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An atmospheric rags to riches to rags tale that I tore through. I was riveted by the plight of Richard. Which of us out there hasn't dreamed of wealth and fame? If given it, then suddenly had it taken away, imagine the depths of our despair. I liked how you only used a little dialogue with other characters. I think it emphasized his sense of isolation and despair. I actually caught myself gasping out loud when children pointed at him in the street.
Thanks for the great read!
How can this story not hit home in a community of writers? I am so happy (and a little frightened and ashamed) that of all times in my life I read this story now. I have a novel in the running right now for the Grand Novel Contest. I wrote it twenty years ago and it's been languishing on my hard drive since. Something recently told me to send it out somewhere. After I submitted it, I started working on a story (not sure if it's going to be novel or novella) that I thought up in college, many many years ago. That was a long, drawn-out and somewhat self-serving way of saying you really know how to appeal to, and attack, your target audience.
I was drawn in from the beginning paragraphs. I knew the hook was coming but I didn't know how until the very last lines. Bravo! Excellent read!
Now if you'll excuse me, I'd really better get back to writing...
Such a simple idea, the monster in the closet, but presented in a unique way that really creeped me out. Great story-telling. No one ever knows what they're going to get when they get into a relationship with a step child and you tapped into that apprehension, that innate fear of the unknown. I really enjoyed this short, simple scary tale. Thanks for the good read!Read the story now
I'll be following this one
I was very happy to see this listed as a work in progress because you have really engaged me with the characters and the beginning of the story. I care about these characters. I want Alex to realize she is heading down a pad path and stay on the straight and narrow. But then again I kinda don't. I want Elise to get a hold of herself and realize she's going to piss away a good relationship with her paranoia, but of course that is what is going to drive this story.
From a technical standpoint, erotica is definitely a good genre for you. The scene in Chapter 3 was very well-written and "engaging" to say the least.
Good start. Looking forward to reading more.
Creepy, entertaining read!
A very entertaining read! The vampire tale told in a quick, in-and-out manner. The identification of the attackers as the "blue-haired man" and the "black-haired man"gives the reader enough of a mental image to picture them while filling in the gaps on his or her own. I especially liked the link with the cautionary tale by the primary attacker and the title. Neat stuff! Thanks for the good read.Read the story now
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