Mesantos

Curious but Engaging

This is a decent story that I chose to read at random. The descriptions, particularly, can be very good. Very dynamic. There was some redundancy and overwriting, but my biggest complaint is the plot itself. It starts off interesting, then it becomes weird (not in a bad way), then it becomes weird in an unexplained way that left me confused. SPOILERS: Do the fish-people not have any emotions? How could the little girl forget the love she had for her father, even if he was a touch overprotective? Or the love he had for her? And if she harbored resentment, why wouldn't she explain his mistake, if there was any? The fish-people come off as pretentious and cold, with the man proving to be the hot, beating heart of the story. Which means the story seems to be about how a man lets himself be taken advantage of by fish-people who don't care about him, when all he desires is a family to love who won't abandon him. If that assessment is true, then what's the point of reading the story? I'm hoping there's some symbolic message I'm missing that's more positive, haha. The human nature in this is real and commendably written, but the fish-people nature is off from what we know to be typical biological instinct. That makes this story less interesting for me. Still, good luck and keep on.

Interesting

I love pieces that explore human nature and this seems, at the outset, to be such a piece. I'm not sure it is, but the writing is good. Great attention to detail and some good descriptions. The only downsides are that I'm not sure what we're supposed to be learning (what is 'worth it'? The pain to get to the sea; the pain of living to have lived; life due to the past? What?), which leaves me wondering why I read the piece to the end, and then some redundancy and misspellings. Other than that, it's a fun, explorational work. I could see this expanded into a longer short story where we get to glimpse back at the man's life and what made everything 'worth it'.

A Dynamic Power-Blasting Adventure

It's difficult to write by-chapter reviews since everything is written so consistently. So, I think it would be better to address points on the whole. I read up to chapter six. First, this is an action-packed story. The characters are always moving and in conflicts of both the physical and emotional variety. The characters are intense but relatable. Secondly, it is a unique concept. Giving attributes to different foods and those foods bestowing powers is a fun premise. Thirdly, the writing style is reminiscent of comics so that I can picture the scenes in my head easily. The biggest downfalls are in the lack of punctuation and a few minor plot holes. I also think it would be easier to read if dialogue tags were joined with their dialogue and some of the action paragraphs broken up. Otherwise, it's a solid story. Keep up the good work and thanks for letting me read!