So I am no poet expert, and I feel you cannot critique poems because their a written reflection of the writers heart and inner most emotions and beings but I adore your stanzas and the personifications you use especially with the pillows, surrounding as a shoulder to cry on, chest to lean on e.t.c but to fully grasp your writing capabilities I am going to need for you to write me, you have raw potential, all you need to do is to refine it by practicing; writing and writing some more. I do love the poetic composition you have written but like I said I am no expert but it was in my IGCSE Cambridge syllabus, what I learnt from that, years ago. Always have cohesion, the stanzas must wind and flow like a river and I feel so far that yours does, as I said. I do need to read more to assess it better.
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