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Good punctuation? I think I'm in love

The past few books I have read on this app have been pretty decent. They were good enough, but this author sure knows what she's doing. The first paragraph had me swooning! I'm a sucker for descriptions and this book delivered in only four chapters!
I've been around the block a few times, I'll admit, but when I read the description I was a little worried. I have read so many just okay famous guy x not-famous girl fics that I was having flashbacks to seeing emojis and blocky paragraphs. This book restored my faith in these types of books. I cannot wait to read some more!

Cute Little Story

I love the writing style that the author uses. They are very expressive with their words and always cut straight to the point.
The only thing that I could find to constructively criticize were the character introductions. It's not often that you are told thing about a character by the narrator right away. There's good reason for that too. Introducing different character traits at different times help to make a character more dimensional (both the character and the narrator too). There was really only one other thing that bugged me and it was the lack of quotation marks. Including them really helps the readers enjoy the book more!
All and all, a good start to the book. There are enough varieties of characters that the story feels full and there are interesting dynamics already beginning to form with the four chapters.

400 Days in the Apocalypse

The book was on a good premise. The start was promising. I was just thinking that by the time we hit the 16th chapter we would have established a larger goal than just surviving. With some development, I believe that this story can be amazing. To do so, I would write more chapters, and go over what you've already written and proofread a bit. So far it's a promising book.