Maisy Menold

Seattle, Washington

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Delightful!

What a delightful story! I adore your characters. They are vibrant and delicious. The plot moved very consistently and was not stagnate. I would have liked to see a little more with Marcel and Henry, I felt that they could be developed into a delicious subplot or twist. Other than that, I really liked it. The French dialogue was delicious to read and built into the ambiance of the book. I look forward to reading more of your works. Merci Beaucoup!

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Soar!

I"m very new to reading this genre with shifters. However, your alluring eagle has me very intrigued and hooked! I love that your heroine was not a petite pencil sized girl. She was curvy, she lacked self-confidence, she struggled and when she found acceptance it was out of pure love. That is what we all wish for. Thank you for this beautifully written story of the Lakota people and their traditions, especially their language and lore. I can't wait to read more!

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Hail to the Chief!

McLaughlin has made heroes of what cynics consider villains by creating politicians that actually give a damn about the people they serve. His characters and the development of this intriguing plot keeps the page turning for sure! I'm excited to see where McLaughlin will take this book and his characters. I can't wait to read more!

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Powerful Page-Turner

In this powerful page-turner, the reader is drawn to the familiarity of family pain and discord. Throughout it, the revolving inference of family history and circumstance sets the underlying tone and the ultimate hope for change, love, and acceptance. Matthew Arnold Stern weaves his diverse characters plights, emphasizing how kindness sparks community in a harsh world. Told in multiple first person, Stern engulfs the reader into the plight of his characters, both separate, lost, and trying to find themselves, but ultimately each other. I hope to read more of his work.

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In Awe

I am so impressed with your writing. When you asked for feedback about your ending, I was glad to read a werewolf romance as that is like my guilty pleasure. Both of your books have been delightful, but this one I am most impressed. I have to admit that I appreciate your resolution more than the traditional happy ending. To your credit, their "natural resolution" rather than being forced into something not real for either of them, created a perfect ending to this story. (I don't want to give away the ending to the new readers).

I suggest that you check out grammar/punctuation tools like Grammarly, which is compatible with Inkitt and can be used as you upload each chapter. I am fond of it because it will tell you the actual rule behind its edit, and when you learn to do something, then it will become second nature. Keener understanding of formatting multiple POV's. It is challenging to write from a male perspective and this is where its most important to have a guy beta reader and tell you if he would think that way. That was my biggest challenge writing a multiple first person for my first book, and I was thankful for my beta readers.. My favorite book for this was Characters and Viewpoint by Orson Scott Card. See if you can get a used copy somewhere. This is book you will want in your own library. Mine is well worn and marked up from years of use. Yes, there are newer books out there, but I will tell you this, I think Card's book is far superior. If you've never read his works, I suggest you do so. He's a brilliant writer. What's more the best advice I got as a teenager was this: The more you read, the better you write. The more you write, the better you read.

I feel that this novella could easily be expanded to a full length novel, and I believe would be a published novel. You have a real gift, Ashley. I'm serious. I wish I wrote half as well when I was 14! Please keep honing your craft and writing more delicious werewolf romances!

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Hot for Teacher

I savored and devoured this amazing book and I am crazy about Greavsie. The Educator is well written with rich descriptions that make you feel like you are there in the midst of it all. I'm a voracious reader and this book really kept me on edge to a point that I couldn't put the book down! I was blown away by the author's character development and how well woven they were throughout it. The plot arc was spot on with a gripping climax and a satisfying closure. If there is a way to encourage the editors to put this on the Summer Reads list, please tell me how! I shared it on facebook in hopes that others would read this great book as well! I can't wait to read more!

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Impressive!

I cannot fathom how young, you are as an author. At seventeen, I wasn't half the writer you are, and I know if you keep perfecting your craft you will be successful.

Your characters need a little more depth. This is easier achieved by writing your point of view from a limited third person than an omniscient third. In a limited third or a first POV, you find the raw emotions, the conjecture, the motivations. This does not have to be just Dylan's side of the story. You could likewise do Jack's or David's or Ann's in that limited 3rd per chapter. I challenge you to read each chapter. Who is that chapter about? Who do you want to tell it? Write it. You don't have to keep it. You could stay with the Omniscient 3rd and use the limited as part of the writing exercise. What is great about this exercise is that your characters will speak. They will tell you their stories.

This book's plot is great, but in drama, there must be hope. Where is Dylan's hope? Or David's? What is going to keep them climbing out of bed in the morning? Resolution is great but by the end, we want to see wounds mending not blood staining the bandages. I'm not asking for a happy ending. I'm asking for your characters to have a genuine closure that your reader can relate to as well. The final scene--total set up for a sequel. Well done!

Overall, I'm so impressed by your work. Please keep writing! You have a true gift! Remember, writing is 90% Revision!

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Great Story

I really like your characters, especially Blaine and Kerri. I felt that some more development of Hannah's true angst beyond Blaine and that Chris' wife would have had more issues with Lynn being there, even if she was dying. I really liked this book, but please consider hiring someone to edit it or use Grammarly to do chapter by chapter. Thank you again for such a great book!

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Short and Sweet

What a sweet story! I loved how brash and hot-tempered Bane was in his attempts to demonstrate that he wasn't a playboy or spoiled by his own fame, he really was just that. Anna needed more depth to her. She was sweet, but the fact that she was just taking everything at face value, there wasn't enough about her in it. While Bane was full-bodied in his character development, I wanted Anna to be more than a pretty paper doll. Your erotica scenes were really well done. Overall, I thought it was a great story and I look forward to reading more from you!

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AMAZING!

Wow, that was SO HOT! I cannot wait to read the rest!

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