Maisy Menold

Seattle, Washington

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Delightful!

What a delightful story! I adore your characters. They are vibrant and delicious. The plot moved very consistently and was not stagnate. I would have liked to see a little more with Marcel and Henry, I felt that they could be developed into a delicious subplot or twist. Other than that, I really liked it. The French dialogue was delicious to read and built into the ambiance of the book. I look forward to reading more of your works. Merci Beaucoup!

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Soar!

I"m very new to reading this genre with shifters. However, your alluring eagle has me very intrigued and hooked! I love that your heroine was not a petite pencil sized girl. She was curvy, she lacked self-confidence, she struggled and when she found acceptance it was out of pure love. That is what we all wish for. Thank you for this beautifully written story of the Lakota people and their traditions, especially their language and lore. I can't wait to read more!

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Hail to the Chief!

McLaughlin has made heroes of what cynics consider villains by creating politicians that actually give a damn about the people they serve. His characters and the development of this intriguing plot keeps the page turning for sure! I'm excited to see where McLaughlin will take this book and his characters. I can't wait to read more!

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Powerful Page-Turner

In this powerful page-turner, the reader is drawn to the familiarity of family pain and discord. Throughout it, the revolving inference of family history and circumstance sets the underlying tone and the ultimate hope for change, love, and acceptance. Matthew Arnold Stern weaves his diverse characters plights, emphasizing how kindness sparks community in a harsh world. Told in multiple first person, Stern engulfs the reader into the plight of his characters, both separate, lost, and trying to find themselves, but ultimately each other. I hope to read more of his work.

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Impressive!

I cannot fathom how young, you are as an author. At seventeen, I wasn't half the writer you are, and I know if you keep perfecting your craft you will be successful.

Your characters need a little more depth. This is easier achieved by writing your point of view from a limited third person than an omniscient third. In a limited third or a first POV, you find the raw emotions, the conjecture, the motivations. This does not have to be just Dylan's side of the story. You could likewise do Jack's or David's or Ann's in that limited 3rd per chapter. I challenge you to read each chapter. Who is that chapter about? Who do you want to tell it? Write it. You don't have to keep it. You could stay with the Omniscient 3rd and use the limited as part of the writing exercise. What is great about this exercise is that your characters will speak. They will tell you their stories.

This book's plot is great, but in drama, there must be hope. Where is Dylan's hope? Or David's? What is going to keep them climbing out of bed in the morning? Resolution is great but by the end, we want to see wounds mending not blood staining the bandages. I'm not asking for a happy ending. I'm asking for your characters to have a genuine closure that your reader can relate to as well. The final scene--total set up for a sequel. Well done!

Overall, I'm so impressed by your work. Please keep writing! You have a true gift! Remember, writing is 90% Revision!

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Great Story

I really like your characters, especially Blaine and Kerri. I felt that some more development of Hannah's true angst beyond Blaine and that Chris' wife would have had more issues with Lynn being there, even if she was dying. I really liked this book, but please consider hiring someone to edit it or use Grammarly to do chapter by chapter. Thank you again for such a great book!

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Short and Sweet

What a sweet story! I loved how brash and hot-tempered Bane was in his attempts to demonstrate that he wasn't a playboy or spoiled by his own fame, he really was just that. Anna needed more depth to her. She was sweet, but the fact that she was just taking everything at face value, there wasn't enough about her in it. While Bane was full-bodied in his character development, I wanted Anna to be more than a pretty paper doll. Your erotica scenes were really well done. Overall, I thought it was a great story and I look forward to reading more from you!

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AMAZING!

Wow, that was SO HOT! I cannot wait to read the rest!

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