Lei André

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The Epitome of First Love

First and foremost, I have to say I am in love with Paradice! She is the perfect personification of how

most teenage girls (and even young adult girls) would react and go through to the ups and downs of first love. Her attitude, her sense of humor and her witty character is just the perfect icing on top! Second, I love the way it is written in a realistic approach and not one of those fairytale happy endings. It really shows how not all first loves end the way we want them to be but the lessons and the experience we have felt are what makes up keep them close as memories, reminding us over and over again how real it felt to have those feelings and searching for them again with someone new. Third, I love her friendship with Ray and the others. It just shows that even though you're in a relationship and it just didn't work out, it's always comforting to know that someone has your back through it all. Fourth, the way the story is told is just so engaging, it makes you want to devour each chapter just to know what's gonna happen next. I personally am a busy person but after reading a few chapters I am so hooked I couldn't put my phone down for one second! Though there were some grammatical errors, sentence structures that were in need of improvement, I know that the author can easily repair those because well - let's just face it - the story is awesome. It's light, interesting, hilarious and really just gives you sense of nostalgia while relating to the colorfully-written characters and wishing you were one of them (haha!) Lastly, I would really recommend this book to anyone I know. To every girl who had fallen in love and who has yet to fall in love, this is a story you don't want to miss!

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An Entertaining Read

First and foremost, I still can't get over the first chapter. Revealing what their struggle was about in the first part of the first chapter was genius! It was really a good start.
Anyways, I like the idea of Alice Walker as this strong woman who knows what she wants and is aware that through struggles and challenges is what makes a person resilient. Plus, I sense that she has a dark side as implied from her "dark" past and that she has idealistic principles of a Hufflepuff ("Doing the right thing, just because.").
Now for the AFIs (Ares for Improvements), I have to say the book isn't perfect yet. After all, it's not finished yet and it still needs editing. But, I hope you may find these helpful:
Grammar-wise, there are errors in need of correction. Diction matters since each word has a specific meaning which can either support or break the sentence structure depending on how you use them so you have to be very careful. Also, there are words that need to be spelled out rather than be written in shortcuts (ex: hr).
As for your writing style, since your book is Contemporary Romance, consider how to approach each scene in a more natural way. You don't need to speed things up, sometimes readers like to take time and know more about the specific events.
Lastly, the dialogue needs more refining. Interesting thing about making dialogues is that you get to channel into your character and role-play a bit in order to achieve the scene you have in mind. As a reader, I like to read books with characters I can relate and aspire to and find myself invested with the characters and picturing myself in their shoes.
Aside from those AFIs, I believe this book has potential - especially since as a romantic I like the transition of the interaction between Alice and Nicholas.
Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more.

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Worth At Least A Quick Read

I have a few things to say about this book and why it's worhy to be read.
First up, interesting plot point. I like how you managed to incorporate some psychological properties here. I could definitely see some influences of Synesthesia from the heroine. The reason why I mentioned Synesthesia is because of the way your writing style describes emotion as if they are perceived directly by our different types of senses may it be touch, sight, smell or taste.
Second, with great power comes great responsibility. Cliché but I feel like the way the heroine uses her power borders more on selfish reasons rather than selfless acts which is good because that leaves room for character development. I find it intriguing to see where her moral compass leads her.
Third, the character's diction is appropriate to their personality and the setting of the plot. A lot of people neglect to consider this and would unknowingly insert coloqial terms here and there without considering the theme, the mood and the direction where the setting takes place.
Lastly, this is more than a romantic book (assuming that it is - I'm not entirely sure). Still, I'm a romantic and I prefer romantic books over most genres. However, from how the story is heading I wouldn't mind if you put off any romantic possiblilities. Though, I am intrigued of thw main heroine sharing a love triangle woth the prince and Briar.
So far, that's all I can say. For the AFIs (or as I put it, areas for improvement): minor grammar errors - nothing a few editong won't fix.

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It lives up to its title

Thought-provoking and poignant, each piece takes you on a ride through a deep hole of intense emotions and a powerful metaphysicality of words. The use of different elements, the amalgamation of words was beautifully crafted and breathtaking in its rhythmic pace.
The style isn't entirely unique but it is seldom to come across with and very far from ordinary.
Nevertheless, above it all, the content definitely lives up to its title.
I would totally recommend this.

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