liragreen

Lincoln, NE

I'm an English major. Most of my writing stays hidden, but a random Twilight fanfiction task in my writers' group helped me strengthen my writing. I appreciate reviews and constructive criticism.

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Creepy, terrifying... Edward at his worst/best

This was a great read. I loved the suspense at the beginning; the not knowing what exactly happened or was happening. And the end was perfectly disturbing. I have really come to like Darkward (probably because reading between the lines of his character makes it pretty obvious that the perfect, flawless Edward isn't exactly all he's cracked up to be), and this was Darkward at his best. Or worst.

I appreciated that you kept this story to a one-chapter oneshot. So many authors drag things out. I think this story is better for being short and to-the-point.

My oneshot, You Never Forget Your First, was my attempt at showing how all of Edward's tendencies and characteristics could easily be construed in a dark sense. I'd love for you to give it a read and tell me what you think. It seems that we have a similar view on his character's potential.

Thanks for writing this. I'm glad I stumbled upon it.
Lira

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