued by Caelynn's inner turmoil when it comes to Erik. Her struggle is what I think really holds the reader's attention. It is so palpable. This is a brilliant piece of literary work and I can't wait to finish it.

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Exceptional Writing

The dialogue for this story is extremely engaging which is impressive as many authors tend to struggle with dialogue almost as much as they do with imagery. I love the concept of this story is so unique and stands out from the run of the mill werewolf story. I particularly appreciate the fact that the wolves have their own name to help better establish the separate identity. It drives me batty when a story says "my wolf" five thousand times. I am mostly intrigued by Caelynn's inner turmoil when it comes to Erik. Her struggle is what I think really holds the reader's attention. It is so palpable. This is a brilliant piece of literary work and I can't wait to finish it.

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Favorite so far

This story is literally one of my favorites on inkitt to date. It hooked me right from the summary which is a testament to the brilliance of the story's plotline. I have been able to relate to the characters immediately as they are so well developed. The antagonist is written so vividly that I already despise him as a person even though he doesn't truly exist. The author has a real gift with imagery that improves more and more with each chapter that I have read. I have enjoyed every bit of this story and I can't wait to see how the story continues to unfold. Well done!

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