Michael Robinson III

Amazing Potential

“TYRANNUS” by Tamuril is a collection of poems whose concepts switch between history and philosophical ideas. Overall the poems are brilliant together and represents the tone of the book brilliantly both individually and together.

Honestly beyond the basic technical techniques of writing I don’t like to offer much on a poet’s writing style. Because I don’t know if a certain line or stanza was written the way I read it on purpose or not. Including punctuation. Being that poetry overall is an expressive discipline. Therefore, I offer to just keep a look out for the basics such as word choices and make sure the arrangement is still understandable to the random reader.

The poems individually, as I said overall idea wise is amazing, however, I would offer to make sure the idea is completely expressed and that the picture or idea you are painting with words is full. I think this goes for the more philosophical pieces just because I couldn’t tell right away which pieces were historical or philosophical, but that could be just me.

I would still encourage others to read this book because the writings are good. I would say keep writing and refining your style because I do want to see more in the future.

A story full of promise

Slave of Fire: The Weeping End is a story ful of potential and reflects the imagination of its author. An important characteristic for any fantasy genre book.

The characters themselves are well developed as far personality and differation. However, the story lacks character drive. Keeping in mind the story is in third person and considering that the air of mystery surrounding Gabriel, Pryor, and the others is intentional. Which I personally loved and is actually one of the main reasons I kept reading so eagerly. This is unless your remember the information gave in the blurb.

The main characters, Cai and Jai appear to lack an objective or end game both collective and separate. Jai focuses on her relationship or having a relationship with Gabriel while events happen to Cai, but she doesn't pursue them. Rather she takes the effects. They both seem to be curious about Pryor and the others origins, Jae more than Cai, but it's not a motive behind their overall actions. This results in the story being more told rather than taking place in front of the reader and connecting the characters actions to what happens next. This also makes Jai more of a supporting character unless she is ment to be.

The plot as a result appears not to have an objective or at least it is difficult to see where the story is going and what the characters (Cai and Jai) are after if they themselves are ment to be after anything. This makes it unclear whether the mystery of who or what Gabriel and the others are, if you take away blurb, the girls adjusting to their new home, or locating legion 13 is the focus of the plot. This question isn't really answered until Cai's confrontations with Freyr and the part outside his room.

This is the other reason I really had to force myself to put down the book. Because I wanted to know where the plot was going. This isn't bad, as long as their are nudges or hints in the characters' actions or interactions. Especially with the book being in third person and access to majority of the characters' thoughts. Considering the end I would say it's between the girls adjusting and locating legion 13. If this the case it wouldn't hurt to show the latter in interactions between Pryor and Gabriel or any of the others. Even with Cai's dreams.

Again overall the book is a great read that I would definitely recommend. Taking away the blurb I love the mystery surrounding Pryor and the others, but the plot needs a little more guidance considering the ending can leave you with questions rather than answers.

Also be sure to be clear on which character is doing what or you are referring to. For instance f you use the name of one character at the beginning of a sentence and sentence that follows is referring to another character's reaction use that character's name rather than a pronoun. That is help the reader follow a lot better.

A skillfully written story

'William Jordan, an Assassin's Tale' is an invellaping tale full of excellent imagery that puts the reader along side William as he goes about his life. The three dimensional characters causes you to become full invested in the main characters adding to the suspenseful moments when you have to keep reading to see what happens next. I found the personal development of William very interesting and his conflict with to give up killing and not give up killing relatable. Since every person can understand giving up an obsession or source of pleasure.

As far as grammatical errors I found little to none in this read. At most there were only missed free spaces. This definitely a story I could again and again and it not loss the same feel it when I first read it.

A worthy read

Nyx’s demons is a captivating story with beautiful imagery and a storyline full of nothing but potential. Though there were only seven chapters I found the characters to be intriguing and their interactions between each other to be just as curious. Even if you are familiar with the relationship between the Greek gods the developing plot as well as the character Nyx still opens up a new story that can't quite be guessed at.

The recommendations I have for the author is to be sure the directions you give the characters are clear about how is doing what. Also make sure that the plot is not rushed. I did think that it was at first, but only because I thought the story was going to be one of a girl with finding out or rediscovering who she really is. However, I am not disappointed because the way the story is going now opens up great possibilities for the plot that most people would expect in a sequel. I can't wait to see where the author takes this story.

An insightful read

'Dear Prudence' by EricrCohen is a well written peck into the people's lives that found themselves affected by the world of Rock n' Roll at its height. the characters are well developed and relatable. Their backstories and unique motives or drives adding a layers of color to the story while at the same time not overshadowing Prudence's story. In fact they add to her growth and understanding of her father. Prudence's story in particular really gets the reader to think about the lives of kids who find themselves both blessed and cursed with celebrity parents. The plot is well thought out developed; not seeming rushed at all. Creating a book that throws you in an invested in the characters. Advice I could offer to enhance the book is make sure you make clear when the reader is reading a side character's story and the main story. Other than that the story has much potential.

A fine example of true art

'The BOG: King of the Swamp' by XJS seems to be more of a tv/movie drama or thriller that is wonderfully designed to make the read think. Going off the idea that Ruffus is both an embodiment and metaphor for nature's backlash against humans for their negligence against it and a helper or supporter for those with it, this story is beautifully crafted and intertaining. The back stories of the characters and how they intertwine whether directly or indirectly makes the story interesting and leaves the reader guessing what is going to happen next. It's a fun read that once you understand how it is being told or why is full of meaning.

A great sequel

'Secrets that Children Keep' by Lauren Massuda is a great sequel to its prequel 'Secrets on the Walls'. It's imagery remains just as captivating as the first. The plot was well developed and to see the sisters face their own trials and grow in their own way was very interesting. You learn more about the characters as well as the worlds that the grandmother has created. Eventually becoming more curious about the dark side of them that is reflective of the grandmother's past. Especially when seen against worlds such as the one where King Simon and his family live. It definitely doesn't conform to "the sequel doesn't stand up to the prequel" rule and is an enjoyable read in its own right.

A refreshing renewal on a classic topic

'New' by Annie E takes the new girl at a new school plot structure and gives it a renewed zeal that is alluring and definitely keeps the reader interested. As of what I have read the characters are all well developed and relatable even the supporting characters which is hard to do sometimes. Natasha's stroy especially I can't wait to find more about and how her friends help her while on thier trip.

As for grammar and punctuation as far as I could tell their were no major problems. I through look over by an outside party will be just fine and I will love to read more once the story is complete.

Full of potential

'Keep Your Promise' by Sabitha kiritharan has a lot of potential as story with characters that are very interesting and I will definitely love to more back story on respectively whether done in this book or later in other books. Although the book as it is now lures the reader in with a story that keeps the reader guessing it ends or jumps abruptly that leaves the reader half satisfied.

I'm not too clear on how the other characters that are introduced come to cross paths with the main character. Leaving the events that occur in the end unclear. Over all the story is full of potential but need to be expanded on. After that I would love to read the story again.

A worthy read

'Secrets on the walls' by Lauren Massuda is a capitivading read with well developed characters and an intriguing and creative plot. The story also carry great lessons on sibling relationships and society in Victorian England. The imagery, characters, and settings are clear and eye catching creating a well constructed universe for the reader to delve into.